Politeness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は断片的で繋がりが弱く、優先すべき情報（誰から学んだか・具体的な方法）が不足しています。流暢性を上げるために「話の核となる文（topic sentence）」を最初に置き、その後に具体例を1〜2つ、接続詞（because, so, for example）で結んでください。あいまいな語（uh, um）は減らし、文を短く明確に保ちましょう。語彙は“be polite”“avoid wasting food”“respect possessions”など具体的な表現を使ってください。

Example: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents when I was a child. For example, they taught me not to waste food and to take care of my clothes, so I always finished my meals and kept my clothes tidy.

Suggestion: 内容が矛盾していて誤解を招きます（“fight”の誤用や否定の根拠が不明）。明確な立場を示し、理由と一つの具体例で支持してください。肯定か否定かをはっきり述べ、接続詞（because, therefore）で論理を示すと良いです。ネガティブな主張をする場合は代替案や条件を添えると説得力が増します。

Example: I think being polite is very important because it helps people get along with others. For example, saying “thank you” can make a teacher or colleague more willing to help you.

Suggestion: 答えが限定的で具体性が欠けています。場面を複数挙げ（formal events, at school, with elders, at work）、それぞれに短い理由を付けて下さい。接続語（for example, also, especially）を使い、文を完成させること。

Example: We should be polite in many situations, for example at school when speaking to teachers and during formal events like ceremonies. Also, it's important to be polite with elders because it shows respect.

Suggestion: 比較的具体的だが文法と語順に改善が必要です（agree respectfully, classmates）。情報を整理し、主文→理由→具体例の構成で話すと自然です。多様な動詞（listen carefully, help classmates, say “thank you”）や副詞（respectfully, politely）を正しく使ってください。

Example: When I was a child, I showed politeness by listening carefully and agreeing respectfully with my teachers. I also helped my classmates and always said “thank you” and “excuse me,” which made my parents proud.

× I learned to be polite, uh, when a child.

✓ I learned to be polite when I was a child.

The original sentence omits the verb 'was' needed to indicate existence/state in the past ('I was a child'). This is a 'there be' / existence/state issue and also relates to sentence completeness. Use the past tense verb 'was' to show the subject's state in the past.

× I assured.

✓ I was taught.

The verb 'assured' is incorrect in this context. The speaker likely means someone taught or raised them to be polite. Replace with 'I was taught' to express passive past action; this fixes sentence structure and makes meaning clear.

× Shouldn't uh, waste of food and uh, things uh, like clothes?

✓ We shouldn't waste food or things like clothes.

Original is fragmented and lacks a clear subject and correct verb form. Use the auxiliary 'shouldn't' with the base verb 'waste' and connect items with 'or' for parallel structure. This corrects sentence structure and makes it a complete statement.

× I don't think fight is very important because polite isn't useful to.

✓ I don't think politeness is very important because being polite isn't useful.

'Fight' is likely a mistranscription; the intended noun is 'politeness' or 'being polite'. Use the noun 'politeness' or the gerund phrase 'being polite' consistently. Also change 'isn't useful to' to 'isn't useful' to complete the predicate.

× Life.

✓ in life.

Single-word fragment 'Life.' should be part of the previous clause. Use 'in life' to indicate context: 'useful in life.' This corrects sentence fragmentation.

× Even if you behave right, you can't get anything.

✓ Even if you behave properly, you might not get anything.

'Behave right' is unidiomatic: use the adverb 'properly' or 'well.' Also 'can't get anything' is strong; using 'might not' is more natural here. This addresses adverb usage and modal nuance; present participle isn't required, but the correction improves grammar and meaning.

× I think uh, people should be polite when they are taught from their coaches.

✓ I think people should be polite when they are taught by their coaches.

Use the preposition 'by' with 'taught' to indicate the agent performing the teaching. 'From' is less natural in passive constructions. This fixes preposition use.

× So at that time we are student and the.

✓ So at that time we were students.

Tense inconsistency and incomplete fragment: the question asks about occasions in general or past learning; keep past tense 'were' and plural 'students'. Remove the trailing incomplete 'and the.' This fixes sentence structure and subject-number agreement.

× When I was a child, I tried to be polite by listening carefully and agreeing respectful with my coach and teachers.

✓ When I was a child, I tried to be polite by listening carefully and agreeing respectfully with my coach and teachers.

Use the adverb 'respectfully' instead of the adjective 'respectful' to modify the verb 'agreeing.' This is a typical adverb/adjective confusion in past tense context.

× I often helped classmate and said thank you and excuse me with my parents pleased because it showed respect.

✓ I often helped classmates and said 'thank you' and 'excuse me' to my parents because it showed respect.

'Classmate' should be plural 'classmates' to match 'often helped' (general habit). Use 'to my parents' rather than 'with my parents pleased' which is ungrammatical; the phrase 'because it showed respect' explains the reason. Also enclose phrases 'thank you' and 'excuse me' as set expressions. This fixes pluralization and restructures the sentence for clarity.