Tiredness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid fillers (umm, uh) and incorrect word forms (e.g., "studios", "come to home"). Use linking words if adding details (for example, "because" or "so").

Example: Not often. I usually feel tired when I get home after long classes because I have been on my feet all day, so I like to spend an hour relaxing with a book or some music.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and give specific contexts and reasons. Correct grammar ("after studying at college", "feel noisy" is unclear) and avoid repetition. Use linking words such as "for example" or "especially" to organize details.

Example: I usually feel tired after studying at college, especially on days with long lectures. For example, after a full day of classes I feel drained and prefer to rest at home to recover.

Suggestion: Give a straightforward answer followed by a specific routine or example. Avoid vague phrasing and filler words, and use correct collocations ("I prefer to sleep", "relaxing") and linkers like "because" or "so" to explain reasons.

Example: I usually take a short nap or lie down for 20–30 minutes because sleep helps me recharge. After that I feel more focused and ready to continue my work.

× Not always, but especially when I come to home after studios, I feel umm, so tired and I need to be more, uh, relaxed with a leisure time at evening.

✓ Not always, but especially when I come home after my studio classes, I feel very tired and I need more relaxation in the evening.

Use of prepositions: 'come to home' is incorrect; correct is 'come home'. 'After studios' is unclear—use 'after my studio classes' or 'after studying'; 'with a leisure time at evening' is unnatural: use 'in the evening' and 'need more relaxation' or 'need to relax'. Also replace informal fillers and choose appropriate adjectives ('very tired' instead of 'so tired') for clarity. Suggested improvement: practice common prepositions with verbs of motion ('come home', 'go to the office') and time expressions ('in the evening').

× How I say it in the last question, I feel tired after study in college and especially I feel tired and uh, I need to be more relaxable after my trips because when I come to home I feel noisy. Relax I think.

✓ As I said in the last question, I feel tired after studying at college and especially after trips; I need to relax because when I come home I feel restless.

Tense and verb form errors: 'How I say it' should be 'As I said' (past reference to a previous statement). 'After study in college' should use the gerund 'studying' and 'at college'. 'I need to be more relaxable' is incorrect because 'relaxable' is not used in this context; use 'I need to relax'. 'Come to home' should be 'come home'. 'I feel noisy' is wrong word choice; likely 'restless' fits. Improve by using correct verb forms and collocations. Suggested improvement: study gerunds after prepositions and past references ('as I said'), and learn common collocations ('need to relax', 'feel restless').

× To be on, to be honest, I prefer sleep because I think it's a significant thing in your daily routine and a dream and sleep, it's more, uh, flexible and relaxable thinking.

✓ To be honest, I prefer sleeping because I think it is an important part of your daily routine; dreaming and sleeping are more restorative and help you relax.

Use of -ing form: after 'prefer' the verb should be in gerund form ('prefer sleeping' or 'prefer to sleep'). 'To be on' is incorrect and should be omitted. 'Significant thing in your daily routine' is awkward—use 'important part of your daily routine'. 'Relaxable' is not a standard adjective; use 'help you relax' or 'restorative'. Also ensure subject-verb agreement: 'dream and sleep' as plural take 'are'. Suggested improvement: learn verbs that take gerunds ('prefer + -ing') and choose natural adjectives ('restorative', 'relaxing').