Tiredness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, correct mistakes, and use clearer vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundancy and grammar errors (e.g., 'existed' -> 'excited' is incorrect here; use 'exhausted' or 'stressed'). Keep to 2–3 sentences and include a linking word if you add detail.

Example: Yes, I often feel tired when my schedule is busy. For example, during the week before exams I stay up late studying and reviewing notes, which leaves me exhausted.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea and fix word choice (e.g., 'that type' unclear; 'anxiety' should be used carefully). Keep sentences fewer and more precise.

Example: I feel tired mainly when my schedule is packed with work and study. For example, when I have back-to-back assignments and revision I get stressed and anxious, so a short nap helps me recover.

Suggestion: Structure the answer: state your usual action, then give a brief reason and one more supporting detail. Correct grammar and phrasing (e.g., 'only 20 minute nap' -> 'a 20-minute nap'; 'as refreshed when I feel at the morning' -> 'feel refreshed in the morning'). Keep within 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'also' or 'besides'.

Example: I usually take a 20–40 minute nap when I feel tired because a short nap helps me feel refreshed. Besides, I often drink a cup of tea and spend time with my family to relax.

× For example, I usually get existed for the week before the exams when I stay up late preparing and reviewing the notes.

✓ For example, I usually get excited during the week before exams when I stay up late preparing and reviewing my notes.

The student used 'existed' which is incorrect; the intended adjective is 'excited' (Grammar problem type 13: incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Also 'for the week' is better as 'during the week' and 'the notes' should be 'my notes' for clarity (article/pronoun use). Suggest saying 'get excited during the week before exams' to sound natural. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Moreover, if the schedule is packed with lots of work as well as with study and that type, I feel much stressed and frustrated and I feel anxiety at that time.

✓ Moreover, if the schedule is packed with a lot of work and study, I feel very stressed, frustrated, and anxious at that time.

Several issues: 'packed with lots of work as well as with study and that type' is awkward; use 'a lot of work and study' (Grammar problem type 11: incorrect use of prepositions; and 22: article errors). 'I feel anxiety' is a noun phrase; the adjective 'anxious' fits here (Grammar problem type 13). Also replace 'much stressed' with 'very stressed' for natural adverb use (Grammar problem type 20: adverb placement/choice). Suggest simplifying the clause and using parallel structure. Grammar problem type ID:11

× So a quick nap can heal my tiredness.

✓ So a quick nap can relieve my tiredness.

'Heal' is typically used for injuries or illnesses; use 'relieve' for tiredness or 'refresh me' (Grammar problem type 13: incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs/word choice). The sentence is otherwise grammatical. Suggest 'relieve my tiredness' or 'make me feel refreshed.' Grammar problem type ID:13

× Whenever I feel tired, I usually prefer to take a nap around 20 to 40 minutes, because only 20 minute nap can heal my tiredness and I can feel as refreshed when I feel at the morning.

✓ Whenever I feel tired, I usually prefer to take a nap of around 20 to 40 minutes, because only a 20-minute nap can relieve my tiredness and make me feel refreshed in the morning.

Issues: 'take a nap around 20 to 40 minutes' needs 'of' and hyphenated '20-minute' when used as an adjective (Grammar problem type 1/22: singular/plural and article errors). 'only 20 minute nap' needs the article 'a' and hyphenation. 'heal my tiredness' should be 'relieve my tiredness' (word choice, type 13). 'I can feel as refreshed when I feel at the morning' is ungrammatical and should be 'make me feel refreshed in the morning' (Grammar problem type 26: sentence structure errors). Suggest learning hyphenation for compound adjectives and use 'in the morning.' Grammar problem type ID:22

× Moreover, I drink a cup of tea and spend some time with the family, so I spend this type of my time.

✓ Also, I drink a cup of tea and spend some time with my family, so I spend this kind of time relaxing.

Problems: 'spend some time with the family' should be 'with my family' unless referring to a specific family (Grammar problem type 12: incorrect use of pronouns). 'so I spend this type of my time' is ungrammatical; use 'this kind of time' or 'this kind of time relaxing' (Grammar problem type 26: sentence structure errors and 11: preposition/article use). Suggest using 'my family' and a clear phrase like 'this kind of time relaxing.' Grammar problem type ID:12}]} Please note: Grammar problem type IDs are also noted inline in each explanation.