Politeness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar and sentence structure, be more concise, and add a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb tense and articles, and avoid redundancy.

Example: I learned to be polite from my family. For example, my parents taught me to use polite words like “please” and “thank you,” and to greet older relatives respectfully, which was important in our Asian culture.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (infinitive and ordinal usage), and give a specific reason or brief example using linking words like because or therefore.

Example: Yes, I think it is very important. Being polite helps build trust and respect, because people are more willing to cooperate with someone who treats them kindly.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence naming specific occasions, use coherent linking words, and avoid vague or contradictory phrasing. Limit to two or three concise sentences.

Example: We should be polite in everyday situations, such as at work, in public transport, and when meeting guests. Politeness makes interactions smoother and shows respect for others.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence about specific actions, avoid filler words (umm, uh), and use correct phrasing and complete sentences. Offer one or two concrete examples of behavior.

Example: As a child, I always said “please” and “thank you” and greeted guests politely. I also learned to wait my turn to speak and to say “excuse me” when I accidentally interrupted someone.

× I remember that we need to learn how to have a polite conversation with other people, especially who is older than you, because that is very important be in a Asian society.

✓ I remember that we needed to learn how to have a polite conversation with other people, especially those who are older than you, because that is very important in an Asian society.

Errors: incorrect pronoun use ('who' should refer to 'those'), wrong verb tense for past recollection ('need' -> 'needed'), missing 'are' after 'who', incorrect word order 'be in a Asian society' and article error ('a' -> 'an'). Suggestion: use 'those who are older than you' for referring to people, match tense to past narrative ('needed'), include 'are' for relative clause, use 'in an Asian society' with 'an' before vowel sound and correct preposition 'in'.

× Yes, absolutely. I think to being a good person you need to learn how to be polite 1st and that is the way how you connect with other people.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I think to be a good person you need to learn how to be polite first, and that is the way you connect with other people.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'to being' should be infinitive 'to be' (present tense usage), informal '1st' should be 'first', and unnecessary 'how' after 'way'. Suggestion: use 'to be' for purpose, write 'first' in words, and omit 'how' in 'the way you connect'.

× In my opinion, there's no way you did not need to be polite, because I think that is a basic. Attitude to treat other people, so that I think that is very important.

✓ In my opinion, there is no situation in which you do not need to be polite, because I think politeness is a basic attitude for treating other people, so it is very important.

Errors: awkward and split sentence structure ('that is a basic. Attitude'), incorrect tense/phrasing ('there's no way you did not need'), and incorrect preposition 'to treat'. Suggestion: rephrase to 'there is no situation in which you do not need to be polite', combine fragments into one sentence, use 'is a basic attitude for treating other people', and keep consistent present tense for general statements.

× When I was a child, I learned something that is very basically like, you need to, umm, say thank you or excuse me when you, uh, have a conversation and also you met someone you.

✓ When I was a child, I learned some very basic things, like you need to say 'thank you' or 'excuse me' when you have a conversation or meet someone.

Errors: incorrect adverb form 'basically' used as adjective ('very basic things' is correct), mixed tenses and awkward word order ('have a conversation and also you met someone you'), and extra filler words. Suggestion: use 'learned some very basic things', keep present tense for general behaviors ('you need to say' and 'when you have a conversation or meet someone'), and remove unnecessary fillers and repeated words.