Tiredness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the response more concise and correct repetition/grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler and repeated phrases.

Example: Yes, I often feel tired after travelling with friends. For example, long days of sightseeing leave my whole body exhausted, so I usually prefer to rest at the hotel rather than go out further.

Suggestion: Provide a direct topic sentence and add a specific detail about causes and consequences using linking words. Correct repetition and improve sentence variety.

Example: I feel most tired during long business trips because I often have little sleep and packed schedules. As a result, I usually try to catch up on sleep in the evenings and avoid extra activities the next day.

Suggestion: Give a clear opening statement and then list one or two specific actions with linking words. Avoid vague phrases like "do nothing" and correct collocation and tense errors.

Example: When I feel tired, I usually rest by sitting down and relaxing, for example on a bench or in bed. I often close my eyes to nap or drink a cup of tea, and sometimes I scroll through my phone to unwind.

Suggestion: Start with a concise topic sentence stating your general preference, then use linking words to explain exceptions and give a specific example of an urgent situation. Improve sentence flow and reduce repetition.

Example: It depends, but generally I prefer staying at home when I'm tired. However, if my friends have an important or urgent matter—such as a work meeting or a family emergency—I will go with them because it's necessary.

× Yes I often feel tired after going out especially when I go out to go out to travel with my friends.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired after going out, especially when I travel with my friends.

Redundant and awkward repetition 'go out to go out to travel' and missing commas. Use simple present 'travel' to match habitual action and remove repetition. Suggestion: keep sentences concise and use commas to separate clauses.

× I feel like really tired.

✓ I feel really tired.

The phrase 'feel like really tired' mixes 'feel like' (followed by a noun or clause) with an adjective. Use 'feel' + adjective: 'I feel really tired.' or 'I feel like I am really tired.'

× My whole body just feels so feels numb.

✓ My whole body just feels so numb.

Repeated word 'feels' is a duplication error. Remove the extra word to form a correct predicate. Also 'so numb' is acceptable to emphasize.

× It feels like it needs some rest and don't want to go anywhere far.

✓ It feels like it needs some rest and doesn't want to go anywhere far.

Subject-verb agreement with 'it' requires 'doesn't' not 'don't'. Also ensure pronoun reference 'it' consistently refers to the body. Suggestion: use 'my body doesn't want to go anywhere far.' for clarity.

× Especially on the long business long trips when I go out on long trips, I feel sleepy due to the lack of sleep.

✓ Especially on long business trips, I feel sleepy due to lack of sleep.

Redundant repetition 'long' and 'long trips'. Use 'long business trips' and remove 'the' before 'lack of sleep' for general statement. Keep tense present for habitual experience.

× I feel like really tired so I actually rest up after a long, long day.

✓ I feel really tired, so I usually rest after a long, long day.

Use 'usually' for habitual action rather than 'actually', and ensure comma before 'so'. Maintain present simple tense.

× Usually I just sit and do nothing when I feel tired, I just sit on a bench or a bed and just completely join out or sleep.

✓ Usually I just sit and do nothing when I feel tired; I sit on a bench or a bed and either zone out or sleep.

Comma splice corrected by semicolon and 'join out' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'zone out'. Remove redundant 'just' repetitions and use parallel structure 'either...or'.

× When I get tired, I don't do any works.

✓ When I get tired, I don't do any work.

'Work' as uncountable noun should not be plural 'works' in this context. Use 'any work' or 'any tasks'.

× I just scroll through my phone and have some drink when I'm tired.

✓ I just scroll through my phone and have a drink when I'm tired.

Missing article 'a' before 'drink'. Use 'have a drink' to indicate a singular beverage.

× Actually it depends if they have something urgent or something important or work then I just go with them if they just want to hang out with me then I usually reject them because I just want to get some rest from my body.

✓ Actually, it depends: if they have something urgent, important, or work-related, then I go with them; if they just want to hang out, I usually decline because I want my body to rest.

Run-on sentence with unclear connectors. Use commas and semicolons, and correct verb choices: 'decline' is more formal than 'reject', and 'want my body to rest' is clearer. Maintain present tense and use conditionals properly.

× I prefer staying at home rather than going out.

✓ I prefer staying at home rather than going out.

Sentence is grammatically correct; kept for completeness. Note: 'prefer staying at home to going out' is also acceptable. No change needed.