Tiredness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は直接的で意味は伝わりますが、文法や語順の誤り、冗長さ、繰り返しがあります。週日を指す表現は“on weekdays”が正しく、主語と副詞の位置を直すと自然になります。また一文で完結させ、必要なら短い理由を加えると良いです。具体的には、動詞の形・冠詞・前置詞に注意し、文を2～3文に分けて明瞭に述べてください。

Example: Yes, I often feel tired on weekdays. I go to school every day and have long lessons, so I usually feel worn out by the afternoon.

Suggestion: 意味は繰り返しで伝わりますが、冗長さと語彙の重複（"studying hard"が二回）が目立ちます。質問は“いつ”なので、時や状況を具体的に示すと良いです。接続詞を用いて理由を簡潔に述べ、同じ語を繰り返さないようにします。

Example: I usually feel tired in the late afternoon, especially after long classes and extra studying at home because I often have to review lessons and do homework.

Suggestion: 動詞の形（watch YouTube／play video games）や冠詞の使い方が不自然で、文法ミスがあります。また“which makes me very enjoyable”は意味が通じにくく、不適切な表現です。行動を列挙する際は並列構造を揃え、感情表現は自然な形（enjoy it／feel relaxed）に直してください。

Example: When I'm tired, I usually watch videos on YouTube or play video games to relax. Those activities help me unwind after a busy day.

Suggestion: 肯定の答えは良いですが、表現にいくつかの誤りがあります（冠詞・複数形・動詞の並列）。“playing the video games together and playing a soccer”は不自然なので、動詞形を統一して具体的な活動を短く列挙すると良いです。

Example: Yes, I usually go out with my friends. We often play video games together or play soccer at a nearby park.

× Yes, I do in weekday I usually go to the school every day so I feel tired after school.

✓ Yes, I do. On weekdays I usually go to school every day, so I feel tired after school.

The original sentence has run-on structure and incorrect preposition/article use. 'in weekday' is wrong: use 'on weekdays' for habitual days. 'the school' is unnecessary when speaking generally: use 'school'. Break into two clauses with a period or comma to avoid a run-on sentence. Suggestion: separate ideas and use correct day preposition and omit unnecessary article.

× I usually go to school every day so I feel tired after studying hard at school and studying hard at my house.

✓ I usually go to school every day, so I feel tired after studying hard at school and at home.

Redundant phrases 'studying hard' repeated and awkward phrase 'my house'. Use 'at home' for natural expression. Add a comma before 'so' to join independent clauses. Streamline repetitive wording.

× When I feel tired, I usually watch a YouTube and playing a video game, which makes me very enjoyable.

✓ When I feel tired, I usually watch YouTube and play video games, which I find very enjoyable.

Mixing verb forms: 'watch' and 'playing' should be parallel verbs ('watch' and 'play'). 'a YouTube' is incorrect — 'YouTube' as a service needs no article. 'makes me very enjoyable' is incorrect use: say 'I find it enjoyable' or 'it makes me feel relaxed'. Use parallel verb forms and correct object phrasing.

× Yes, I usually go out with my friends and do something such as playing the video games together and playing a soccer.

✓ Yes, I usually go out with my friends and do activities such as playing video games together and playing soccer.

Incorrect articles: 'the video games' should be 'video games' generally, and 'a soccer' is wrong because 'soccer' is an uncountable noun in this context — do not use 'a'. Also improve word choice: 'do something such as' -> 'do activities such as'. Ensure parallel gerunds ('playing video games' and 'playing soccer').