Politeness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 質問に直接答えるため、誰から、またはどのような経験を通して礼儀を学んだのかを最初に述べてください。「Sat」「barrier ball」「politic」は意味が不明確または不自然です。「polite」は形容詞なので、ここでは「be polite」や「learn good manners」を使いましょう。また、同じ語句の繰り返しを避け、スポーツを通して学んだ具体的な行動を1つ加えるとよいです。

Example: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and my sports coaches. When I played volleyball, they taught me to respect my teammates and thank my opponents after a match. As a result, I became more aware of the importance of good manners.

Suggestion: 意見は明確に述べられていますが、文が途中で終わっているため、理由を完全な文で説明してください。「I strongly believe」は現在の意見なので、過去形の「believed」ではなく現在形を使います。また、「interact with other persons」は「interact with other people」のほうが自然です。礼儀が人間関係に与える具体的な効果を追加しましょう。

Example: Yes, I strongly believe that being polite is very important. It helps us interact with other people in a friendly and respectful way. For example, saying “please” and “thank you” can make everyday conversations much more pleasant.

Suggestion: 質問は「どのような場面で礼儀正しくすべきか」を尋ねているため、まず具体的な場面を複数または1つ示してください。「bruising time」「Game should be more brightness」は不自然で意味が伝わりにくいので、「during a volleyball game」や「when meeting new people」などを使いましょう。礼儀正しくする理由は、相手を尊重し、良いスポーツマンシップを示すためだと説明できます。

Example: We should be polite whenever we interact with other people, especially during sports games. For example, in a volleyball match, players should respect the referee, encourage their teammates, and congratulate the opposing team. This shows good sportsmanship and creates a positive atmosphere.

Suggestion: 「いただきます」を使った具体例は質問に合っていて、文化的な内容も伝わります。ただし、時制と表現を修正しましょう。「I always say」は過去の習慣なので「I always said」、「when I started to eat」は「before eating」が自然です。また、「lunch lunch」「like mid time」などの繰り返しや不明確な表現を避け、誰に感謝を示す言葉なのかを説明すると内容が充実します。

Example: As a child, I always said “itadakimasu” before eating breakfast or lunch. It was a way of showing respect and gratitude to my family and to the people who had prepared the food. I also tried to say “thank you” whenever someone helped me.

× So So if I play some sports, it is so important to be politic.

✓ So, if I play sports, it is very important to be polite.

Politic usually describes something related to politics, whereas polite describes good manners. Use polite when talking about respectful behavior. Also, remove the repeated So and use sports without some when speaking generally.

× Yes I strongly believed that because One of the most important things to interact with other persons is

✓ Yes, I strongly believe that because one of the most important things when interacting with other people is being polite.

Use the present tense believe because this is your current opinion, not a belief that existed only in the past. The phrase when interacting with other people is more natural than to interact with other persons in this context.

× Yes I strongly believed that because One of the most important things to interact with other persons is

✓ Yes, I strongly believe that because one of the most important things when interacting with other people is being polite.

The sentence is incomplete because it ends after is and does not provide the necessary complement. Complete the structure by adding being polite after is. Also, begin the new clause with a lowercase one and use punctuation after Yes.

× I think when I play volleyball bruising time Game should be more brightness Because it helps me sportsmanship.

✓ I think we should be more polite when playing volleyball because it helps us show good sportsmanship.

Brightness is a noun referring to the amount of light, so it cannot describe people's behavior here. Use the adjective polite to describe respectful behavior. The phrase show good sportsmanship is the natural expression for demonstrating fair and respectful behavior in sports.

× I think when I play volleyball bruising time Game should be more brightness Because it helps me sportsmanship.

✓ I think we should be more polite when playing volleyball because it helps us show good sportsmanship.

The original sentence has an unclear structure and does not connect its ideas correctly. Use when playing volleyball to introduce the situation, and use because to give the reason. The verb show is also needed before good sportsmanship.

× I always say itadakimasu when I started to eat breakfast or lunch lunch like mid time.

✓ I always say itadakimasu when I start eating breakfast or lunch, such as at lunchtime.

Use the present tense start because always describes a repeated habit. The past tense started does not match this regular action. Use start eating rather than started to eat, and say at lunchtime for a meal eaten around midday.

× I always say itadakimasu when I started to eat breakfast or lunch lunch like mid time. So it is easy to

✓ I always say itadakimasu when I start eating breakfast or lunch, such as at lunchtime. It is an easy way to show politeness.

Use the article an before easy way because easy begins with a vowel sound. The original ending So it is easy to is incomplete, so it needs a noun phrase and a verb phrase: an easy way to show politeness.

× I always say itadakimasu when I started to eat breakfast or lunch lunch like mid time. So it is easy to

✓ I always say itadakimasu when I start eating breakfast or lunch, such as at lunchtime. It is an easy way to show politeness.

The sentence ends with the incomplete phrase easy to, so the listener does not know what is easy. Complete the sentence with an easy way to show politeness. Also, avoid repeating lunch and use such as at lunchtime to express the example clearly.