Tiredness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and organized: start with a clear direct answer, give one or two specific reasons, and avoid filler words and repetition. Also use appropriate vocabulary (e.g. "sleep deprivation", "burned out") and correct small grammar errors (e.g. 'sometimes' not 'sometime').

Example: Yes, I often feel tired. Mainly this is because I suffer from poor sleep and occasional sleep deprivation, which leaves me feeling burned out and low on energy most days.

Suggestion: Avoid exaggeration and give a precise time frame or situations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific examples using linking words (e.g. 'especially', 'for example'). Correct grammar: 'every hour' not 'every hours'.

Example: I usually feel tired during the late afternoon, especially after lunch. For example, around 3–4 pm I often struggle to concentrate because my poor sleep quality leaves me exhausted.

Suggestion: Organize your answer: list one or two main strategies, explain briefly why they help, and use clearer language (e.g. 'scroll through TikTok' not 'check out the Instagram rules'). Avoid contradictory statements and be precise about effects.

Example: When I feel tired, I usually take a short nap of about 20 minutes to restore energy. If I can't sleep, I sometimes scroll through TikTok for a short break, which briefly distracts me and helps me relax.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give clear conditions using linking words (e.g. 'if', 'but', 'however'). Correct grammar and phrasing (e.g. 'it depends on the situation', 'I would decline if there is a lot of physical activity'). Provide one brief example.

Example: It depends on the situation. If we're just having a coffee or a meal, I'll usually go, but if the plan involves a lot of physical activity, I would probably decline and stay at home.

× Yes, of course I always feel tired uh, my quality of sleep sometime is too bad, so I feel burnout I feel like I'm out of energy, but sometimes I sleep sleep breath or maybe because I sleep too much. I like I always.

✓ Yes, of course. I always feel tired. My quality of sleep is sometimes very poor, so I feel burned out and like I have no energy. Sometimes I sleep lightly, and sometimes I sleep too much.

Multiple present tense and word-choice errors: use 'always feel' (present simple) correctly; 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb of frequency); 'too bad' is informal—'very poor' is clearer; 'feel burnout' should be 'feel burned out' (adjective form); 'I feel like I'm out of energy' -> 'like I have no energy' is natural; 'sleep sleep breath' is unclear—likely 'sleep lightly'; keep consistent present tense and correct word forms. Suggestions: use adverbs of frequency correctly, use adjective form 'burned out', choose clear verbs ('sleep lightly') and split into shorter sentences for clarity.

× I feel tired every time, every second, every hours, every minute, because like my quality of sleep is too bad and I have sleep deprivation so I always feel like exhausted and burned out no just

✓ I feel tired all the time, every second, every minute, and every hour because my quality of sleep is very poor and I have sleep deprivation, so I always feel exhausted and burned out.

Errors: 'every hours' should be 'every hour' (singular after 'every') — present tense adverbial expressions must be correct; 'is too bad' -> 'is very poor' is clearer; 'feel like exhausted' should be 'feel exhausted' (no 'like'); unneeded words 'no just' should be removed. Suggestions: use 'all the time' or correct repetition ('every minute/hour'), remove unnecessary fillers, and use correct adjective forms.

× Actually I would take a nap or I scroll through the TikTok or check out the Instagram rules, something like that it now will make me feel more energetic, but it's made me feel like oh I will less tired now. I can do more thing.

✓ Usually I take a nap, or I scroll through TikTok or check Instagram. Things like that make me feel more energetic, and I feel less tired, so I can do more things.

Errors: inconsistent tense and verb forms: use simple present 'I take', 'I scroll', 'check' for habitual actions; unnecessary modal 'would' changed to 'usually' for frequency; 'the TikTok' and 'the Instagram rules' are incorrect—use 'TikTok' and 'Instagram'; 'it now will make me' should be 'things like that make me' (present simple); 'it's made me feel like oh I will less tired now' is ungrammatical—correct to 'I feel less tired'. Also pluralize 'things'. Suggestions: use simple present for habitual actions, remove articles before app names, and keep sentences concise.

× Actually it's depend on depends on the situation like if we just hang out then we have a meal or take a coffee, date, I will go but if we have more activities so I will reject you stay home.

✓ Actually it depends on the situation. If we just hang out and have a meal or get coffee, I will go. But if there are more activities planned, I will decline and stay home.

Errors: 'it's depend on depends on' should be 'it depends on' (subject-verb agreement); run-on sentence and incorrect conjunction use—split into sentences and use 'if' and 'but' correctly; 'take a coffee' -> 'get coffee' or 'have coffee'; 'I will reject you stay home' is ungrammatical—use 'I will decline and stay home'. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement, use clear conjunctions, avoid run-on sentences, and use correct verbs for common expressions.