Politeness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the answer clearer, more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (how you learned), then give one short supporting example with correct tense and grammar, use linking words (for example, so, because) and avoid irrelevant phrases like 'Once Upon a time' unless telling a story. Also correct pronouns and verb forms (e.g., 'she said sorry', 'my first reaction was to blame her'). Keep it under five sentences.

Example: I learned to be polite from a childhood friend. For example, when we argued while playing, my first reaction was to blame her, but she would always say sorry and calm things down, so I realised apologising helps resolve conflicts. Because of her example, I tried to copy her behaviour and now I apologise more quickly when I’m wrong.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence then provide two specific reasons with linking words and correct grammar. Avoid vague or repeated phrases (e.g., 'have the responsibility' repeated). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'considerate', 'respectful', 'helps cooperation') and concise structure. Limit to up to five sentences.

Example: Yes, I believe being polite is very important. First, politeness shows respect and makes social interactions smoother, so people are more willing to cooperate with you. Second, being polite helps build trust and a positive reputation, which can lead to better friendships and work opportunities.

× To be honest, my little friend in my childhood taught me that Once Upon a time we played both on the bed and we hated each other.

✓ To be honest, my childhood friend taught me that once upon a time we used to play together on the bed and we used to quarrel with each other.

Errors: incorrect word order and phrasing ('my little friend in my childhood' -> 'my childhood friend'), improper capitalisation ('Once Upon a time' -> 'once upon a time'), awkward verb forms ('played both on the bed' unclear -> 'used to play together on the bed'), and 'hated each other' is too strong and contextually odd for children so 'used to quarrel with each other' fits. Suggestion: use natural collocations (childhood friend), past habitual 'used to' for repeated past actions, and choose appropriate verbs for meaning.

× The first reaction of me was to blame but she just say sorry.

✓ My first reaction was to blame her, but she just said sorry.

Errors: awkward expression 'The first reaction of me' -> 'My first reaction', missing object for 'blame' ('blame her'), and wrong verb form 'say' should be past 'said' to match past tense context. Suggestion: use possessive pronouns for reactions (my), include the object of blame, and maintain consistent past tense.

× I learned that.

✓ I learned that lesson.

Errors: sentence is grammatically possible but vague; adding 'lesson' clarifies meaning and fits context. Suggestion: expand to full idea when appropriate.

× Yes, I think it's a very important quality of a person because to be polite means the person is a kind and have the responsibility to enhance and often have the encouragement to take the responsibility on on his or her shoulder.

✓ Yes, I think it's a very important quality in a person because being polite means a person is kind, has responsibility for improving themselves, and often feels encouraged to take responsibility on his or her shoulders.

Errors: 'quality of a person' -> 'quality in a person' (preposition), 'the person is a kind' -> 'a person is kind' (incorrect article and adjective use), 'have the responsibility' -> 'has responsibility' (subject-verb agreement), awkward phrase 'enhance and often have the encouragement to take the responsibility on on his or her shoulder' corrected to 'improving themselves, and often feels encouraged to take responsibility on his or her shoulders' (pronoun clarity, reflexive/possessive consistency, plural 'shoulders' is idiomatic). Suggestion: ensure correct prepositions, match verb forms to singular subjects, use natural phrases (be kind, have responsibility), and avoid repetition; keep pronouns consistent.