Tiredness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer directly with a natural topic sentence, then give one clear reason and a specific example. Use “after school” and “go straight home,” rather than “after the school” and “came to home.” “Staff” is incorrect here; say “schoolwork” or “assignments.” Avoid repetition such as “yeah” and “really,” and do not describe tiredness as “boring.”

Example: Yes, I often feel tired, especially after school. I usually have a lot of assignments and activities during the day, so I sometimes go straight home and take a short nap. By the evening, I normally feel more energetic.

Suggestion: The response is incomplete and difficult to follow because it repeats “some problems” and “someone” and lacks a clear ending. Explain when you feel tired in a direct sentence, then add one specific situation. Use correct structures such as “when someone asks me to solve a problem” and “when my friends call me immediately after school.”

Example: I usually feel tired after school, especially when I have to deal with extra tasks. For example, if my friends call me as soon as I get home and ask me to help them solve a problem, I feel mentally exhausted because I have not had time to rest.

Suggestion: Give a clear main action first and support it with a reason. “Get away from a roll” and “in the hood hood” are unclear; use “take a break,” “go for a walk,” or “spend some time outdoors.” “Speak with myself” sounds unusual in this context, so explain that you enjoy quiet time instead. Keep the answer focused and avoid ending with repeated “yeah.”

Example: When I feel tired, I usually take a short break and go for a walk outside. Getting some fresh air helps me relax and clear my mind. If I am extremely tired, I simply stay home and take a nap.

Suggestion: The answer responds directly, but it contains repeated phrases and double negatives, such as “I don’t want to go nowhere.” Use one clear explanation and one natural alternative. Replace “breathing some” with “get some fresh air,” and avoid “from the hood” unless you mean a specific neighborhood. Use linking words such as “because” or “instead.”

Example: No, I usually stay at home when I feel tired because I do not have enough energy to socialize. I either go to bed early or take a quiet walk to get some fresh air. I prefer meeting my friends when I feel rested so that I can enjoy spending time with them.

× especially after the school

✓ especially after school

The noun school is used in a general sense to describe the activity or period of attending school, so it normally does not take the definite article the in this expression.

× I came to home and went to bed straight away

✓ I came home and went to bed straight away

The verb come is followed directly by home when home means the place where you live. We do not normally use the preposition to before home in this expression.

× So it's really boring, it's really I don't know exhausting.

✓ So I'm really bored and, I don't know, really exhausted.

Bored describes how a person feels, while boring describes something that causes boredom. Exhausted is also the appropriate adjective for a person who feels extremely tired. The verb be should be followed by adjectives in this sentence.

× I would feel tired if someone requires for me to solve some problems

✓ I would feel tired if someone required me to solve some problems

In a second conditional sentence, would is used in the main clause and the past tense is used in the if-clause. Also, require takes an object directly, so required me is correct; required for me is not correct here.

× if someone requires for me to solve some problems

✓ if someone required me to solve some problems

The verb require is followed directly by the person who must do something. The preposition for is not used between require and the person in this structure.

× someone just calling me straight away

✓ someone just calls me straight away

The sentence describes a general or repeated situation, so the simple present calls is needed. Calling alone cannot function as the main verb because it requires an auxiliary verb such as is.

× after that I'm taking the phone

✓ after that I answer the phone

For a usual or repeated action, the simple present is more appropriate than the present continuous. The natural expression for responding to a call is answer the phone.

× my friends are required for me to solve some problem

✓ my friends require me to solve some problems

The friends are performing the action, so the sentence should use the active voice: my friends require me. The passive form are required incorrectly suggests that the friends are the people being required.

× to solve some problem

✓ to solve some problems

Some usually refers to an unspecified amount greater than one when it is used with a countable noun. Therefore, the plural noun problems is appropriate here.

× while I'm speaking with my own self

✓ while I'm speaking with myself

Myself is the correct reflexive pronoun. The expression my own self is not normally used in this context. However, speak to myself would sound more natural when describing talking silently to oneself.

× I don't want to go nowhere

✓ I don't want to go anywhere

In standard English, a negative verb such as don't is normally followed by the indefinite pronoun anywhere, not the negative pronoun nowhere. Using both creates a double negative.

× I just want to sleep at home or just breathing some getting some fresh air from the hood and that's it's all.

✓ I just want to sleep at home or get some fresh air from the hood, and that's all.

The coordinated verbs should have the same form: to sleep or get. The phrase breathing some getting some fresh air is not grammatically structured. Also, the correct fixed expression is that's all, not that's it's all.

× and that's it's all

✓ and that's all

That's already means that is, so adding it's creates an unnecessary second verb and pronoun. The standard expression is that's all.