Tiredness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Give a direct, clear topic sentence that answers the question, then briefly explain the main reason with specific detail. Avoid unclear or incorrect words (e.g., “filtered,” “black things”). Use simple linking words like “because” or “when.” Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I often feel tired because I have many deadlines at work. For example, when I have several reports due in one day I feel stressed and low on energy.

Suggestion: Start with a clear time phrase or situation (e.g., “I feel tired when…”), then give a specific, coherent reason. Replace vague phrases with concrete descriptions. Use one linking word to connect the situation and reason.

Example: I feel tired when I finish a long workday, especially after standing or commuting for hours, because my energy is depleted by evening.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific activities and a short reason. Use natural phrasing (e.g., “I take deep breaths,” “I rest for 20 minutes”). Keep sentences concise and coherent with linking words like “so” or “then.”

Example: I usually take deep breaths and rest for 20 minutes to calm my mind. Then I might have a short walk to refresh myself so I can concentrate better.

Suggestion: Give a direct yes/no response and then explain briefly with specific details (how often, what you do when out). Use linking words such as “sometimes” or “usually” correctly and provide a clear reason why going out helps.

Example: Yes, I still go out sometimes with friends because it helps me relax. For instance, we might take a short walk or sit at a café so I can get some fresh air and feel refreshed.

× Yes, I've often filtered where I have deadline and black things to go on my work on my way. That's why I'm looking at it.

✓ Yes, I often feel stressed because I have deadlines and many tasks to do for work. That's why I feel that way.

The original sentence has unclear vocabulary and incorrect structure: 'filtered' is wrong verb choice and 'where I have deadline and black things to go on my work on my way' is ungrammatical. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Suggested improvements: use clear verbs ('feel', 'stress') and parallel nouns ('deadlines and many tasks'), reorder phrases to show cause ('because I have...'). Keep sentences short and use common collocations ('deadlines', 'tasks', 'for work').

× I feel tired when I'm ready. I have a little dry road.

✓ I feel tired when I'm tired. I have a bit of a headache.

The original uses illogical or incorrect words: 'I'm ready' contradicts tiredness and 'a little dry road' is nonsensical. This is a present tense/word choice issue (ID 6). Improve by using appropriate present-tense state descriptions: 'I feel tired when I'm tired' or better 'I feel tired when I am exhausted' and replace 'dry road' with a symptom like 'a bit of a headache' or 'dry throat' depending on intended meaning. Ensure verb 'feel' matches present state.

× I am doing inhale, exhale, stay calm and rest your mind.

✓ I inhale and exhale, stay calm, and rest my mind.

Original mixes different forms and shifts person ('your mind') and uses progressive 'I am doing inhale' incorrectly. This is a verb + -ing/form error (ID 8). Use simple present verbs for habitual actions ('inhale and exhale'), maintain consistent subject and possessive ('my mind'), and list actions in parallel form separated by commas and conjunctions.

× Yes, I will go out, sometimes wait friends, try to feel relaxed and to smell fresh air.

✓ Yes, I go out sometimes, meet friends, try to relax, and smell fresh air.

Using 'will' here is unnatural for habitual actions; 'wait friends' is incorrect collocation and lacks article or preposition. This is a future tense/misuse issue (ID 7). For habitual behavior use simple present ('I go out sometimes, meet friends'). Use correct verbs and parallel structure ('try to relax' not 'try to feel relaxed') and omit unnecessary 'to' before 'smell' when coordinating with other verbs. If you mean future plans, use 'I will go out sometimes and meet friends' but for routines prefer simple present.