Politeness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct small grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add a brief specific example to support your point. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to make the answer coherent.

Example: I learned to be polite from my mother and grandmother because they raised me to mind my manners. For example, they taught me to greet adults respectfully and to say “please” and “thank you” when asking for something, so I grew up practicing those habits daily.

Suggestion: Give one clear topic sentence and then support it with a specific reason and short consequence. Fix grammar and avoid trailing unfinished sentences. Use linking words like because and therefore.

Example: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it reflects your character and helps build good relationships. Therefore, polite behaviour at school or work can make people trust and respect you more.

Suggestion: Start with a concise topic sentence, then list 2–3 specific occasions with brief reasons or examples using linking words (for example, for instance). Avoid vague phrases like ‘close people occasions’.

Example: We should be polite in everyday interactions, but especially at family gatherings, at work, and at school. For instance, at work politeness helps when collaborating on projects, and at family events it shows respect for elders.

Suggestion: Give a clear opening sentence summarising your habits, then list 2–3 specific actions with brief linking words (for example, I would, for instance). Correct small errors and avoid repetition.

Example: As a child, I showed politeness through simple habits. For example, I would always greet older people, say “thank you” when receiving something, and apologise if I accidentally hurt someone.

× To be honest me as a child I was raised by two women my mother and my grandmother so I always I always was told by both of them to be polite and to act wisely in front of other people.

✓ To be honest, as a child I was raised by two women, my mother and my grandmother, so I was always told by both of them to be polite and to act wisely in front of other people.

The sentence has awkward word order and repetition ('me as a child' and 'I always I always'). This is a sentence structure error (use ID 26). Move the phrase 'as a child' next to the subject, remove repeated words, add commas for clarity, and place 'always' before the verb for natural English word order: 'I was always told'.

× Absolutely. I think being polite and respectable is very important manners to have and to just it just reflects your personality and who you are in person and I consider it as a childhood manner. So you need to bring

✓ Absolutely. I think being polite and respectful is a very important manner to have, and it reflects your personality and who you are as a person; I consider it a childhood habit, so you should develop it early.

Mistakes include wrong word choice ('respectable' should be 'respectful'), incorrect noun agreement ('is very important manners' should be 'is a very important manner' or better 'an important habit'), and awkward phrasing ('in person' and 'bring' unclear). These are adjective/adverb and sentence structure errors (IDs 13 and 26). Use 'respectful' to modify 'being', correct quantifier/article usage ('a very important'), replace 'who you are in person' with 'who you are as a person', and replace 'bring' with 'develop' for clarity.

× I think it's very important to be polite all the time with other people, but if I need to be more specific, I think in family occasions, in friends and close people occasions at work, at school.

✓ I think it's very important to be polite with others all the time, but if I need to be more specific, I would say on family occasions, with friends and close people, at work, and at school.

Preposition use is inconsistent and awkward ('in family occasions' should be 'on family occasions'; 'with other people' is clearer than 'with other people' placement). This is an incorrect use of prepositions error (ID 11). Use 'with' for people, 'on' for occasions, and list parallel prepositional phrases for clarity.

× I used to greet elder people and also not to yell or hit other kids also to say thank you when someone gives gives me something and to say pardon or sorry when I do something wrong.

✓ I used to greet elderly people, not yell or hit other kids, say thank you when someone gave me something, and say 'pardon' or 'sorry' when I did something wrong.

Multiple issues: repeated word 'gives gives' and inconsistent tense. The phrase 'elder people' is incorrect; use 'elderly people'. Also sequence of past habits should use simple past after 'used to' for actions that happened in the past (ID 5 Past tense issue and ID 2 Third person singular where 'gives' was incorrectly repeated). Change 'gives me' to 'gave me' and 'do something wrong' to 'did something wrong'. Remove repetition and make items parallel in the list.