Tiredness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, correct grammatical errors, avoid redundancy and use specific supporting details. Replace incorrect phrases (e.g. "I usually bruise") and reduce repetition (“I have never feel tired” → “I rarely feel tired”). Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g. “because,” “so,” “therefore”). Keep answers under five sentences.

Example: I don’t often feel tired because I sleep and wake up early, so I have a consistent routine. In the morning I usually make a cup of coffee, which helps me feel refreshed and energetic. As a result, I rarely feel tired during the day.

Suggestion: Give a concise topic sentence and then one or two specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Remove hesitations (“umm,” “uh”) and use clearer vocabulary (e.g. “a tiring day of work,” “sustained concentration”). Aim for specific examples to support your reason.

Example: I usually feel tired after a long, tiring day of work because I have to concentrate for many hours without long breaks. For example, when I spend the whole day in meetings and then finish reports in the evening, I feel exhausted and need rest.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your usual action, then add one or two brief specific details and a linking word. Correct simple grammar errors and avoid repetition. Mention alternatives if relevant to show range (e.g. short walk, nap).

Example: When I feel tired, I usually make a cup of coffee to help me feel refreshed so I can focus again. Sometimes I also take a short walk or do a five-minute stretch to boost my energy before returning to work.

× No because I sleep early and get up early.

✓ No, because I sleep early and get up early.

Add a comma after 'No' to separate the interjection from the clause. The sentence uses simple present correctly to describe habitual actions; punctuation improves clarity.

× I have a good sleeping routine.

✓ I have a good sleep routine.

Use 'sleep' as a noun modifier before 'routine' rather than the adjective 'sleeping'. 'Sleep routine' is the common collocation in English.

× When I wake up I usually bruise.

✓ When I wake up I usually feel refreshed.

The verb 'bruise' is incorrect in this context; likely intended meaning is feeling refreshed. 'Feel refreshed' correctly expresses a habitual state after waking. Also add a comma after the adverbial clause for clarity: 'When I wake up, I usually feel refreshed.'

× I usually cook myself a cup of coffee that will helps me to refresh myself so I always feel energetic and I have never feel tired.

✓ I usually make myself a cup of coffee that helps me refresh, so I always feel energetic and have never felt tired.

Multiple issues: 'cook' is not the typical verb for preparing coffee; use 'make'. 'Helps' must agree with singular 'that' as present simple, and should not be followed by 'to' before the base verb 'refresh' here. Remove redundant reflexive 'myself' after 'refresh'. Use present perfect 'have never felt' for experience up to now. Also add commas to separate clauses.

× Well, after a whole day tiring working, I will probably feel tired.

✓ Well, after a whole tiring day of work, I will probably feel tired.

Word order and form: 'tiring working' is incorrect; use 'tiring day' or 'a whole day of tiring work'. 'A whole tiring day of work' or 'a whole day of tiring work' are natural. The future 'will probably feel' is acceptable.

× Umm, my tiredness uh, is usually come from the hard working and uh a long time focus.

✓ Umm, my tiredness usually comes from hard work and prolonged concentration.

Use 'comes' for present simple third person singular. 'The hard working' is incorrect; use 'hard work' or 'working hard'. 'A long time focus' should be 'prolonged concentration' or 'long periods of focus'. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× I think all of these are the reason I feel tired.

✓ I think all of these are the reasons I feel tired.

Mismatch between plural 'all of these' and singular 'the reason'. Use plural 'reasons'. This fixes subject-complement agreement.

× I will probably choose to make myself a cup of coffee that will help me to refresh myself after taking a sip.

✓ I will probably choose to make myself a cup of coffee that will help me refresh after taking a sip.

'Help me to refresh myself' is wordy; use 'help me refresh' or 'help me feel refreshed'. 'Help' followed by bare infinitive is natural. Remove redundant reflexive 'myself' after 'refresh'.

× I will feel energetic and be ready to pay attention to my business.

✓ I will feel energetic and be ready to pay attention to my tasks.

'Business' is ambiguous; 'tasks' or 'work' better matches intended meaning. Tense 'will feel' aligns with prior future conditional and is acceptable.

× So that's my go to choice.

✓ So that's my go-to choice.

Compound adjective 'go-to' should be hyphenated when modifying a noun. Alternatively say 'So that's what I usually choose.'