Paper— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 先直接回答是否做过纸艺，再用一两个清楚的例子说明你做过什么。注意过去经历使用过去时（made），描述现在感受时使用现在时（feel）。“papers”通常应改为不可数的“paper”；原句中“fro into bowls”不清楚，建议换成准确、简单的表达。

Example: Yes, I have. When I was a child, I used to fold paper into small bowls and make paper letters. I found it relaxing, and I still enjoy making simple crafts now and then.

Suggestion: 用完整句子回答童年时喜欢做什么，并把“同学教我”和“我们一起做时的感受”连成有逻辑的补充。注意描述过去要用过去时，例如“learned”“felt”；“closely”不能表达亲密感，可用“close”。避免以“Which”另起一个不完整句，并补完最后的意思。

Example: I used to make paper boats when I was a child. My classmates taught me how to fold them, and we often raced them in puddles after it rained. Making them together was fun and brought us closer.

Suggestion: 先明确回答“不常写”还是“仍然喜欢写”，目前“No”和“I really like physical letters”容易让人误解。可以区分“喜欢纸质信”与“实际是否经常写”，再解释如今主要用什么方式联系。注意表达应为“technology has developed”，并避免重复“with the”。

Example: I rarely write physical letters these days, although I still like receiving them. Since technology has developed so much, I usually keep in touch with people by messaging or video calling them.

Suggestion: 直接回答人们是否仍会保存手写信，并补充一个具体原因或例子。原回答开头含义不清，建议使用简单准确的表达，例如“Some people still keep handwritten letters”。后面说明科技如何改变沟通方式时，要用连接词，并避免句子粘连；请完成未说完的结尾。

Example: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters, especially if they are from someone important to them. They can be meaningful keepsakes, even though most people now communicate through emails or video calls. For example, someone might keep a letter from a grandparent for many years.

Suggestion: 先明确说明是否会随身带纸和笔，再解释用途。注意使用“I like to bring”或“I usually carry”，而不是容易造成误解的“lied through”；“paper and pens”比“papers and pets”符合题意。用现在时描述习惯，并给出一个具体例子；最后一句需要完整结束。

Example: Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a pen when I go out. I like writing down ideas or things I need to remember, such as items on my shopping list. It is quicker for me than taking out my phone.

× Of course when I was a child I liked using papers fro into bowls or made paper letters When I make crafts with paper, I feel very happy and relaxed.

✓ Of course, when I was a child, I liked using paper to make bowls or making paper letters. When I make crafts with paper, I feel very happy and relaxed.

这里的 paper 表示制作材料，是不可数名词，通常不加 -s。表达“用纸做碗”时，可说 use paper to make bowls。

× Of course when I was a child I liked using papers fro into bowls or made paper letters When I make crafts with paper, I feel very happy and relaxed.

✓ Of course, when I was a child, I liked using paper to make bowls or making paper letters. When I make crafts with paper, I feel very happy and relaxed.

like 后面可以接动词 -ing 形式。这里的 using 和 making 并列，形式应保持一致；原句中的 made 与 using 不平行。

× In my childhood, I usually made paper boats. Which is learned from my classmates.

✓ In my childhood, I usually made paper boats. I learned how to make them from my classmates.

Which is learned from my classmates 是一个不完整的从句，不能单独作为完整句子。改成 I learned how to make them from my classmates 后，句子有明确的主语和谓语。

× When we made the paper boats together we feel very happy and closely because the games could make us

✓ When we made the paper boats together, we felt very happy and close because the games could make us...

这句话描述童年时发生的事情，前面的 made 使用过去时，因此后面的 feel 也应改为过去式 felt。

× When we made the paper boats together we feel very happy and closely because the games could make us

✓ When we made the paper boats together, we felt very happy and close because the games could make us...

这里需要用形容词 close 描述 we 的感受，不能用副词 closely。closely 通常表示“密切地”或“仔细地”。

× No, I really like physical letters as the technology is development.

✓ No, I really like physical letters as technology is developing.

be 动词 is 后面不能直接接名词 development 来构成进行时。表示“技术正在发展”时，应使用 is developing，即 be + 动词-ing 形式。

× I often contact someone with the with the phone either rechat or maybe video.

✓ I often contact people by phone, either through chat or by video.

表示“通过电话联系”时，通常说 by phone，而不是 with the phone。表示通过聊天或视频联系时，可以用 through chat 或 by video。

× As I mentioned before, technology has developed a lot people would contact others with on live video or emails.

✓ As I mentioned before, technology has developed a lot, so people contact others through live video or email.

原句中 technology has developed a lot 和 people would contact others 是两个完整句子，直接连接会形成逗号拼接句。可以用 so 连接，表达前后因果关系。

× As I mentioned before, technology has developed a lot people would contact others with on live video or emails.

✓ As I mentioned before, technology has developed a lot, so people contact others through live video or email.

这里是在说明人们现在通常采用的联系方式，宜使用一般现在时 contact。would contact 通常用于假设、过去习惯或间接表达，与这里的一般事实不匹配。

× Yes, I lied through bring papers and pets with me when I was on the street as I have the happy to write down the ideas or the items which I need to remember.

✓ Yes, I like to bring paper and pens with me when I go out because I am happy to write down ideas or items that I need to remember.

paper 在这里表示书写用纸，是不可数名词，通常不用复数 papers。表达“纸和笔”时可说 paper and pens。

× Yes, I lied through bring papers and pets with me when I was on the street as I have the happy to write down the ideas or the items which I need to remember.

✓ Yes, I like to bring paper and pens with me when I go out because I am happy to write down ideas or items that I need to remember.

问题询问的是现在是否会随身携带纸和笔，回答一般习惯时应使用一般现在时，如 I like 和 when I go out，而不是过去时 was。

× Yes, I lied through bring papers and pets with me when I was on the street as I have the happy to write down the ideas or the items which I need to remember.

✓ Yes, I like to bring paper and pens with me when I go out because I am happy to write down ideas or items that I need to remember.

happy 是形容词，表达“我很乐意/高兴做某事”时应使用 I am happy to...。原句 I have the happy 的结构不正确，不能用 have the 加形容词来表达这种意思。