Politeness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 文法と表現の正確さに改善が必要です。「this the character at first character」は不自然なので、「the main character was initially rude」と表現できます。また、「they learn」は過去形の「they learned」にし、「somehow」ではなく、物語の中でどのように学んだのかを具体的に説明すると、内容がより明確になります。最初に直接答え、その後に本の内容や母親から学んだことを説明すると、構成も自然です。

Example: I learned to be polite mainly from my mother. When I was a child, she often read me picture books in which the main character was initially rude. By the end of each story, the character learned that being polite was important, so I gradually understood the value of good manners.

Suggestion: 意見を明確に述べ、理由と例を加えている点は良いです。ただし、「make good relationship」は「build good relationships」、「how to being polite」は「how to be polite」とする必要があります。また、「if you learn how to be polite and if you need help they can help you」は不自然なので、「people are more likely to help you when you treat them politely」と簡潔にまとめると効果的です。「And」「But」の繰り返しを避け、「For example」や「As a result」などの linking words を使うと、より自然になります。

Example: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps us build good relationships with others. For example, if we treat people rudely, they may not want to help us. In contrast, when we show good manners, people are more likely to trust us and support us when we need help.

Suggestion: 質問に対して、具体的な場面を挙げて直接答えられています。「in any occasion」は「on any occasion」、「your boss」は一般論なので「their boss」または「a boss」、「do good behavior」は「behave respectfully」または「use good manners」が自然です。「Normally」と「But specifically」の対比を整理し、「especially」を使うと流れが滑らかになります。年上の人や上司以外に、初対面の人や公式な場面も加えると、内容に広がりが出ます。

Example: We should be polite on all occasions, but it is especially important when speaking to older people, our bosses, or someone we have just met. In these situations, we should use respectful language and listen carefully. We also need to behave politely in formal settings, such as job interviews or business meetings.

Suggestion: 具体的な行動と結果を述べようとしている点は良いですが、「lunges」はおそらく「language」または「manners」の誤りです。この文脈では「polite language」や「respectful language」が適切です。「build good relationship」は「build good relationships」とし、「by doing so」を使う場合は、その前に行動を明確に述べると自然です。あいさつ、丁寧な言葉遣い、先生の話を注意深く聞くことなど、具体例を一つ加えると説得力が高まります。

Example: As a child, I tried to use polite language when speaking to my teachers. I always greeted them, listened carefully, and said “please” and “thank you.” As a result, I built good relationships with them, and they were willing to help me when I had difficulties.

× Normally this the character at first character was not polite, but they learn somehow the importance.

✓ Normally, the character was not polite at first, but they learned the importance of politeness somehow.

The original sentence has an incorrect structure: this the character and at first character are not grammatical. Use the character as the subject and at first as an adverbial phrase.

× Normally this the character at first character was not polite, but they learn somehow the importance.

✓ Normally, the character was not polite at first, but they learned the importance of politeness somehow.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the events should be described in the past tense. Change learn to learned.

× Of course, yes, being polite is very important to make good relationship with other people.

✓ Of course, yes, being polite is very important for making a good relationship with other people.

Relationship is a singular countable noun, so it needs the article a. Also, for making is the appropriate structure after important when describing a purpose or result.

× But if you learn how to being polite and if you need help they can help you.

✓ But if you learn how to be polite and need help, they can help you.

After how to, use the base form of the verb, not the -ing form. Therefore, how to being polite must be changed to how to be polite.

× Normally people shouldn't be rude in any occasion.

✓ Normally, people shouldn't be rude on any occasion.

Use the preposition on with occasion when referring to a particular situation or any possible situation. The correct phrase is on any occasion.

× But specifically I think when we talk to older people or your boss, we need to speak politely and should do good behavior.

✓ But specifically, I think that when we talk to older people or our boss, we need to speak politely and should behave well.

The pronoun your does not agree with the subject we. Use our because the speaker is referring to the boss of the people included in we.

× When I was a child I tried to use good lunges and by doing so I could build good relationship with teachers and they were willing to help me.

✓ When I was a child, I tried to use good lunges, and by doing so I could build a good relationship with my teachers, who were willing to help me.

Relationship is a singular countable noun, so it requires the article a. The corrected sentence uses a good relationship.