Politeness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer and more structured. Start with a direct topic sentence saying you learned politeness from family and culture, then give one clear example with concise phrasing and a brief explanation of its meaning. Avoid hesitations and redundancy.

Example: I learned to be polite from my family and our cultural traditions. For example, we use a gesture called 'mano po' — taking an elder’s hand and touching it to our forehead — to show respect. This practice taught me to show deference to older people in everyday life.

Suggestion: Give a clear, direct opinion then support it with one or two logical reasons. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and avoid ambiguous or repetitive phrases. Keep it to two or three sentences maximum.

Example: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps people feel respected and creates a pleasant atmosphere. For example, politeness can reduce conflicts and encourage cooperation in daily life.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give a brief list of occasions with linking words to make it coherent. Avoid vague phrasing like 'more than how many times a day' and keep sentences concise.

Example: We should be polite on many occasions, such as at home with family, at school or work, and in public places. In fact, politeness should be part of our daily behaviour because it improves relationships and social interactions.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and then list two or three specific actions with short explanations. Avoid unclear words like 'by thinking' and correct grammar (e.g., 'doing the tasks they asked me to do').

Example: As a child, I showed politeness by greeting elders respectfully and helping with household tasks when asked. I also avoided starting arguments and tried to listen carefully to others.

× ****** the traditions and cultures that we had and for example, such as asking for the hand and put it in your forehead as a sign of a respect for elders.

✓ Because of the traditions and cultures that we had, we, for example, would take an elder's hand and put it on our forehead as a sign of respect for elders.

The original sentence has incorrect conjunction use and redundant connectors ('and for example, such as'); it also has verb form and article problems. I corrected the conjunction to 'Because of' to indicate reason, removed redundant phrases, changed 'asking for the hand and put it in your forehead' to a clear sequence 'would take an elder's hand and put it on our forehead', and removed the unnecessary article 'a' before 'respect'. Suggestion: avoid stacking conjunctions and choose one connector; ensure verbs in parallel structures match in form.

× It's called mano PO and we often used to do that to show politeness towards the elders.

✓ It's called mano po and we often used to do that to show politeness toward elders.

Problems: inconsistent capitalization ('PO' to 'po' is stylistic), slight preposition issue ('towards the elders' -> 'toward elders') and redundancy in article 'the'. The tense 'used to do' is acceptable for past habitual actions; I kept it. Suggestion: use 'toward elders' or 'towards elders' without 'the' when speaking generally.

× Yes, just as how you wanted to be respected is how you also want to respect someone.

✓ Yes, just as you want to be respected, you should also respect others.

Original sentence has awkward structure and tense inconsistency ('wanted' vs present meaning). I changed to present tense 'want' and simplified structure to 'you should also respect others' for clarity. Suggestion: keep parallel clauses in the same tense and use concise phrasing.

× Because it's not only your first time living here, it it's also their first time living.

✓ Because it is not only your first time living here; it is also their first time living here.

Issues: duplicate contraction 'it it's' and ambiguous pronoun reference. I expanded contractions to 'it is' and repeated 'here' for clarity. Suggestion: avoid double contractions and ensure pronouns clearly refer to the intended subjects.

× So why not do that on the others?

✓ So why not do that to others?

Preposition misuse: 'on the others' is unnatural; 'to others' is correct for treating people in a certain way. Suggestion: use 'to' when referring to actions directed at people.

× And for the others, do that unto you.

✓ And if you treat others well, they will treat you well in return.

Original uses unclear archaic phrasing 'do that unto you' and pronoun mismatch. I rephrased to a clear conditional cause-effect sentence. Suggestion: use modern, clear constructions to express reciprocity.

× The occasions where we should act polite, we should act every day, daily.

✓ We should be polite on all occasions; we should act politely every day.

Problems: awkward clause order and article misuse 'the occasions where' and adverb/adjective form ('act polite' -> 'act politely'). I restructured for clarity and grammatical adverb use. Suggestion: use 'politely' for actions and keep sentence order natural.

× We should do it often more than how many times a day, Because that's just how we should be living.

✓ We should do it often, more than just a few times a day, because that is how we should live.

Original has unclear quantifier phrase 'more than how many times a day' and punctuation errors (capital 'Because'). I clarified intention with 'more than just a few times a day' and corrected capitalization. Suggestion: be specific with quantifiers or use general phrases like 'often' or 'frequently'.

× By respecting the elders, by not starting the conflict first, by thinking, by greetings and doing the task that they ask or have you do it?

✓ By respecting elders, not starting conflicts, greeting them, thinking before acting, and doing the tasks they ask you to do.

Original sentence mixes noun and verb forms and ends with a question mark incorrectly. I made the list parallel (gerund forms) and corrected 'have you do it' to 'ask you to do'. Suggestion: maintain parallel structure in lists and use correct verb patterns after verbs like 'ask' ('ask you to do').