Politeness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more coherent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid name confusion, correct pronouns, and include one specific example of what your mother did to show politeness. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'so' to connect ideas.

Example: My mother was my main role model, so I learned politeness at home. For example, she always greeted our neighbors with a smile and helped elderly relatives with groceries, which taught me to be respectful and helpful. Because I copied her habits, politeness became a natural part of my behaviour.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition and vague phrases, and support your opinion with a clear reason and a brief example. Use linking words (for instance, because, therefore) to improve flow.

Example: Yes, I believe being polite is very important because it reflects your manners and respect for others. For instance, polite behaviour can improve relationships at work and with family because people feel valued and respond positively.

Suggestion: Start with a clear general statement, avoid unclear words like 'brightness', and give specific examples of occasions. Use linking words such as 'especially' and 'for example' and keep sentences concise.

Example: Politeness is important at all times because it makes communication smoother and shows good upbringing. Especially during family events, such as weddings and religious festivals, and in formal settings like job interviews, you should be particularly polite to show respect.

Suggestion: This answer repeats the previous response and does not describe your own actions. Give a personal, specific example of what you did as a child, use past tense, and keep it brief and clear.

Example: As a child, I tried to be polite by greeting guests at family gatherings and offering them seats. I also helped set the table and said 'please' and 'thank you' regularly, which made adults praise my behaviour and encouraged me to continue being polite.

× Abhishek has their own role model.

✓ Abhishek has his own role model.

The sentence uses the plural pronoun 'their' to refer to the singular proper name 'Abhishek'. Use the singular possessive pronoun 'his' to match the singular masculine noun. Suggestion: match pronoun number and gender to the noun (e.g., 'he/his' for Abhishek).

× So as a child, my mother was my role model.

✓ As a child, my mother was my role model.

The phrase 'So as a child' is awkward; starting with 'As a child' is clearer. This is primarily a sentence structure improvement and avoids unnecessary conjunction 'So'.

× She is very polite and kind hearted.

✓ She is very polite and kind-hearted.

'Kind hearted' should be hyphenated when used as a compound adjective before or after a verb; also 'very' correctly modifies 'polite'. Use 'kind-hearted' as the standard adjective form. Suggestion: use hyphen for compound adjectives and check spelling.

× She is mum due to his politeness among all our relatives and neighbors.

✓ She is respected by our relatives and neighbors because of her politeness.

The original has multiple pronoun and word-choice errors: 'She is mum' is incorrect and unclear; 'his' wrongly refers to 'she'; word order is unnatural. The correction uses 'respected by' and 'her' to match the subject. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in gender and meaning and choose appropriate verbs ('respected') for the intended idea.

× So I observe what she did in her life.

✓ So I observed what she did in her life.

The question asks about childhood (past), so verbs should be in past tense. 'Observe' (present) is inconsistent; use past tense 'observed'. Suggestion: align verb tense with the time frame (past for childhood).

× I also followed her and I learned politeness from my home.

✓ I also followed her and learned politeness at home.

Use past tense 'learned' (already present) and the correct preposition is 'at home' rather than 'from my home'. Remove the unnecessary repeated subject 'I' for conciseness. Suggestion: use 'at home' to indicate location and keep tense consistent.

× Being polite is very essential because politeness showed your manners and personality also and it can show your training which is which is done by your parents and it's also very honourable.

✓ Being polite is essential because it shows your manners and personality, and it can reflect the upbringing your parents gave you; it is also very honorable.

The original is wordy and has tense and repetition issues ('showed' wrong tense, repeated 'which is'). Use present tense 'shows' for general truths. Replace 'training' with 'upbringing' for idiomatic expression. Combine clauses clearly and remove repetition. Suggestion: use simple present for general statements and choose clearer nouns ('upbringing').

× When you give politeness to anyone, you can receive it.

✓ When you are polite to others, they will often be polite to you.

'Give politeness to anyone' is unidiomatic and 'receive it' is vague. Use the reflexive social expression 'be polite to others' and a clearer result clause. Suggestion: prefer natural collocations like 'be polite to others' and 'they will be polite to you.'

× Probably brightness shows anywhere anytime because it reflects your upbringing and makes communication more smoother.

✓ Politeness shows everywhere because it reflects your upbringing and makes communication smoother.

'Brightness' is incorrect word choice; 'politeness' is intended. 'Anywhere anytime' is redundant; 'everywhere' suffices. 'More smoother' is ungrammatical (double comparative); use 'smoother'. Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary and avoid redundant comparatives.

× But especially on special occasions which brings people together like marriage ceremony and E festival, you must show your politeness on these occasions.

✓ But especially on occasions that bring people together, such as weddings and festivals, you should show politeness.

Problems: 'special' repeated, 'which brings' should be 'that bring' to agree with plural 'occasions', 'marriage ceremony' is better as 'weddings', 'E festival' is unclear—use 'festivals'. Use 'should' rather than 'must' for advice. Suggestion: use plural agreement, clearer vocabulary, and avoid repetition.

× What did you do to show your politeness as a child?

✓ (Question is fine; student response was repeated content)

The question sentence is grammatical. The student repeated an earlier paragraph instead of answering. Suggestion: answer with past actions (e.g., 'I greeted elders respectfully, helped at home, and listened carefully').