Politeness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the response more concise, correct grammar, and add one specific example. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain how your parents taught you and give a short example. Use linking words (for example, because) and avoid repetition.

Example: I learned to be polite from my parents when I was a child. They regularly reminded me to say “thank you” and to show respect to everyone because of our Christian beliefs. For example, they encouraged me to greet relatives and say thank you to teachers whenever they helped me.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then provide two concise reasons linked with cohesive devices (because, so, therefore). Avoid filler words and vague phrases like ‘maybe’ and ‘on everything.’ Be specific about the social benefits.

Example: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it shows respect and helps build good relationships. For instance, being polite to your boss can improve your professional reputation, and polite behaviour toward friends makes them more willing to support you.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and then give a few specific occasions (e.g., workplace, family gatherings, public places). Use linking words (for example, such as) and explain briefly why politeness matters in each case. Avoid overgeneralisation and conversational fillers.

Example: We should be polite in almost every situation, such as at work, at family gatherings, and in public places. For example, polite behaviour at work helps teamwork, while being courteous in public prevents conflicts and makes daily interactions smoother.

Suggestion: Start with a topic sentence describing your typical polite actions, then give one or two specific examples with simple linking words (for example, when, if). Use correct tense and concise phrasing, and avoid repetitive words like ‘often’ twice.

Example: As a child, I showed politeness by greeting my teachers every morning and saying “good morning.” For example, if a teacher helped me with homework, I always said “thank you” to show appreciation.

× So when I was a child, my parents often tell me to be polite to everyone, no matter it is strangers or your friends or your grandparents and they often tell me to say thank you to everything because they say as a Christian you should be polite to everyone and that is a good thing to learn.

✓ So when I was a child, my parents often told me to be polite to everyone, whether they were strangers, my friends, or my grandparents, and they often told me to say thank you for everything because they said that as Christians you should be polite to everyone and that it was a good thing to learn.

Errors: (5) Past tense issue and (27) Subject-verb agreement. The context is past, so 'tell' should be 'told' and 'say' should be 'said'. 'No matter it is strangers or your friends or your grandparents' is awkward and incorrect; use 'whether they were strangers, my friends, or my grandparents.' 'As a Christian' should agree in number with 'my parents' so 'as Christians.' Also change 'thank you to everything' to 'thank you for everything.' Suggestion: keep all verbs in past tense for consistency and use parallel, clearer phrasing.

× Yes, being polite is very important no matter individually or maybe when you are in society because being polite to maybe your boss, your friends makes you a very respectful person and people more likely to treat you well on everything.

✓ Yes, being polite is very important whether individually or in society, because being polite to your boss or your friends makes you a respectful person and makes people more likely to treat you well in all situations.

Errors: (16) Incorrect conjunction use, (12) Incorrect use of pronouns, (1) Singular and plural issue. 'No matter individually or maybe when you are in society' is ungrammatical; use 'whether individually or in society.' Remove extraneous 'maybe.' 'Being polite to maybe your boss, your friends makes' needs parallel structure and subject-verb agreement: 'being polite to your boss or your friends makes you a respectful person and makes people more likely...' Also 'treat you well on everything' should be 'treat you well in all situations.' Suggestion: use clear conjunctions and maintain subject-verb agreement.

× On every occasion we should be polite. Like there is not a specific event that we shouldn't be polite. I believe we should be respectful to everyone and not only our parents, but also our friends and maybe even strangers, or else we will affect their emotions.

✓ On every occasion we should be polite. There is no specific event on which we should not be polite. I believe we should be respectful to everyone, not only our parents but also our friends and even strangers, because otherwise we may affect their feelings.

Errors: (26) Sentence structure errors, (11) Incorrect use of prepositions, (13) Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs. 'Like there is not a specific event that we shouldn't be polite' is informal and awkward; use 'There is no specific event on which we should not be polite.' 'Or else we will affect their emotions' is unnatural; use 'because otherwise we may affect their feelings.' Suggestion: use formal connectors and natural collocations ('affect their feelings') and correct prepositional phrases.

× As a child when I go to school I often greet my teachers for example and good morning good afternoon and maybe if they help me something I would often say thank you

✓ As a child, when I went to school I often greeted my teachers, for example by saying 'good morning' or 'good afternoon,' and if they helped me with something I would often say thank you.

Errors: (6) Present tense issue (should be past in this context), (11) Incorrect use of prepositions, (8) Verb + -ing form not applicable but verb forms incorrect. 'When I go to school' should be 'when I went to school.' 'Greet my teachers for example and good morning good afternoon' needs punctuation and structure; 'greeted my teachers, for example by saying good morning or good afternoon.' 'If they help me something' requires preposition: 'helped me with something.' Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and use proper prepositions and punctuation to clarify reported actions.