Opportunities— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn về thời điểm và hoạt động cụ thể, ngữ pháp cần chỉnh để thì và trật tự từ chính xác, và nên chia câu ngắn gọn (không quá 5 câu). Dùng thêm từ nối để mạch lạc (for example, such as, and then) và cung cấp một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ tên hoạt động, cảm xúc hoặc kết quả). Ví dụ sửa các vấn đề: chuyển thì về quá khứ (I had), sửa cấu trúc 'when I was a child', và dùng cụm từ đúng như 'I tried new activities with friends'.

Example: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities when I was a child. For example, at kindergarten I joined arts and crafts and simple team games with other children. These experiences helped me become more social and confident, and I enjoyed learning new skills.

Suggestion: Cần trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng và sau đó đưa ra lý do cụ thể kèm từ nối để mạch lạc (because, therefore, for example). Sửa ngữ pháp (e.g., 'when the opportunity comes' và tránh lặp từ 'your or your'). Nên giới hạn độ dài tối đa 3–4 câu và nêu một kết quả cụ thể của việc thử nghiệm (kỹ năng, kinh nghiệm, kiến thức).

Example: Yes, I believe people should try as many different things as possible because it broadens their skills and knowledge. For instance, trying new hobbies or jobs can reveal hidden talents and improve confidence. Therefore, taking opportunities helps you grow personally and professionally.

× Yes, I have opportunities to take part in new activities as a child like when I childhood I go to kindergarten and have new activities with new friends and have a choice trying

✓ Yes, I had opportunities to take part in new activities as a child. For example, when I went to kindergarten I did new activities with new friends and had the chance to try different things.

The student mixes present and past tenses and uses incorrect verb forms ('have' instead of 'had', 'I childhood I go' is ungrammatical, 'have a choice trying' is incorrect). Use past tense to describe childhood experiences. Also improve sentence structure by splitting into two sentences and using correct verbs: 'had', 'went', 'did', 'had the chance to try'. Suggested improvement: when speaking about past events, consistently use past tense verbs and simple sentence structures.'

× I think yes because when the opportunity is come in you need to try it, you need to know what you can do and what you can try I think it's good for your experience or your or your knowledge.

✓ I think so, because when an opportunity comes you should try it. You need to find out what you can do and explore possibilities. I think it is good for your experience and your knowledge.

Errors include incorrect modal/auxiliary forms and tense ('is come' is wrong; use present simple 'comes'), awkward modal choice ('need to try' is acceptable but 'should try' is more appropriate advice), run-on sentence and repetition. Improve by using correct verb form 'comes', using 'should' for recommendation, breaking into shorter sentences, and removing repetitions. Suggested improvement: use present simple for general statements and 'should' for recommendations.