Politeness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 부모님에게 예절을 배웠다는 주제 문장은 좋지만, 마지막 부분이 문법적으로 중단되어 의미가 불분명합니다. ‘when you came across your neighbor’처럼 동사를 정확히 사용하고, ‘say hello’와 같은 표현 뒤에 행동을 완전한 문장으로 제시하세요. 또한 예시는 한 가지로 명확하게 마무리하고, ‘For example’로 세부 내용을 연결하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

Example: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents when I was a child. For example, they taught me to say hello whenever I came across a neighbor. They also reminded me to use polite expressions such as “please” and “thank you.”

Suggestion: ‘Yes, I do’로 직접 답한 점은 좋지만, ‘very biggest’와 ‘the biggest asset in the world’는 부자연스럽고 과장된 표현입니다. ‘Politeness helps people respect each other’처럼 간단하고 정확한 문장을 사용하세요. 마지막의 ‘By being polite’는 문장으로 완성되지 않았으므로, 그 결과를 완전한 문장으로 연결해야 합니다.

Example: Yes, I do. I think politeness is very important because it helps people respect and understand one another. For example, using polite language can make conversations more pleasant and prevent unnecessary misunderstandings.

Suggestion: 결혼식, 장례식, 비즈니스 미팅이라는 관련성 있는 예시를 제시했지만, ‘Omer occasions’, ‘casual things’, ‘should more be more polite’는 부정확하거나 어색합니다. ‘formal occasions’와 ‘than in everyday situations’를 사용해 비교를 명확히 하세요. 여러 예시를 나열하기보다, 각 상황에서 왜 더 공손해야 하는지 한 가지 이유를 덧붙이면 내용과 연결성이 향상됩니다.

Example: We should be especially polite on formal occasions, such as weddings, funerals, and business meetings. These events usually involve people we need to show respect to. In contrast, we can speak more casually with close friends and family.

Suggestion: 인사하고 상대방의 안부를 물었다는 핵심 내용은 적절하지만, ‘bought’, ‘Audrey P Eddie’ 등 의미가 불분명한 표현이 있고, ‘I always says’는 ‘I always said’로 고쳐야 합니다. 답변을 끝까지 완성하지 못했으므로, 어린 시절 실제로 했던 행동을 2~3개의 정확한 문장으로 설명하세요. ‘When I met…’와 ‘I also…’를 사용해 행동을 논리적으로 연결하고, ‘You look good’보다 상황에 맞는 ‘How are you?’ 또는 ‘Thank you’ 같은 표현을 예로 드는 것이 자연스럽습니다.

Example: When I was a child, I showed politeness by greeting adults whenever I met them. I usually said, “Hello, how are you?” and listened carefully when they spoke. I also used polite expressions such as “please” and “thank you.”

× For example, they taught me that you should say hi when you came across, come across your neighbor and also using a.

✓ For example, they taught me that I should say hi when I came across my neighbors.

The subject is the speaker, so the pronoun should be I rather than you. The pronoun my should also agree with I. The repeated phrase come across and the incomplete phrase using a should be removed.

× Yes, I do. I strongly agree with that opinion because politeness is very biggest, the biggest asset in the world we can respect to each other.

✓ Yes, I do. I strongly agree with that opinion because politeness is the biggest asset in the world and helps us respect each other.

Biggest is a superlative adjective and should not be used with very in this structure. Use the biggest, not very biggest. The phrase respect to each other is also grammatically incorrect; use respect each other or helps us respect each other.

× By being polite.

✓ By being polite, we can show respect to each other.

By being polite is only a phrase and does not form a complete sentence because it has no main verb and subject. Add a complete clause such as we can show respect to each other.

× Basically uh, it is like Omer occasions such as wedding ceremony and funeral and business meeting.

✓ Basically, there are other occasions, such as a wedding ceremony, a funeral, and a business meeting.

Singular countable nouns need articles. Use a before wedding ceremony, funeral, and business meeting. The corrected sentence also uses there are to introduce several occasions.

× We should more be more polite than casual things.

✓ We should be more polite in formal situations than in casual situations.

The adverb more should be placed before the adjective it modifies: more polite. The phrase should more be more polite has an incorrect word order.

× We should more be more polite than casual things.

✓ We should be more polite in formal situations than in casual situations.

A person or behavior should be compared with another situation or behavior, not with things. Use than in casual situations to create a logical comparison.

× I used to say hello and bought when I met Audrey P Eddie.

✓ I used to say hello and bow when I met other people.

After used to, use the base form of the verb. The verbs say and bow are parallel base forms. Bought is the past tense of buy and does not fit the intended meaning; bow is the appropriate verb here.

× I always says how are you today?

✓ I always say, How are you today?

The subject I takes the base verb say, not the third-person singular form says. The greeting should also be separated as direct speech.

× You look good and keeping a nice uh phrases.

✓ I used nice phrases such as How are you today? and You look good.

The original phrase combines verbs and nouns incorrectly and is not a complete grammatical sentence. Use used nice phrases to describe the phrases the speaker said. Nice phrases is plural, so do not use the singular article a.