Politeness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce repetition, use a clear topic sentence, and add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep it under five sentences and avoid filler words. For example, start with a clear statement about who taught you, then add concise supporting examples (at home and at school) using linking words like “also” or “moreover.”

Example: My parents and teachers taught me to be polite as a child. At home, my parents encouraged me to say “please” and “thank you” and sometimes rewarded polite behaviour with small treats. Moreover, at school my teachers modelled respectful behavior and reminded us to be kind to classmates.

Suggestion: Clarify your opinion and avoid contradictory phrasing that confuses the message. Give a clear stance (yes or no), then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words like “however” or “for example,” and finish the thought—don’t leave sentences incomplete.

Example: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it reflects respect for others and helps build good relationships. However, there are rare situations, such as emergencies, when directness may be more appropriate than politeness. For example, if someone needs immediate help, a firm instruction like “Call an ambulance now” can be better than a polite suggestion.

× When I was a child my parents taught me to be polite by teaching me to say thank you and and please and they always gave me treats for being polite and other another way was in my school that our teachers taught us to be polite to our classmates and we.

✓ When I was a child, my parents taught me to be polite by teaching me to say thank you and please; they also gave me treats for being polite. Another way was at school, where our teachers taught us to be polite to our classmates.

This long sentence contains several issues: repeated words ('and and', 'other another'), awkward clause linking, and incorrect preposition ('in my school' should be 'at school'). The primary grammar problem type selected is 'Verb + -ing form' because 'teaching me to say' and 'being polite' include gerunds/infinitives that are used correctly but the sentence structure makes them confusing. Suggestions: split into two sentences to improve clarity; remove duplicate words; use 'at school' and a relative clause 'where our teachers taught us' to connect ideas properly; use punctuation (comma and semicolon) to separate clauses.

× On the one hand, being polite is very important because it shows how you raise and you it is a way to show respect to other people.

✓ On the one hand, being polite is very important because it shows how you were raised and it is a way to show respect to other people.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and verb forms: 'how you raise' is incorrect because the passive meaning about upbringing requires 'how you were raised', and the extra 'you' before 'it is' is erroneous. The grammar problem type is 'Incorrect use of pronouns'. Suggestions: use passive past 'were raised' to express upbringing and remove the stray pronoun; keep clauses separate with 'and' connecting two independent ideas.

× But on the other hand, I think in some situations it's very necessary for you to be polite to everyone.

✓ However, I think that in some situations it is not necessary to be polite to everyone.

The original sentence is contradictory to typical meaning later in the transcript and is awkwardly phrased ('very necessary for you to be polite to everyone'). The identified problem type is 'Sentence structure errors' because the sentence construction is unclear and likely opposite of intended meaning. Suggestions: rephrase clearly with 'I think that in some situations it is not necessary to be polite to everyone' or 'it may not be necessary' depending on intended nuance; use 'however' instead of 'but on the other hand' for smoother transition.

× For example, in some situations it may be awkward and in emergencies in the.

✓ For example, in some situations it may be awkward to be polite, such as during an emergency.

This fragment is incomplete and poorly structured: 'in emergencies in the.' is unfinished. The problem type is 'Sentence structure errors'. Suggestions: complete the thought by specifying the context ('such as during an emergency') and state the result ('may be awkward to be polite'); ensure sentences are complete with a subject and verb and avoid trailing prepositions.