Politeness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 「My mother taught me」だけでは不自然なので、「My mother taught me how to behave politely」と目的を明確にしましょう。また、「was very strict for me」は「was very strict with my sister and me」、「table manner」は「table manners」、「taught me to table manner」は「taught me table manners」に修正します。最初に答えを直接述べ、その後に具体例を1つ加えると、より自然で効果的です。

Example: My mother taught me how to behave politely when I was a child. She was very strict with my sister and me about table manners. For example, we had to wait until everyone was served before we started eating, even when we were having dinner at home.

Suggestion: 質問は「politeであること」について尋ねているため、「being proud」「being bright」ではなく、繰り返し「being polite」を使いましょう。「in the business thing」は「in business」、「high society people」は文脈に合う「senior colleagues or professors」、「one of an important aspect」は「one of the most important aspects」とします。最初に「Yes, I do」などの明確な立場を示し、その理由を1つに絞って説明してください。

Example: Yes, I think being polite is very important, especially in professional situations. It shows respect and helps people communicate more effectively. For example, as a researcher, I need to speak respectfully to professors and senior colleagues when discussing my work.

Suggestion: 「On what occasions」に対しては、まず「We should be polite when...」と具体的な場面を直接答えましょう。「high society people」「format」「be bright」「being pride」はこの文脈では不自然なので、「senior people」「formal meetings」「show respect」「being polite」に置き換えます。最後の文が未完なので、理由や結果まで完全な文で述べてください。

Example: We should be polite during formal meetings, especially when speaking to senior people or professors. This is important because we may need their agreement or support. Using respectful language can help us build trust and make a good impression.

Suggestion: 「greet fried tree」は意味が通らないため、「greet people properly」または「greet my teachers and relatives」としましょう。「when I was an elementary and junior high students」は「when I was in elementary and junior high school」と修正します。内容はよいので、行動を最初に述べ、誰にどのように挨拶したかを具体的に説明すると説得力が増します。

Example: As a child, I always tried to greet people properly. My mother taught me to say hello to my teachers, relatives, and neighbors. I also learned to bow slightly when I greeted them, especially when I was in elementary and junior high school.

× My mother taught me she was very strict for me and my sister.

✓ My mother taught me, and she was very strict with my sister and me.

Use the preposition with, not for, when describing strict behavior toward people. The sentence also needs a conjunction to connect the two independent ideas.

× For example she taught me to table manner very strictly, even when we have dinner only with my family.

✓ For example, she taught me table manners very strictly, even when we had dinner only with my family.

The expression is table manners, which is normally plural. Also, the answer refers to childhood, so the past-tense form had is more appropriate than have.

× For example she taught me to table manner very strictly, even when we have dinner only with my family.

✓ For example, she taught me table manners very strictly, even when we had dinner only with my family.

Because the speaker is describing childhood experiences, the past tense had should be used instead of the present-tense form have.

× ...especially when you have to talk with high society people like professor...

✓ ...especially when you have to talk with high-society people like professors...

The noun professor is countable and refers to people in general here, so it should be plural: professors. The expression high-society people is also written with a hyphen when it functions as a compound adjective.

× ...being bright is one of an important aspect for me to do our research.

✓ ...being bright is one of the important aspects of doing our research.

The phrase one of must be followed by the and a plural noun: one of the important aspects. The phrase of doing our research is also grammatically appropriate after aspects.

× ...being bright is one of an important aspect for me to do our research.

✓ ...being bright is one of the important aspects of doing our research.

After aspect, use of to describe the activity related to it. The original phrase for me to do our research is not the appropriate grammatical structure in this context.

× Meeting with high society people is the most important format for me to be bright because in this situation we are in very serious situations in my life.

✓ Meeting high-society people is very important to me because these are very serious situations in my life.

The original sentence contains an awkward and confusing structure. The revised version uses a clear main clause followed by a because-clause. Meeting can be followed directly by the object when referring to the activity in general.

× ...because in this situation we are in very serious situations in my life.

✓ ...because these are very serious situations in my life.

The original sentence shifts from the singular expression this situation to the plural noun situations without a clear grammatical connection. These are correctly introduces the plural noun situations.

× For example, we have to get agreement with these people and in this situation being pride is literally

✓ For example, we have to reach an agreement with these people, and in this situation, being proud is important.

The original sentence ends without a complete predicate and therefore does not express a complete thought. Adding is important gives the final clause a verb and completes the sentence.

× I think proper greeting is the foundation of our life...

✓ I think a proper greeting is the foundation of our lives...

A singular countable noun such as greeting needs an article when it is mentioned for the first time. The plural form lives is more natural when referring to people's lives in general.

× ...especially when I was an elementary and junior high students.

✓ ...especially when I was an elementary and junior high school student.

The subject is I, so student must be singular, not plural. Elementary school and junior high school describe school levels, while student refers to the person.

× ...especially when I was an elementary and junior high students.

✓ ...especially when I was an elementary and junior high school student.

The singular subject I requires the singular noun student. The plural form students does not agree with the speaker referring to himself or herself as one person.