Opportunities— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant and gives useful details, but it has some grammatical errors, awkward phrasing and slightly repetitive parts. To improve, make your main point in one clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms and articles, and add linking words for coherence. Keep it concise (no more than 3–4 sentences). For example, correct “That's what decided to train us to be reporters” to a clearer phrase such as “where we were trained to be reporters,” and change “There were practice interviewing people” to “We practised interviewing people.”

Example: I did. As a child I attended a communications camp where we were trained to be reporters. During the camp we practised interviewing people, wrote short news stories and spoke on camera, which greatly improved my confidence and speaking skills.

Suggestion: Your answer shows a positive opinion but is unclear and contains grammatical errors and vague phrases. To improve, start with a clear topic sentence stating your view, then give one or two specific reasons connected with linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “as a result”). Use correct articles and plural forms and avoid filler words. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I think people should try many different things because it helps them develop new skills and meet new people. For example, learning a new hobby can teach problem-solving and expand your social network, which can lead to new opportunities.

× That's what decided to train us to be reporters.

✓ That's where they trained us to be reporters.

The original uses an incorrect passive construction and 'what' is misused. Use 'where' to refer to the camp and a correct active verb form 'trained'. This makes the meaning clear and fits past tense context.

× There were practice interviewing people, writing short news stories and speaking on camera which really improved my confidence and speaking skills.

✓ There were practical exercises in interviewing people, writing short news stories, and speaking on camera, which really improved my confidence and speaking skills.

'Practice' was used incorrectly as a noun without an appropriate modifier; 'practical exercises' or 'practice sessions' is correct. Also add commas and 'in' to show what the exercises involved and a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which...'.

× the new thing that we learn is improve our skills and they can express networking to other people and may and may help you to learn a new things.

✓ New things that we learn improve our skills, help us network with other people, and may help us learn new things.

Multiple issues: tense and verb forms must be consistent (use present simple 'learn' and 'improve'), 'express networking' is incorrect — use 'help us network' or 'help us connect with others', remove duplicate 'may and may', and fix pluralization 'a new things' to 'new things'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and parallel structure in the list of benefits.