Politeness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition. Use linking words like “because” once and give a concrete example of what your family taught you.

Example: I learned politeness from my family when I was a child. For example, my parents always told me to say “please” and “thank you,” and they showed me how to greet elders respectfully. Because of that, I developed polite habits that I still use today.

Suggestion: Start with a clear direct answer, avoid repeated words, and explain why with one or two specific reasons using linking words like “because” or “so.” Replace vague phrases with concrete benefits of politeness.

Example: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it helps build respect and good relationships with others. For example, being polite at work can improve teamwork, and being polite to strangers can make daily interactions smoother.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence stating your view, then name examples of occasions and use linking words like “for example” or “such as.” Avoid confusing or incorrect phrasing; be complete in your sentence.

Example: We should be polite in all situations, such as at school, at work, and when meeting new people. For example, polite behavior during a job interview shows professionalism, and politeness in public keeps the atmosphere calm.

Suggestion: Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood, and give a specific example of the polite phrases or actions you used. Keep sentences clear and avoid hesitation or repeated corrections.

Example: As a child, I showed politeness by always saying “po” and “opo” to elders, and by choosing respectful words when speaking. For instance, I would greet my grandparents each morning and say “thank you” after they helped me, which they appreciated.

× I learned to be polite as a child because my family taught me to be polite to everybody, that to everyone that I met or to everyone that I am around.

✓ I learned to be polite as a child because my family taught me to be polite to everybody, to everyone I met or to everyone I was around.

The original uses incorrect relative clauses and tense/pronoun forms ('that to everyone that I met' and 'that I am around'). Replace with 'to everyone I met' (past tense matching 'learned') and 'to everyone I was around' to maintain past context and correct pronoun usage. Also remove redundant 'that' and 'to' for clarity.

× Yes, I think being polite is very important wherever we are and whatever whoever we met because because it is the values that we embrace to our identity.

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very important wherever we are and whoever we meet because it is a value we embrace as part of our identity.

Problems: 'whatever whoever we met' is ungrammatical; tense should be present ('we meet') to match 'wherever we are'. 'because because' is duplicated. 'it is the values' should be singular 'a value' or 'values' with matching structure; 'embrace to our identity' is incorrect preposition and word choice. Corrected to 'a value we embrace as part of our identity' for grammatical agreement and natural phrasing.

× I think we should be alive in every occasion as a person, we don't choose what occasion that we can be polite and there's an occasion that we cannot be polite because wherever we are, politeness is

✓ I think we should be polite on every occasion; we should not choose which occasions to be polite, and there is no occasion when we should not be polite because politeness is important everywhere.

Original has 'alive in every occasion' which is incorrect word choice; run-on sentence and incorrect clauses ('what occasion that we can be polite'). Also sentence was incomplete. Correction replaces 'alive' with 'polite', fixes clause structure, removes 'that' misuse, and completes the final thought to express that politeness is always important.

× I show my politeness as a child by using Po and Opo in Filipino culture and I always chose the right word to say and I think chosen to I am choosing the right word.

✓ I showed my politeness as a child by using Po and Opo in Filipino culture, and I always chose the right words to say; now I try to choose the right words.

Tense inconsistency: question asks about past ('What did you do'), so use past tense 'showed' and 'chose'. Original included 'I always chose' then 'I think chosen to I am choosing' which is ungrammatical. Correction uses past actions and adds a present reference 'now I try to choose' if speaker wants to indicate ongoing behavior. Also pluralized 'words' for natural collocation.