Politeness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail and a short example. Avoid repetition and fix small grammar issues (e.g., 'it shows respect and good behaviour'). Use linking words like 'also' or 'for example' to connect ideas.

Example: I learned to be polite from both my parents and my school. For example, my parents always reminded me to say 'please' and 'thank you', and my teacher encouraged us to take turns speaking during class, which taught me to listen and show respect.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion sentence then support it with one or two specific reasons, using linking words and correct grammar. Avoid repeating the same idea; instead explain how politeness affects relationships or outcomes. Use phrases like 'for example', 'because', or 'as a result'.

Example: Yes, I believe politeness is very important because it helps build trust and good relationships. For example, when colleagues speak politely to each other at work, cooperation improves and conflicts are less likely to occur.

× When I was a child I learned to be polite from school and my parents.

✓ When I was a child, I learned to be polite from school and from my parents.

Missing comma after introductory clause and parallelism issue: add a comma after 'When I was a child' and make the two sources parallel by adding 'from' before 'my parents'. This clarifies structure and improves fluency.

× They taught me to become a good person and it is very important to be polite it shows respect and behavior to.

✓ They taught me to become a good person, and they said it is very important to be polite because politeness shows respect and good behavior.

Run-on sentence and unclear phrase 'behavior to'. Separate ideas with a comma and conjunction, add a subject for the second clause ('they said'), and replace 'behavior to' with 'good behavior' and connect cause with 'because' to clarify meaning.

× Yes, I think being polite is very important because I it shows manner behavior to the other person and it is a good it shows good relationship and respect to other person is very important.

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows good manners and respect to the other person, and it helps build good relationships.

Multiple problems: extra pronoun 'I', awkward phrases 'manner behavior to' and 'it is a good it shows good relationship', and repetition. Remove the extraneous 'I', replace with 'it' to refer to 'being polite', use 'good manners' and 'respect to the other person', and combine ideas into a clear, concise sentence.