Tiredness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 先直接回答“通常不太会”，再用一两个具体原因解释。避免重复“I”和“I also”，并将“keep my good condition”改为更自然的“stay in good shape”或“stay healthy”。最后一句关于未来计划与问题关联较弱，可以删去。

Example: Not very often. I try to stay healthy by exercising in the morning and eating nutritious food. If I do feel tired, I take a short break and relax.

Suggestion: 直接说明你通常在什么情况下感到疲惫，例如忙了一整天之后。将“my whole day work”改为“a full day of work”，并避免“Listening by listening”这种重复表达；可以用“listen to music”连接具体的放松方式。注意使用正确搭配，如“call my friends”和“talk to each other”。

Example: I usually feel tired after a full day of work, especially if I’ve been busy. To unwind, I take a shower and listen to some music. Sometimes I call a friend for a chat, which usually lifts my mood.

Suggestion: 避免用“there are a lot of things to do”开头，因为问题是问你实际会做什么。按清晰顺序描述一到两种习惯，并修正语法：“something that I like”“I like to stay alone”。最后的旅行计划表达不完整，可以改成“plan a trip”，并说明这样做如何帮助你放松。

Example: When I feel tired, I usually take a shower and read a book for a while. I often prefer to be alone so I can relax without distractions. If I have more energy, I might plan a short trip, which gives me something to look forward to.

Suggestion: 先明确回答“Yes”或“No”，例如“Usually not”。删去重复词和填充词，并用自然表达说明你会优先休息；“my feeling must put the important position first”不符合英语表达习惯，可改为“my well-being comes first”。最后简洁说明会和朋友改天见面。

Example: Usually not. If I’m tired, I prefer to stay home and get some rest because I know I’ll enjoy the outing more when I feel better. I’ll let my friends know and suggest meeting another day.

× I usually feel tired when I finish my whole day work.

✓ I usually feel tired when I finish my work for the whole day.

“my whole day work”中的名词组合不自然，结构不清楚。可以说“my work for the whole day”（我一整天的工作），也可以说“a whole day’s work”。

× Listening by listening some music and sometimes I also telephone my friends to talk with each others.

✓ I listen to some music, and sometimes I also call my friends to talk with each other.

原句以“Listening”开头，但没有明确的主语和完整谓语，因此是句子残缺；“by listening”也与后面的“listening”重复。可用“I listen...”组成完整句子。

× Listening by listening some music and sometimes I also telephone my friends to talk with each others.

✓ I listen to some music, and sometimes I also call my friends to talk with each other.

表示“听音乐”时，动词“listen”后面需要介词“to”，应说“listen to music”，不能说“listen music”。

× Listening by listening some music and sometimes I also telephone my friends to talk with each others.

✓ I listen to some music, and sometimes I also call my friends to talk with each other.

“each other”表示“彼此、互相”，是固定形式，不加复数词尾“-s”。因此应说“each other”，不能说“each others”。

× After that I eat something what I like and read books.

✓ After that, I eat something that I like and read books.

“something”后面需要用“that”引导定语从句，表示“我喜欢的东西”。不能用“what”直接接在“something”后面。也可以说“something I like”，省略“that”。

× Sometimes I also like to talk with my friends, but most of the time I like stay alone.

✓ Sometimes I also like to talk with my friends, but most of the time I like staying alone.

“like”后可以接动词-ing形式，也可以接“to + 动词原形”，但不能直接接动词原形“stay”。这里改为“like staying”；也可以说“like to stay”。

× To plan a new To make a new traveling plan.

✓ I like to make a new travel plan.

原句是未完成的动词不定式短语，没有完整的主语和谓语，因此不是完整句子。需要补出完整句子结构，例如“I like to make...”。

× Most of the time I'm not go out with, with my friends, uh, when I feel tired because I think umm, my feeling uh, must put the important position first after, uh, after I will, uh, told my friends I'm very tired.

✓ Most of the time, I don't go out with my friends when I feel tired because I think I should put my feelings first. Then I'll tell my friends that I'm very tired.

这里描述的是通常会发生的习惯，应使用一般现在时。否定句要用“don't + 动词原形”，所以应说“I don't go out”，不能说“I'm not go out”。

× my feeling uh, must put the important position first

✓ I think I should put my feelings first.

原句把“my feeling”放在句首，却没有表达清楚是谁把什么放在优先位置，句子结构不完整。可以用“I”作主语、“put”作谓语，并把“my feelings”作宾语，表达“我应该优先考虑自己的感受”。

× after I will, uh, told my friends I'm very tired.

✓ Then I'll tell my friends that I'm very tired.

“will”后面必须接动词原形，因此不能说“will told”，应说“will tell”。如果使用“after”引导将来时间状语从句，从句通常也用一般现在时，例如“after I tell my friends”。

× Then when I feel better, we we can go out in another day.

✓ Then, when I feel better, we can go out another day.

表示“改天、另一天”时，“another day”前通常不加介词“in”。因此应说“go out another day”，而不是“go out in another day”。