Tiredness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid fillers such as “uh.” Use the article in “a quite sedentary life” or, more naturally, say “a fairly sedentary lifestyle.” Replace “I try my maximum” with “I try my best.” Your answer is relevant and includes a clear reason and an example, but the explanation about not working and lacking time to be active is slightly contradictory because you still have time to go to the gym. Clarify that you spend much of the day inactive rather than saying you have little time.

Example: Yes, quite often. I think it is mainly because I lead a fairly sedentary lifestyle and spend most of the day at home since graduating. However, I try to stay active by going to the gym in the evenings and taking short walks during the day.

Suggestion: The answer gives a specific time and reason, which is effective, but it contains repetition (“just just”) and an incorrect phrase: “I drift into my sleep” should be “I doze off” or “I fall asleep.” Use “then go to sleep,” not “then going to sleep.” Add a linking word such as “as a result” to connect your heavy meal, lack of activity, and tiredness. “Scroll through my reels” is more natural than “scroll my reels.”

Example: I usually feel tired in the afternoon, especially after eating a heavy lunch. Since I normally eat at around 2 p.m., I often feel sleepy shortly afterwards. As a result, I find it difficult to stay awake and sometimes scroll through social media before taking a nap.

Suggestion: You provide a clear routine and useful details, but the sentence about your body is difficult to understand. Say “my body is telling me that it cannot do much more work and needs to rest.” Avoid repeating “take a short nap” twice, and replace “listen to my music” with “listen to music.” Use “otherwise” to link the alternative activity more naturally. Keep the answer to three or four well-connected sentences.

Example: When I feel tired, I usually take a short nap because I see it as a sign that my body needs to rest. After that, I often go for a short walk if the weather is pleasant. Otherwise, I listen to some music and relax for a while.

Suggestion: Give a clear “yes” or “no” at the beginning and avoid fillers and repeated phrases such as “after after” and “try my best.” The phrase “after my call after college” is unclear; say “since graduating from college.” Use “make the most of every opportunity” instead of the longer phrase “make use of each and every opportunity.” Your comparison with the past is useful, but express it more directly: “I would not have done this when I was still in college.”

Example: Yes, I usually do, even when I feel tired. Since graduating from college, I feel that my friends and I are gradually becoming less close, so I try to make the most of every opportunity to see them. I probably would not have made the same effort when I was still in college because we saw each other every day.

× Uh, nowadays I feel tired, uh, mostly because I live quite sedentary life.

✓ Nowadays, I mostly feel tired because I live quite a sedentary life.

The singular countable noun phrase sedentary life requires the indefinite article a. Use a before a singular countable noun when referring to one example of something.

× I feel mostly tired in the afternoons after having a heavy meal.

✓ I mostly feel tired in the afternoons after having a heavy meal.

The adverb mostly is more naturally placed before the main verb feel when it modifies how often or generally the speaker feels tired. This placement makes the sentence clearer and more natural.

× Usually I have my lunch at 2:00 and after that I don't really have anything to do so I just scroll my reels and then going to sleep.

✓ Usually, I have lunch at 2:00, and after that I do not really have anything to do, so I just scroll through my reels and then go to sleep.

The verbs scroll and go are joined by and, so they should have the same base form: scroll and go. Going is incorrect here because it does not match the structure. The preposition through is also needed after scroll when describing movement through content.

× Well I usually take a short nap when I feel tired because I feel it's the way my body communicates to me that they can.

✓ Well, I usually take a short nap when I feel tired because I feel that it is the way my body communicates to me that it cannot do much work and needs rest.

The pronoun they does not agree with the singular noun body. Use it to refer to body. The sentence also needs the complete idea that the body cannot do much work and needs rest.

× It can't do any much work and needs rest.

✓ It cannot do much work and needs rest.

Much is used with uncountable nouns such as work, but it cannot normally be used together with any in this structure. Use much work or any work, not any much work.

× Well I usually take a short nap when I feel tired because I feel it's the way my body communicates to me that they can. It can't do any much work and needs rest.

✓ Well, I usually take a short nap when I feel tired because I feel that my body is communicating that it cannot do much work and needs rest.

The first sentence ends with the incomplete phrase that they can, so the reader does not know what the body can do. Combine the ideas into one complete sentence with a clear subject, verb, and complement.

× So I try my best to go out with them even if I feel tired, which wouldn't be the case if it was in the past when I was in college.

✓ So I try my best to go out with them even if I feel tired, which would not have been the case when I was in college.

The phrase when I was in college refers to a finished period in the past, so the past conditional form would not have been is more appropriate for describing a situation that was different at that time. The unnecessary phrase if it was in the past has also been removed to make the time reference clear.