Opportunities— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific example. Correct the verb forms and avoid repeating structures such as “I used to.” Use “had many opportunities,” not “has a lot of opportunities,” and say “opportunities,” not “abortionities.” The phrase “make it to use” is unnatural; use “reuse it” or “turn it into useful products.” Also, use linking words such as “For example” and keep the answer to three or four well-organized sentences.

Example: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, when I was in third grade, I attended a seminar on recycling paper. I learned how to recycle old paper and reuse it to make simple crafts. It was interesting because I became more aware of protecting the environment.

Suggestion: Give your opinion once and support it with one or two clear reasons. The answer contains repetition of “I believe” and is difficult to follow because several ideas are joined without punctuation or linking words. Say “use their phones all day” rather than “using phone all the day,” and replace “scroll or learn new things” with a clearer contrast, such as “spend less time scrolling and use that time to learn.” Explain the benefit of trying different activities, such as developing skills or discovering new interests.

Example: Yes, I think people should try different activities whenever possible because there is always something new to learn. For example, instead of spending all day scrolling on their phones, they could take up cooking, sports, or a language course. This can help them develop new skills and discover interests they did not know they had. In my opinion, people are never too old to try something new.

× Yes, I used to participate and has a lot of abortionities to take part in new activities as a child.

✓ Yes, I used to participate and have a lot of opportunities to take part in new activities as a child.

The phrase used to refers to a repeated situation in the past, so the coordinated verb should also be in the past form. Use have, not has, after the subject I. Also, the correct spelling is opportunities.

× As far as I remember when I was in third grade I used to I attended a seminar of recycling paper.

✓ As far as I remember, when I was in third grade, I attended a seminar on recycling paper.

The sentence incorrectly combines used to with attended. These structures should not be used together in this way. Use either I used to attend or I attended. Because the speaker is describing one specific past event, I attended is the better choice. Commas also help separate the introductory and time clauses.

× As far as I remember when I was in third grade I used to I attended a seminar of recycling paper.

✓ As far as I remember, when I was in third grade, I attended a seminar on recycling paper.

The usual preposition after seminar when describing its topic is on, not of. For example, say a seminar on recycling paper.

× I learned in that seminar how we can recycle paper and make it to use.

✓ I learned in that seminar how to recycle paper and make it usable.

The structure make it to use is not correct in this context. After make it, use an adjective to describe the result, such as usable. The structure how to recycle also makes the sentence more concise and natural.

× Yes, I believe that people should try a lot of different activities as I believe there is no age for learning I believe that instead of using phone all the day, people can scroll or learn new things and grab new opportunities for them.

✓ Yes, I believe that people should try many different activities because there is no age limit for learning. Instead of using the phone all day, people can scroll, learn new things, and take advantage of new opportunities.

The original sentence contains several independent ideas joined without appropriate punctuation or conjunctions, creating a run-on sentence. Divide the ideas into separate sentences and use because to show the relationship between them. Avoid repeating I believe unnecessarily.

× Yes, I believe that people should try a lot of different activities as I believe there is no age for learning I believe that instead of using phone all the day, people can scroll or learn new things and grab new opportunities for them.

✓ Yes, I believe that people should try a lot of different activities because I believe there is no age for learning. Instead of using the phone all day, people can scroll or learn new things and take advantage of new opportunities.

A singular countable noun such as phone normally needs a determiner, so use the phone when referring to the device generally in this context. The natural expression is all day, not all the day.