Politeness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答方向正确，也提到了父母的影响，但最后一句没有说完，影响了表达的完整性。注意时态一致：讲童年经历时应使用过去时，例如“taught”和“helped”。“a very essential”不自然，使用“essential”即可；“so that it can affect my life”表达生硬，可以改为“because it would affect my future”. 建议用“首先……此外……”组织答案，并补充一个具体的礼貌行为。

Example: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They taught me to say “please” and “thank you,” and to listen when other people were speaking. They also corrected me whenever I behaved rudely, so I gradually developed good manners.

Suggestion: 观点明确，也给出了原因，但存在明显语法和用词问题。“it's indicates”应改为“it indicates”；“implied person”用词错误，应使用“impolite”或“rude person”；“Instead”不适合连接对比句，可使用“By contrast”。避免说“a person can be regarded as very bad”这种过于绝对且不自然的表达，可以说明不礼貌会给别人留下负面印象。

Example: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect for other people and reflects our upbringing. For example, using polite language can make conversations more pleasant and help us build better relationships. By contrast, rude behavior may give others a negative impression of us.

Suggestion: 回答覆盖了多个场合，内容较充分，但语法和词汇需要改进。“in many occasions”应改为“on many occasions”；“when we meeting”应改为“when we meet”；“the elderly and the younger ones”可以更自然地说成“older people and younger people”；“upbrain”不是正确单词，应使用“upbringing”。建议使用“such as”列举场合，并用一个具体例子加强内容。

Example: We should be polite on many occasions, such as when we talk to older people, shop in a store, or interact with colleagues and classmates. For instance, at work, we should listen carefully and avoid interrupting others. This kind of behavior shows respect and creates a friendly atmosphere.

Suggestion: 回答包含了道谢、道歉和公交车让座等具体例子，内容方向很好，但句子过长且有多处不自然表达。由于问题询问过去经历，应使用过去时，如“showed”“helped”和“gave”。“those early people”应改为“elderly people”或“people who needed a seat”；“give my seats”应为“give up my seat”。删除“in such as that, such like that”等重复表达，并用连接词分开不同例子。

Example: As a child, I showed politeness in several simple ways. I said “thank you” when someone helped me and “sorry” when I made a mistake. I also gave up my seat on the bus for elderly passengers or people who needed it more than I did.

× They usually teach me that politeness is a very essential social norm so that it can affect my life in the future and they usually help me to correct my behavior to be

✓ They usually taught me that politeness was an essential social norm that would affect my life in the future, and they usually helped me correct my behavior.

这里是在描述童年时期的经历，主要时态应使用一般过去时。因此，teach 应改为 taught，is 应改为 was，can 应改为 would，help 应改为 helped。另一个句子末尾的 to be 没有完成表达，应删除或补充完整。

× They usually teach me that politeness is a very essential social norm so that it can affect my life in the future and they usually help me to correct my behavior to be

✓ They usually taught me that politeness was an essential social norm that would affect my life in the future, and they usually helped me correct my behavior.

句末的 to be 后面没有补充必要的成分，导致句子没有完整结束。可以直接删除 to be，使句子结构完整。

× Well, I think that being polite is really essential in a person's life because it's indicates social manners and can reflect a person's upbringing.

✓ Well, I think that being polite is really essential in a person's life because it indicates good manners and can reflect a person's upbringing.

it's 是 it is 的缩写，后面不能再接动词的第三人称单数形式 indicates。这里应使用主语 it 加动词 indicates，即 it indicates。

× Instead, a rude and implied person can be regarded as very bad.

✓ In contrast, a rude and ill-mannered person can be regarded as a bad person.

Instead 通常表示“代替”，不适合用来引出与前句相反的观点。这里应使用 In contrast，表示“相比之下”。

× Instead, a rude and implied person can be regarded as very bad.

✓ In contrast, a rude and ill-mannered person can be regarded as a bad person.

implied 的意思是“暗示的、含蓄的”，不能表示“没有礼貌的”。描述没有礼貌的人应使用 ill-mannered 或 impolite。

× I think that we have to be polite in many occasions like when we meeting the elderly and the younger ones and when we are purchasing something or when we are in the workplace or in school.

✓ I think that we have to be polite on many occasions, such as when we meet elderly people and younger people, when we purchase something, or when we are at work or at school.

表示“在许多场合”时，occasion 前通常使用介词 on，而不是 in。因此，in many occasions 应改为 on many occasions。

× I think that we have to be polite in many occasions like when we meeting the elderly and the younger ones and when we are purchasing something or when we are in the workplace or in school.

✓ I think that we have to be polite on many occasions, such as when we meet elderly people and younger people, when we purchase something, or when we are at work or at school.

when 引导的是一般情况，不是正在发生的某个动作，因此应使用一般现在时。we meeting 缺少谓语动词，应改为 we meet。为了保持并列结构，are purchasing 也可以改为 purchase。

× So in these circumstances being polite can reflect our upbrain, the politeness.

✓ Therefore, in these circumstances, being polite can reflect our upbringing and good manners.

原句中 our upbrain, the politeness 的成分排列和连接方式不正确，两个名词之间不能直接用逗号连接。应使用 and 连接并列成分，如 upbringing and good manners。

× Well, I think that I reflect my politeness in various ways such as by saying thank you when people are helping me or sorry when I make mistakes and on the bus, I give my seats to those early people in such as that, such like that.

✓ Well, I think that I show my politeness in various ways, such as by saying thank you when people help me, saying sorry when I make mistakes, and giving up my seat to elderly people on the bus.

英语中通常说 give up my seat，表示“让座”，seat 使用单数，因为这里指自己的一个座位。不能使用复数 seats。

× Well, I think that I reflect my politeness in various ways such as by saying thank you when people are helping me or sorry when I make mistakes and on the bus, I give my seats to those early people in such as that, such like that.

✓ Well, I think that I show my politeness in various ways, such as by saying thank you when people help me, saying sorry when I make mistakes, and giving up my seat to elderly people on the bus.

early 的意思是“早的”，不能表示“年长的”。描述年长的人应使用 elderly people。

× Well, I think that I reflect my politeness in various ways such as by saying thank you when people are helping me or sorry when I make mistakes and on the bus, I give my seats to those early people in such as that, such like that.

✓ Well, I think that I show my politeness in various ways, such as by saying thank you when people help me, saying sorry when I make mistakes, and giving up my seat to elderly people on the bus.

in such as that 和 such like that 都不是正确或完整的英语表达，而且原句的多个例子没有保持清晰的并列结构。可以使用 such as 引出例子，并用 saying、saying 和 giving 形成并列结构。