Tiredness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., "tired" and "exhausted" back-to-back), correct countable/uncountable forms (paperwork), and limit to at most 4–5 sentences. Add a brief specific example or frequency to enrich your answer.

Example: Yes, I often feel tired because my job is quite demanding. For example, I supervise around 30 students and spend several hours each day on paperwork, which leaves me feeling drained by the evening.

Suggestion: Provide a clear time reference and use correct grammar: say "after work" instead of "every after working hours," and use "paperwork" (uncountable). Explain briefly why students being "not in good condition" affects you with a specific detail to make it more precise.

Example: I usually feel tired after work, especially in the evenings, because my tasks are demanding and there is a lot of paperwork to finish. Also, when students are unwell or unsettled, I spend extra time calming them and helping with tasks, which makes me more exhausted.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct topic sentence and use consistent tense and natural phrasing. Avoid awkward expressions like "I'm a whole lot another person"—instead describe the effect specifically (e.g., relaxed, recharged). Add a short detail about frequency or duration to strengthen the response.

Example: When I feel tired, I play pickleball because it helps relieve my stress and re-energize me. Playing for about an hour a few times a week improves my mood and makes me feel refreshed and more focused.

× my work is a really difficult one

✓ my work is really difficult

The phrase 'a really difficult one' uses an unnecessary singular noun marker 'one' after 'work'. 'Work' as an uncountable noun should not take 'a ... one'. Remove 'a' and 'one' to make 'my work is really difficult'. Suggestion: treat 'work' as uncountable and say 'my work is difficult' or if you mean a specific job use 'my job is a really difficult one.'

× I have to handle a lot of my students and a lot of paperworks during my work hours

✓ I have to handle a lot of students and a lot of paperwork during my working hours

'A lot of my students' implies possession; the intended meaning is many students in general so use 'a lot of students'. 'Paperworks' is incorrect — 'paperwork' is uncountable. 'During my work hours' is better expressed as 'during my working hours'. Suggestion: use 'a lot of students', 'a lot of paperwork', and 'working hours'.

× so I do feel so tired often

✓ so I often feel tired

The sentence uses redundant 'so' twice and places adverbs awkwardly. Place frequency adverb 'often' before the main verb 'feel' and remove excessive 'so' to make 'I often feel tired'. Suggestion: avoid repeated intensifiers and place frequency adverbs in standard positions (e.g., 'I often feel...').

× I feel so tired every after working hours

✓ I feel very tired after working hours

'Every after' is ungrammatical. Use 'after working hours' or 'every day after work'. Also 'so tired' can be changed to 'very tired' for formality. Suggestion: say 'after working hours' or 'every day after work'.

× there are a lot of paperwork

✓ there is a lot of paperwork

'Paperwork' is uncountable, so it requires singular verb 'is' with 'a lot of'. Use 'there is a lot of paperwork' rather than 'there are a lot of paperwork'. Suggestion: match verb number to uncountable noun: 'there is a lot of paperwork'.

× the students are also not in good condition

✓ the students are also not doing well

'In good condition' usually describes physical objects or health; 'doing well' is better idiom for students' state. Also 'not in good condition' is awkward for people. Suggestion: use natural collocations: 'doing well', 'not feeling well', or 'not in good health'.

× I do find playing pickleball very fun

✓ I find playing pickleball very enjoyable

While 'do find' is grammatical for emphasis, it's unnecessary here. 'Very fun' is colloquial; 'very enjoyable' is more appropriate. The gerund 'playing' is fine. Suggestion: say 'I find playing pickleball very enjoyable' or keep 'I really enjoy playing pickleball'.

× it releases my stress and it made me feel like I'm a whole lot another person

✓ it relieves my stress and it makes me feel like a completely different person

Tense inconsistency: 'releases' present vs 'made' past; maintain present tense 'relieves' and 'makes'. 'Releases my stress' is awkward — 'relieves my stress' or 'reduces my stress' is better. 'I'm a whole lot another person' is ungrammatical; use 'a completely different person'. Suggestion: keep consistent present tense for habitual actions and use natural collocations: 'relieves my stress' and 'makes me feel like a completely different person'.