Tiredness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer the question directly and avoid repeating the same idea. “Washly” is unclear; use “usually” or “almost every day.” Also, the final sentence is contradictory: if you do not have severe fatigue, it is not accurate to say that your condition is unhealthy. Use one clear reason or example to develop your answer, and connect ideas with a linking word such as “because.”

Example: Yes, I often feel tired, especially after a busy day. I usually get enough sleep, but I still feel slightly exhausted almost every day because I spend long hours studying.

Suggestion: The answer contains several unclear phrases, such as “I feel tasks” and “in the long time.” State the specific times when you feel tired and organize them logically. You could mention a main period, such as after lunch or in the evening, and explain what causes the tiredness. Avoid listing every part of the day unless you can explain the difference.

Example: I usually feel tired in the afternoon, especially after lunch. I also become tired in the evening because I have often spent several hours studying or working. Mornings are generally easier for me because I have more energy after sleeping.

Suggestion: Give a clear sequence of actions and use natural expressions. “Listen to the music” should usually be “listen to music,” and “attend a part of my sketching skills” is unclear; use “practise sketching.” Avoid repeating “skills” and explain briefly why these activities help you relax. Use linking words such as “then” or “after that” to make the answer easier to follow.

Example: When I feel tired, I usually listen to music and do something creative. For example, I practise sketching or calligraphy in English and Mandarin. Writing letters and Chinese characters helps me relax and takes my mind off my work.

Suggestion: The main idea is clear, but the reason sounds unnatural and focuses on what your friends think rather than your own choice. Use a more natural phrase such as “I prefer to stay home” or “I cannot fully enjoy myself.” You could also mention what you do instead. The answer should be concise and avoid the awkward expression “going to recreational activities.”

Example: No, I usually stay at home when I feel tired because I cannot fully enjoy myself or concentrate on a conversation. Instead, I have a quiet evening, listen to music, and go to bed early. I meet my friends when I feel more energetic.

× Yes, I frequently feel tired I feel tired washly every single day with no exception, not even a single day.

✓ Yes, I frequently feel tired. I feel tired almost every single day, without exception—not even one day is free from tiredness.

The original sentence contains a run-on sentence because two independent clauses are joined without appropriate punctuation or a conjunction. Also, washly is not a correctly formed English adverb. Separate the ideas into two sentences and use a standard adverb such as almost or usually.

× I feel tasks throughout the day at any time, in the morning, in the long time in the afternoon and in the evening as well.

✓ I feel tired throughout the day, at any time—in the morning, in the afternoon, and in the evening as well.

Feel tasks is not a grammatically appropriate verb phrase for expressing tiredness. Use feel tired. The time expressions should also be arranged in a parallel list, with in the used consistently before each part of the day.

× When I'm feeling tired, I listen to the music and to later attend a part of my sketching skills and calligraphy skills in both English and Mandarin.

✓ When I am feeling tired, I listen to music and later practise some of my sketching and calligraphy skills in both English and Mandarin.

Music is used in a general sense here, so it does not normally take the definite article the. The original structure incorrectly joins listen to with to later attend. Use parallel verbs: listen and practise. Some of is also more natural than a part of when referring to practising skills.

× For calligraphy, I write English alphabets and Mandarin characters on the piece of paper and an exercise book over again.

✓ For calligraphy, I write the English alphabet and Mandarin characters on a piece of paper and in an exercise book repeatedly.

English alphabet is normally treated as a singular expression, so alphabet is preferable to alphabets. Use a piece of paper when the paper has not been mentioned before, rather than the piece of paper. The correct preposition for writing in an exercise book is in, not on. Repeatedly is a clearer adverb for describing repeated practice.