Opportunities— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct minor errors (e.g., "couldn't cope with" not "cope up with") and finish the thought so the answer is complete within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes. My parents signed me up for dancing and singing classes when I was a child, but I was very shy so I quit after a week or two. As a result, I didn’t gain much from those classes, and I mainly felt uncomfortable interacting with other students.

Suggestion: Give a direct opinion followed by two clear reasons using linking words, and avoid trailing off. Use precise phrasing (e.g., "find their future" → "discover a career path") and finish the final sentence with a full idea. Keep answers to 2–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I think people should try many different activities because they can discover a career path or a personal passion. For example, trying singing or dancing might help someone realize they want to study music, and it also builds confidence and new skills.

× I always quit after one or two weeks because I couldn't cope up with the students there or the.

✓ I always quit after one or two weeks because I couldn't cope with the students there.

The phrase 'cope up with' is incorrect; the correct phrasal verb is 'cope with' (preposition usage). Also the sentence ends with an incomplete clause 'or the.' Remove the fragment to complete the sentence. Suggestion: use 'couldn't cope with' to express inability to manage the situation in the past. Note: this also relates to incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11) and sentence fragment (ID 26), but primary correction applied to the preposition and completeness.

× I feel like people should try as many different things as they can because they can find their future in there or they can discover a passion there.

✓ I feel like people should try as many different things as they can because they can find their future there or discover a passion there.

Using 'in there' after 'find their future' is unnatural and redundant; 'there' alone suffices. Remove 'in' to correct the preposition usage. Also streamline the sentence by removing the redundant second subject 'they' before 'discover' for smoother style.

× Uh, so looking back, I would absolutely regret what I did and if I had that opportunity today, I would go for, uh, singing because I have realized I.

✓ So looking back, I would absolutely regret what I did, and if I had that opportunity today, I would go for singing because I have realized it now.

The original ends abruptly with 'I.' Complete the thought by adding the object 'it' and a time marker 'now' for clarity. 'Would absolutely regret' is a correct conditional with past reference; maintain tense consistency. Adding 'it now' completes the clause and clarifies the realization. Also remove filler words 'uh' for clarity.