Tiredness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., “tiredness” and “tired”), and use a linking phrase before mentioning remedies. Add one specific detail to support your statement (when or how often you walk).

Example: Yes, I often feel tired because my job requires long periods of sitting and intense concentration. To cope, I usually go for a 30-minute walk most evenings and aim to sleep by 10 pm, which helps me feel refreshed the next day.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence and simplify wording. Replace vague phrases like “work relative problems” with specific situations, and use linking words to connect causes and effects. Limit to two sentences max and include a brief example or frequency.

Example: I usually feel tired when I'm tackling difficult work problems that need intense concentration and long hours at my desk. For example, after several hours of troubleshooting a complex report, I often need a short break to recharge.

Suggestion: Use a direct topic sentence, avoid awkward phrases like “take my chances to recover,” and order actions logically. Add a brief specific detail about timing or duration to make the answer more concrete.

Example: When I feel tired, I try to rest and clear my mind: I go for a 20–30 minute walk in the evening and then go to bed earlier than usual to ensure I get enough sleep.

× Yes, I often feel tired because my work involves a lot of sitting and critical thinking. So to ease my tiredness I do evening walks and I try to go to bed early to recover.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired because my work involves a lot of sitting and critical thinking. To ease my tiredness, I take evening walks and try to go to bed early to recover.

The original has minor word choice and parallelism issues rather than strict tense errors. 'Do evening walks' is non-idiomatic; 'take evening walks' or 'go for evening walks' uses the correct verb + -ing collocation. Also remove the superfluous 'I' before 'try' to maintain parallel structure. Add a comma after the introductory phrase 'To ease my tiredness' for clarity.

× I would feel tired whenever I encounter work relative problems, which involves a lot of critical thinking as well as long hours of seating in the desk.

✓ I feel tired whenever I encounter work-related problems, which involve a lot of critical thinking as well as long hours of sitting at my desk.

The response to 'When would you feel tired?' should use present simple to describe a habitual reaction: 'I feel tired whenever...'. 'Work relative problems' is incorrect adjective formation; use the compound adjective 'work-related problems'. 'Which involves' must agree in number with 'problems', so use 'involve' (subject-verb agreement). 'Seating in the desk' is incorrect: use the gerund 'sitting' and the preposition 'at' with 'desk' ('sitting at my desk'). These corrections fix present tense usage, adjective formation, subject-verb agreement, verb+ -ing form, and preposition choice.

× I take my chances to recover, do evening walks and go to bed early.

✓ I take the opportunity to rest, take evening walks, and go to bed early.

'Take my chances to recover' is idiomatically incorrect; use 'take the opportunity to rest' or 'take time to rest'. 'Do evening walks' is non-idiomatic; use 'take evening walks' or 'go for evening walks' (verb + -ing collocation). Also ensure parallel structure by using verbs with the same form: 'take..., take..., and go...'.