Tiredness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, correct grammar (verb tenses, articles, pronouns), and use a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Avoid repetition and unnecessary words. For example, say when and why you feel tired and one result (what you do). Use linking words like because or so to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I often feel tired. Since school has started I have to wake up very early and study for five to six hours, so by the end of the day I feel exhausted and need a rest.

Suggestion: Structure the answer with a clear topic sentence and specific details about timing and routines. Reduce fillers (umm) and avoid contradictory timing (a short nap vs three or four hours). Use linking words like after, then and because.

Example: I usually feel tired after a long school day. When I get home I feel exhausted, so I take a short nap of about 20–30 minutes or relax for an hour to recharge before doing homework.

Suggestion: Use correct verb forms and vocabulary (e.g., 'prefer to go to bed', 'earphones' or 'headphones'), and avoid unclear phrases. Give one primary action with a contrasting alternative using a linking word like but or however. Keep it to two or three sentences.

Example: When I feel tired I usually prefer to go to bed and get some sleep. But if I have urgent tasks, I put on my headphones and listen to my favorite music to relax and stay focused.

× I often feel tired because now the school is started and we need I need to wake up very early and study 5 or 6 hours.

✓ I often feel tired because school has just started and I need to wake up very early and study for five or six hours.

The phrase 'the school is started' is incorrect English; use present perfect 'school has just started' to indicate a recent change. 'We need I need' is redundant and should be 'I need' to match the speaker. Also add the preposition 'for' before a duration ('study for five or six hours'). Use the word form 'five or six' instead of numeral digits in spoken sentences. Suggestions: use 'school has just started', remove redundant pronouns, and include 'for' with durations.

× So after a school day I have very tired, exhausted and I need to have a break.

✓ So after a school day I feel very tired and exhausted and I need to take a break.

'I have very tired' incorrectly uses the adjective 'tired' with 'have'; the correct verb is 'feel'. Use 'and' to connect adjectives and maintain parallel structure. 'Have a break' can be understood but 'take a break' is the more natural collocation. Suggestion: use 'I feel very tired and exhausted' or simply 'I feel exhausted.'

× I usually feel tired after a school day, umm, when I came home I feel very exhausted and I usually take a short nap or relax for a while to recharge.

✓ I usually feel tired after a school day; when I come home I feel very exhausted and I usually take a short nap or relax for a while to recharge.

Mixing past tense 'came' with present tense 'I usually feel' is inconsistent. Use simple present 'come' to describe habitual actions. Also replace the comma between clauses with a semicolon or conjunction for clarity. Suggestions: keep tense consistent for habitual routines by using present simple throughout.

× I usually just umm, sleep for three or four, four hours.

✓ I usually just sleep for three or four hours.

Repeating 'four' is redundant. Use 'three or four hours' as a normal duration expression. Keep present simple 'sleep' for habitual action. Suggestion: remove filler repetition and unnecessary hesitation words when possible.

× When I feel tired I usually prefer go to bed and just sleep, but when I have a busy day I just wear my airports and just listen to my favorite music to which is how.

✓ When I feel tired I usually prefer to go to bed and just sleep, but when I have a busy day I just wear my airpods and listen to my favorite music to relax.

Missing 'to' after 'prefer' (prefer to go). 'Wear my airports' is likely a pronunciation/word choice error; the intended word is 'airpods' or 'earphones'. The phrase 'to which is how' is ungrammatical and seems to attempt to express purpose; use 'to relax' or 'to help me relax.' Remove repeated 'just' for concision. Suggestion: use 'prefer to [verb]', choose correct noun 'airpods/earphones', and finish with a clear infinitive of purpose such as 'to relax.'