Tiredness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid fillers like “indeed” and redundant phrases such as “so yeah.”

Example: Yes, I often feel tired. This is mainly because I have a heavy workload — school homework, private lessons and several extracurricular activities — which leaves me little time to rest.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer, then explain with a clear reason. Avoid uncertain phrases like “I'm not really sure” and unnecessary speculation. Use a linking phrase such as “because” or “mainly” to connect cause and effect.

Example: I usually feel tired in the evenings, especially before starting my homework, because I have been active all day and my concentration drops by night.

Suggestion: Good clear structure and specific detail. Improve by adding a brief comment about effectiveness or a healthier alternative to show awareness and expand content slightly (one linking phrase).

Example: Whenever I feel tired I usually have caffeine: coffee in the morning and tea in the evening because it is milder. However, I also try short naps or light exercise when possible, which helps my focus without overusing caffeine.

× I'm not really sure if it's my body who makes me sleepy and makes me feel tired or is it just a placebo effect, but I mostly feel tired before doing my homework.

✓ I'm not really sure if it's my body that makes me sleepy and makes me feel tired or if it is just a placebo effect, but I mostly feel tired before doing my homework.

Use 'that' (or 'which') rather than 'who' for non-personal antecedents like 'my body'; use consistent clause order and include the conjunction 'if' before the second clause to make the sentence grammatically parallel and avoid the inversion 'is it'. Also replace the contraction 'is it' inversion with 'if it is' to match the statement style and maintain clarity.

× Whenever I feel tired, I usually take a dose of caffeine.

✓ Whenever I feel tired, I usually take a dose of caffeine.

No grammatical correction needed. Sentence is correct; 'take' is correctly used in simple present to describe habitual action. This suggestion is included to show no change is required.

× If I feel tired in the morning, I generally take some coffee, but if I cannot really focus on my tasks in the late evenings, I prefer tea instead.

✓ If I feel tired in the morning, I generally have some coffee, but if I cannot really focus on my tasks late in the evening, I prefer tea instead.

Use 'have' instead of 'take' for beverages in natural English. 'Late evenings' is plural and slightly awkward here; use 'late in the evening' to refer to the typical late-evening time. These prepositional and collocational changes make the sentence more idiomatic and grammatically natural.

× Indeed. In my opinion, it's due to the fact that I have lots of homework from school, private lessons and extracurriculars, as well as lots of physical activity.

✓ Indeed. In my opinion, it's due to the fact that I have a lot of homework from school, private lessons, and extracurricular activities, as well as a lot of physical activity.

'Lots of' is informal and 'extracurriculars' is colloquial; for grammatical correctness and formality, use 'a lot of' and 'extracurricular activities'. Also adding commas in the list improves clarity. This addresses plural phrasing and word choice to match register.

× So yeah, I often feel tired.

✓ So, yeah, I often feel tired.

No verb change needed; this suggestion only adds a comma for flow. The original sentence is grammatically correct in third person contexts where applicable; here it's first person, so no third-person singular error. The minor punctuation change improves readability.