Politeness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문법과 어휘 사용에서 많은 오류가 있으며 문장이 자주 이해하기 어렵습니다. 우선 핵심 내용(부모님이 본보기로 가르쳐주었다, 자연과 타인을 존중하는 법을 배웠다)을 명확한 토픽 문장으로 제시하세요. 그 다음 구체적 사례를 하나만 선택해 간결하게 설명하고, 연결어(for example, because, so)를 올바르게 사용해 문장들을 논리적으로 연결하세요. 또한 잘못된 단어(예: parent → behave/teach, claimed → climbed, remained not to leave any lavish → insisted we should not leave any litter, politicized/polytinist → polite)를 정확한 단어로 바꾸고, 문장 수는 3문장 내외로 유지하세요.

Example: My parents taught me to be polite by setting a good example. For example, when we climbed a mountain in Canada, they always insisted that we should not leave any litter because respecting nature is part of being polite. From those lessons I learned that politeness includes caring for the environment and showing respect to others.

Suggestion: 핵심 아이디어는 명확하지만 어휘 선택과 논리 연결에 실수가 있습니다. 'polytinist/polytiminist' 같은 오타는 'polite' 또는 'politeness'로 바로잡아야 합니다. 이유를 제시할 때 구체적 근거나 짧은 예시를 하나 더 넣어 설득력을 높이세요. 또한 'prevent understanding'는 의미가 반대이므로 정확한 표현('prevent misunderstandings')을 사용하세요. 문장은 2~3문장으로 유지하고 링크 단어(because, for example, so)를 자연스럽게 사용하세요.

Example: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it helps people build trust and maintain good relationships. For example, polite behaviour can prevent misunderstandings and reduce conflicts, so people are more willing to cooperate in the community.

× When I was a child, my parents taught me to parent by showing respect for nature and other people.

✓ When I was a child, my parents taught me how to behave by showing respect for nature and other people.

The original uses 'to parent' which is incorrect in this context; the student meant 'how to behave' or 'how to be polite'. This is a word choice error and affects sentence clarity. Replace 'to parent' with 'how to behave' or 'to be polite' to convey the intended meaning. Also make sure verbs match the context of learning manners.

× For example, when we claimed the Nemo Mountain in Canada, they always remained not to leave any lavish behind because over those lessons I learned that being politicized also means taking care of the environment and behaving.

✓ For example, when we climbed Nemo Mountain in Canada, they always reminded us not to leave any rubbish behind, and from those lessons I learned that being polite also means taking care of the environment and behaving properly.

Multiple errors: 'claimed' should be 'climbed' (wrong verb choice), 'remained not to' should be 'reminded us not to' (wrong verb and missing object), 'lavish' is the wrong noun; use 'rubbish' or 'trash', and 'being politicized' is wrong - use 'being polite'. Sentence structure was awkward; split into clearer clauses and add 'properly' after 'behaving'. These are word choice, preposition/object omissions, and sentence structure issues.

× Yes, I think being polytinist is very important because it helps people build trust and maintain good relationships.

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps people build trust and maintain good relationships.

'Polytinist' is a nonstandard/misspelled word; the correct adjective is 'polite'. This is a vocabulary/spelling error that changes meaning and is corrected to the intended adjective.

× For example, polytiminist behavior can prevent understanding and reduce conflicts so people are more willing to cooperate in the community.

✓ For example, polite behavior can prevent misunderstandings and reduce conflicts, so people are more willing to cooperate in the community.

'Polytiminist' is incorrect; use 'polite'. 'Prevent understanding' is the opposite of intended meaning; use 'prevent misunderstandings'. Also add a comma before 'so' and use plural 'misunderstandings'. This fixes word choice and clarity issues.