Politeness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Avoid asking the examiner questions and reduce repetition. Provide a specific example of an incident or a person who taught you politeness.

Example: I didn’t learn politeness formally; I picked it up gradually from my parents. For example, my mother taught me to say “please” and “thank you” by reminding me after meals, so over time those phrases became a habit.

Suggestion: Good direct answer; reduce fillers and add a specific reason or example to support your view. Use a linking word to connect your main idea and the supporting reason. Keep it within three sentences for naturalness.

Example: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it reflects respect for others and helps you build better relationships. For instance, polite behaviour at work can make teamwork smoother and create a positive impression.

Suggestion: Answer the question directly by naming occasions, then add one linking sentence explaining why. Avoid vague statements and unfinished sentences. Provide specific occasions (e.g. formal events, meeting elders, at work) and a short reason for each.

Example: We should be polite on many occasions such as at work, during family gatherings, and when meeting strangers or elders. This is important because politeness builds trust and shows respect in different social settings.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence describing a specific polite action you took, then give one brief example or result. Avoid repeating words and be precise about the actions you took (e.g. saying polite phrases, helping at home).

Example: As a teenager I showed politeness by following my parents’ rules and helping around the house. For example, I would set the table every evening and always say “thank you” when someone helped me.

× What would you consider as the factors of being a polite child? Because when I was a kid, I don't think I was a polite child more rather than I would consider myself as a naughty, naughty child who would be a menace to my family or my siblings or my parents.

✓ What would you consider the factors of being a polite child? When I was a kid, I don't think I was a polite child; rather, I would consider myself a naughty child who was a menace to my family, my siblings, and my parents.

This sentence misuses 'Because' to begin a new sentence and uses awkward conjunctions like 'more rather than'. Replace 'Because' with a simple connector or remove it, use 'rather' correctly, and simplify repeated words. Also fix parallel list punctuation. Suggestion: join ideas with a semicolon or conjunction and avoid redundant words.

× I think being polite is very important to every single individual, starting from being a child to an adult. Umm, it shows that what kind of upbringing your family has given you. So I think it's very important.

✓ I think being polite is very important for every individual, from childhood to adulthood. It shows what kind of upbringing your family gave you. So I think it is very important.

Use 'for' instead of 'to' with 'important', and use concise time phrases ('from childhood to adulthood'). Use simple past 'gave' for completed action (upbringing already provided). Avoid filler words like 'umm' and repeat words.

× In my opinion, I think politeness should not relate with any kind of vocation. Sure, politeness should come from within yourself. Politeness should be always there as a person's, umm, personality. For example, if if you.

✓ In my opinion, politeness should not be related to any particular occasion. Politeness should come from within. It should always be part of a person's character. For example, if you...

Use 'related to' rather than 'relate with'. 'Vocation' is the wrong word for 'occasion' or 'situation'. 'Within yourself' can be shortened to 'within'. 'Personality' is better replaced by 'character' here. Remove duplicated words and fillers.

× Again, at a certain age I was very mischievous, but in during my teen years, I tried to be polite by obeying my mother's command or my my parent or whatever my parents told me to do. I tried to obey all of their orders.

✓ At a certain age I was very mischievous, but during my teen years I tried to be polite by obeying my mother's commands or whatever my parents told me to do. I tried to follow all their instructions.

Use 'during' not 'in during'. 'Mother's command' should be plural 'commands' to match context; remove duplicate 'my'. 'Follow instructions' is a natural collocation. Maintain past tense consistency for past habits.