Tiredness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the response more concise and directly structured: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific reasons, and finish with a short consequence. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “that's just because” and “but however” together) and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words (for example, “because” and “however”) correctly to improve coherence.

Example: Yes, I often feel tired at the end of the day because I frequently watch movies late and sometimes fall asleep on the couch. However, after I wake up I usually feel refreshed and energetic, so I can carry out my daily activities and go to work.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear topic sentence and then give two specific situations with a linking phrase. Avoid repeating “I would feel tired” twice; combine ideas to make the answer more fluent and concise. Add a brief detail about why those situations are tiring to show depth.

Example: I usually feel tired after an exhausting shift at work, especially when my nursing duties are physically and emotionally demanding, and also when I stay up very late watching movies because lack of sleep makes me sluggish the next day.

Suggestion: Structure the answer with a main strategy first, then two short alternatives for daytime tiredness, using linking words like “however” or “otherwise.” Be specific about how these actions help (e.g., ‘a short walk helps me clear my head’). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid filler words like “just.”

Example: If I'm very tired, I usually go to bed early to get a full night’s sleep because proper rest restores my energy. However, if I feel tired during the day, I take a warm bath to relax or go for a short walk to clear my mind and recharge.

× But however when I wake up I feel energetic and I can start my day just with doing a lot of things that I like to do and go to work.

✓ However, when I wake up I feel energetic and can start my day by doing many of the things I like and then go to work.

The original sentence uses both 'But' and 'however' together (redundant conjunctions). Also 'just with doing' is unidiomatic; use 'by doing'. 'A lot of things that I like to do' is wordy; 'many of the things I like' is clearer. Remove the repeated subject 'I' before 'can' for more natural coordination.

× I would feel tired after an exhausting day at work when my shift as a nurse was really hard or I would feel tired when I watched a lot of movies and stayed up really late.

✓ I feel tired after an exhausting day at work when my shift as a nurse is really hard, or I feel tired when I watch a lot of movies and stay up really late.

The speaker is describing habitual or typical situations, so simple present tense is appropriate (not conditional 'would' or past 'was/watched/stayed'). Use present tense verbs 'feel', 'is', 'watch', 'stay' to match habitual context.

× The best thing for me to do when I feel tired is just go to bed and have a good night of sleep but if I feel tired during the day I just take a bath or go for a nice walk just to recharge

✓ The best thing for me to do when I feel tired is to go to bed and have a good night's sleep, but if I feel tired during the day I take a bath or go for a nice walk to recharge.

Use the infinitive 'to go' after 'is'. 'A good night of sleep' is awkward; the idiomatic expression is 'a good night's sleep'. Remove redundant 'just' and streamline 'just to recharge' to 'to recharge'. Add a comma before 'but' to separate clauses and maintain sentence flow.