Tiredness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Keep answers direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific reasons. Avoid repetition and long clauses. Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly and watch grammar (articles, word order).

Example: Yes, I often feel tired. Because I study six different subjects every day to earn my diploma, I usually work long hours and feel stressed, so I need short breaks to recover.

Suggestion: Answer with a clear time or situation first, then give one specific example. Avoid overly long sentences and repetition. Use linking phrases like "for example" or "for instance" and correct quantifiers and number expressions.

Example: I usually feel tired when I have to write long essays, for example in my English class. If an essay is supposed to be 1,000–2,000 words, I often start losing focus after about 700 words.

Suggestion: Provide a concise topic sentence describing your main strategy, then add one clear supporting detail or example. Keep sentences short and avoid contradictory or confusing time references. Use linking words like "however" to show contrast.

Example: When I feel tired, I usually follow a time-management method: I work for one hour and then take a 15-minute break. For example, during the break I read a short chapter of a fiction book to relax.

Suggestion: Answer directly with yes/no and a brief reason, then give a concrete example. Avoid vague phrases and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like "because" or "so" and finish your thought fully.

Example: Yes, I still go out with my friends when I'm tired because social time helps me recharge. For instance, a short walk or coffee with friends usually restores my energy and helps me concentrate when I return to studying.

× It is because of huge amount of education practices that I have to do on my daily life such as I have to study six subjects daily to in order to get a diploma.

✓ It is because of the huge amount of educational practice that I have to do in my daily life, such as studying six subjects every day in order to get a diploma.

The original sentence has several issues that match 'verb in the past participle form' and related form problems: 'education practices' should be 'educational practice' (adjective form) and 'study six subjects daily to in order to' uses incorrect infinitive phrase order. Use the gerund 'studying' after 'such as' and 'in order to' should follow directly. Also add the definite article 'the' before 'huge amount' and correct prepositions ('in my daily life'). Suggestion: use adjective forms (educational), gerunds after 'such as', and correct preposition placement.

× I feel stressed out and lose my focus whenever I have to write long essays on in my English subject as writing long essays which consist of more than more than thousand to two thousand words, I generally lose my focus when I reach up to seven hundred words.

✓ I feel stressed and lose my focus whenever I have to write long essays for my English class; when I write essays of one to two thousand words, I generally lose focus when I reach about seven hundred words.

The sentence mixes tenses and has redundant and incorrect phrases. Use present simple consistently for habitual actions ('I feel', 'I lose'). Remove extra words ('on', duplicate 'more than') and use 'for my English class' instead of 'on in my English subject'. Replace awkward 'consist of more than thousand to two thousand words' with 'one to two thousand words' and 'reach up to' with 'reach about'. Suggestion: keep habitual present tense, remove redundancy, and use clear quantifiers.

× I feel very tired when I write more than my calculation.

✓ I feel very tired when I write more than I expected.

The phrase 'more than my calculation' is incorrect and unclear. Use a present-tense clause 'more than I expected' to express exceeding an anticipated amount. This keeps tense consistent and uses a correct comparative structure.

× I generally use the rule of thirty and five which is thirty minutes of work and then five minutes of rest, but that rule has not lately helping me right now and I have come up with a new method of taking a break of fifteen minutes and doing one hour of work.

✓ I generally use the rule of thirty and five, which is thirty minutes of work and then five minutes of rest, but that rule has not been helping me lately, so I have come up with a new method of taking a fifteen-minute break and then working for one hour.

The original uses incorrect verb forms: 'has not lately helping me right now' should be the present perfect passive/continuous 'has not been helping me lately'. Also use noun phrases 'fifteen-minute break' and 'working for one hour' (gerund/continuing action). Suggestion: use 'has not been helping' for an action that started in the past and continues, and use hyphenated time adjectives and correct gerund forms.

× I generally read fiction storybooks in my particular free time of fifteen minutes.

✓ I generally read fiction books in my fifteen minutes of free time.

'Fiction storybooks' is redundant; 'fiction books' or simply 'fiction' is better. 'My particular free time of fifteen minutes' is awkward; use 'my fifteen minutes of free time'. Also adjust word order for natural English. Suggestion: simplify noun phrases and place time expressions after the verb phrase.

× Well, I might be physically tired but to regenerate my mental feelings and also to have fun time I believe going out with friends is not something that I would be tired of, but would help me to gain more energy in myself.

✓ Well, I might be physically tired, but to refresh my mind and to have fun I believe going out with friends is not something I would tire of; it helps me regain energy.

Problems include awkward pronoun and reflexive use ('gain more energy in myself'), and incorrect verb choice ('regenerate my mental feelings'). Use 'refresh my mind' and 'regain energy'. Replace 'would be tired of' with 'would tire of'. Simplify pronouns and avoid unnecessary reflexive 'in myself'. Suggestion: use natural verbs for mental states ('refresh', 'regain') and concise pronoun use.

× Whenever I do that, it not only helps me to gain my focus back but also

✓ Whenever I do that, it not only helps me regain my focus but also restores my energy.

The original sentence is incomplete and has awkward phrasing 'helps me to gain my focus back but also' without completing the second part. Use parallel structure: 'not only helps me X but also Y'. Use 'regain my focus' and provide a parallel second result such as 'restores my energy' to complete the thought. Suggestion: ensure parallel structure and finish the clause.