Opportunities— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Clarify vocabulary and sentence structure, correct grammar, and be more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid confusing words (e.g., 'escaping competitions' seems incorrect), use linking words to connect ideas, and limit to 3–4 concise sentences. Provide a specific example (what the activity was, what skills you developed, and one result).

Example: Yes. As a child my parents encouraged me to join school art and craft clubs, and I eagerly took part. For example, I attended a weekly drawing class where I practised composition and color techniques, which helped me develop my artistic skills. As a result, I made friends who shared my interests and won a small school art prize.

Suggestion: Make sentences grammatically correct and concise, use linking words for coherence, and provide a specific, concrete example. Correct tense and word choice ('realize' -> 'realized', 'source course' unclear). Limit to 2–4 sentences and mention a clear outcome. Use varied but relevant vocabulary (discover, explore, strengths, career path).

Example: Yes, people should try different activities because it helps them discover their strengths and interests. For example, last year I took several short design courses and realized I had a talent for graphic design, which led me to pursue a creative career path.

× I also learned to escape from a young age who is helped me deploy my artistic skills and meet other kids who share my interest.

✓ I also learned to escape from a young age, which helped me develop my artistic skills and meet other kids who share my interests.

The original sentence misused 'who is helped' and 'deploy' and had agreement issues. 'Which' is the correct relative pronoun referring to the situation ('learning to escape'), and the past participle structure should be 'helped' without 'is'. 'Develop' is the appropriate verb for improving skills, and 'interests' should be plural to match 'other kids'. Suggestion: use 'which helped me develop my artistic skills and meet other kids who share my interests.'

× I used to train twice a week to improve my technique before completing.

✓ I used to train twice a week to improve my technique before competitions.

The final word 'completing' is incorrect; it appears to be a wrong form or misspelling. The intended noun is likely 'competitions'. 'Used to' correctly indicates a past habitual action, so replace the gerund with the noun 'competitions.'

× Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can because it helps them discover their strength and interest.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can because it helps them discover their strengths and interests.

'Strength' and 'interest' should be plural when referring generally to people discovering multiple abilities and interests. Use 'strengths and interests' to match the plural sense. Also 'as many different things as they can' is correct.

× For example, when I took several source course last year, I realize I'm good at design where which lead me to choose a creative career path.

✓ For example, when I took several short courses last year, I realized I'm good at design, which led me to choose a creative career path.

Multiple errors: 'source course' is incorrect — likely 'short courses' or 'a short course(s)'. Use plural 'courses' with 'several.' Tense: 'realize' should be past 'realized' to match 'took.' The relative clause needs 'which led' (past tense) not 'where which lead.' Also add a comma before the relative clause. Suggestion: 'when I took several short courses last year, I realized I was good at design, which led me to choose a creative career path.'