Politeness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific, coherent example with accurate vocabulary. Use linking words (for example, because, when) and avoid repetition. Also correct unclear phrases like “said numbers they” to the intended action (e.g., ‘said hello’ or ‘bowed’).

Example: I learned politeness mainly from my parents. For example, when we had many guests at home, my parents always greeted the elders first, and I followed their example by saying “hello” and offering a seat. Because they modelled respectful behaviour, I naturally copied them and received positive feedback.

Suggestion: Give a direct opinion sentence, then support it with clear reasons. Avoid vague or repetitive phrases like “words are words.” Use linking words such as because and therefore. Keep it to 2–3 sentences maximum.

Example: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps build good relationships and shows respect for others. For example, polite behaviour can make daily interactions smoother and create better opportunities at work or school.

Suggestion: This answer is generally clear but could be improved by adding a specific example or brief explanation. Use linking words (for instance, such as) to connect the general statement to concrete situations. Keep sentences natural and avoid grandiose phrases without clarification.

Example: Politeness is appropriate anytime, not just on special occasions. For instance, you should be polite at work, when meeting new people, and in public places, because it helps create a positive impression and makes everyday communication easier.

Suggestion: Clarify and correct unclear or incorrect details. Begin with a topic sentence, then give one or two specific, correctly-worded examples. Avoid partial sentences and odd words (e.g., 'take out blade' seems wrong—likely meant ‘bring plates’ or ‘pass dishes’).

Example: As a child, I showed politeness by helping at family meals. For example, I would bring plates and pass dishes to each family member, and sometimes I put flowers on the table to make guests feel welcome.

× As a child I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and my family members.

✓ As a child, I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and other family members.

Missing comma after introductory phrase and awkward repetition 'my family members' after 'my parents'. Add comma after 'As a child' for clarity and replace with 'other family members' to avoid redundancy.

× I remember one specific time when there was a lot of there were a lot of guests on my house and my parents were greeting the elder people and I followed them and said numbers they and everybody started laughing.

✓ I remember one specific time when there were a lot of guests at my house; my parents were greeting the elders, I followed them and said something funny, and everybody started laughing.

The original sentence contains repetition ('there was a lot of there were a lot of'), wrong preposition ('on my house' should be 'at my house'), awkward phrase 'the elder people' (use 'the elders' or 'elderly people'), and unclear phrase 'said numbers they'. Correct by removing repetition, fixing preposition, using appropriate noun, and clarifying the final clause. Use punctuation to separate clauses for readability.

× I think being polite is one of the skills that everybody should learn as a human being as words are words are just really a thing.

✓ I think being polite is a skill that everybody should learn as human beings; words are very important.

The original repeats phrases ('as a human being as words are words are') and is wordy. Change 'one of the skills' to 'a skill' for simplicity, use plural 'human beings' to match 'everybody', and replace unclear repetition with a concise statement 'words are very important'.

× It does not necessarily require an occasion to be polite.

✓ Being polite does not necessarily require an occasion.

Original sentence is grammatically acceptable but word order is slightly awkward. Starting with 'Being polite' makes the subject clear; this uses the present participle correctly to express a general truth.

× We can always be polite anywhere, anytime.

✓ We can always be polite, anywhere and anytime.

Original is acceptable; corrected version adds a comma and uses 'anywhere and anytime' for smoother style. No major grammatical error.

× Being polite shows us many paths and opportunities.

✓ Being polite opens many paths and opportunities for us.

Use 'opens' rather than 'shows us' to better collocate with 'paths and opportunities', and place 'for us' at the end for natural word order.

× I did many things to so my politeness as a child.

✓ I did many things to show my politeness as a child.

Typo 'to so' should be 'to show'. Correct infinitive form 'to show' is required after 'did many things'.

× For example, I would take out blade for every family member while serving the food and I would put flowers to

✓ For example, I would take out a plate for every family member while serving the food, and I would put flowers on the table.

Several issues: missing article before 'blade' and likely wrong noun ('blade' should be 'plate' or 'serving utensil'); missing completion of sentence. Also incorrect preposition 'to' should be 'on' for placing flowers. Add articles and complete the sentence. If 'plate' is not intended, choose correct noun; ensure sentence ends with an object.