Part 1
Examiner
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Candidate
When I was a child, I had many opportunities to try new activities. My parents encouraged me to enroll in different activities like sports and music classes, and I also joined various school clubs and went to summer camps. For example, I tried swimming, hiking and creative crafts, which helped me make friends and develop my confidence.
Examiner
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Candidate
Yes, I believe people should try as many different things as possible because it broadens one's horizons and helps them discover new interests and talents. For example, learning a musical instrument can develop discipline and creativity while volunteering allows you to acquire practical skills and expand your social network.
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Score: 88.0Suggestion: 回答自然且信息充实,但可稍微精简、增加连贯衔接词并提供更具体的细节(例如时间、频率或具体经历),以提高表达的说服力和丰富性。另外注意句子长度不要超过五句。
Example: Yes. I had many chances to try new activities as a child because my parents signed me up for weekend music lessons and summer sports camps. For instance, I attended swimming lessons twice a week and joined a summer hiking camp when I was ten, which helped me build confidence and make close friends.
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Score: 90.0Suggestion: 回答清晰且有理有据,但可以用一两个连接词使论证更连贯,并加入一个简短的个人见解或具体例子来增强说服力;保持不超过五句。
Example: Yes. Trying many different things broadens your horizons and helps you discover new talents. For example, when I learned the guitar I became more disciplined and creative, and volunteering at a local charity taught me teamwork and practical problem-solving skills.
× Yes, I believe people should try as many different things as possible because it broadens one's horizons and helps them discover new interests and talents.
✓ Yes, I believe people should try as many different things as possible because it broadens their horizons and helps them discover new interests and talents.
错误类型:12(Incorrect use of pronouns,代词使用不一致)。原句中先用不定代词 one 的所有格 one's,随后又用复数代词 them,造成代词参照不一致。建议在一句话中保持代词的一致性。两种改法:要么全部用泛指代词 one(…broadens one's horizons and helps one discover…),要么全部用复数代词 people/their/them(…broadens their horizons and helps them discover…)。这里根据前文使用 people,故改为 their 和 them。