Paper— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答有相关内容，也提到了童年和现在的做法，但句子连接混乱，最后一句没有说完。“as a result”在这里使用不当；“make a card, greetings”表达不自然。建议直接回答后，分别用一两句说明过去和现在，并补充制作贺卡的原因。

Example: Yes, I have. When I was a child, I used to make paper airplanes for fun. These days, I sometimes make handmade birthday cards for my friends because they feel more personal.

Suggestion: 你直接回答了喜欢折纸飞机，也提供了和哥哥比赛的细节，这是优点。但“ear plane”应为“airplane”，“whose ... flight far distance”语法不正确，最后的“I often made”也没有完整表达。建议用过去时说明比赛内容，并补充比赛带来的感受或结果。

Example: As a child, I really enjoyed making paper airplanes. My brother and I often competed to see whose plane could fly the farthest. It was a simple activity, but we had a lot of fun.

Suggestion: 回答立场清楚，也解释了写贺卡的原因。不过“a physical letters”单复数不一致，“write a little as a greeting cards”表达不自然；“when it was her birthday”与一般习惯不匹配。建议改用“handwritten cards/notes”，并保持一般现在时。

Example: Yes, I do, although I usually write cards rather than full letters. I send my friends handwritten birthday cards because they feel more personal and meaningful than a text message.

Suggestion: 你给出了明确观点和原因，也提到来自亲人的信更值得保存，内容较具体。但“some of the people”应改为“some people”，“preserve them very well”不够自然；代词单复数也不一致。最后一句没有说完，建议删去未完成的内容，或完整说明信件代表什么。

Example: Yes, I think some people still keep handwritten letters. They may treasure them because they feel more personal than text messages, especially if they were written by a loved one. People might keep them as special mementos.

Suggestion: 回答结构清楚，也通过上课、开会和与朋友外出作了对比。但“take them to take a note”重复且不自然，“if it if”是重复表达，最后的“It's”没有说完。建议用“take notes”表达记笔记，并删去重复部分，确保结尾完整。

Example: Usually, I don't carry paper and pens unless I'm going to class or a meeting, when I might need to take notes. When I go out with friends, I use my phone if I need to write something down.

× In my childhood I used to make paper airplanes for fun and as a result, and as an adult now I always use paper to make a card, greetings and send it to my friends for their birthday.

✓ In my childhood, I used to make paper airplanes for fun. As an adult, I now use paper to make cards with greetings on them and send them to my friends for their birthdays.

原句中“a card”和后面的复数“greetings”不协调，“send it”也与复数的“cards”不一致；“friends”是复数，因此通常说“their birthdays”。注意名词单复数及代词要与其指代对象保持一致。

× for fun and as a result, and as an adult now

✓ for fun, and as an adult, I now

“as a result”表示“因此”，但这里并没有表达前后因果关系；同时“and”重复连接，导致连接关系混乱。删除“as a result”，并用一个“and”连接童年和成年后的情况即可。

× I often had a competition with my brother to see whose ear plane flight far distance.

✓ I often had a competition with my brother to see whose airplane flew the farthest.

这句话描述的是小时候经常发生的事情，应该使用过去时。“flight”在这里不能作谓语动词，应使用“fly”的过去式“flew”。讲述过去发生的事情时，要确保谓语动词使用过去时。

× whose ear plane flight far distance

✓ whose airplane flew the farthest

这里是在比较谁的飞机飞得最远，因此需要使用最高级“the farthest”，而不是“far distance”。比较两者时可用比较级；表示范围内“最……”时使用最高级。

× Yes, I still write a physical letters.

✓ Yes, I still write physical letters.

“letters”是复数名词，不能与单数不定冠词“a”连用。复数名词前应去掉“a”；如果想表达一封信，则应说“a physical letter”。

× I always write a little as a greeting cards and send it to my friends when it was her birthday.

✓ I always write a short message in a greeting card and send it to my friends when it's their birthday.

“a”后面应接单数名词，因此应说“a greeting card”，不能说“a greeting cards”。此外，原句表达习惯性行为，使用单数“a greeting card”更合适；调整后的句子也明确了“it”指一张卡片。

× when it was her birthday

✓ when it's their birthday

句子描述的是平时的习惯，而不是过去某一次的情况，因此应使用一般现在时“is”，而不是过去时“was”。表达经常发生的事情时，注意保持一般现在时。

× when it was her birthday

✓ when it's their birthday

“friends”指多个朋友，后面用“her”会造成指代不一致。可用“their”指代性别不明确或泛指的单数对象，也可根据具体语境使用“their birthdays”。代词应与所指对象相符。

× I think some of the people, yes

✓ I think some people do, yes.

这里泛指“一些人”，不需要定冠词“the”。“some of the people”通常指前文已经明确提到的某一群人；泛指时说“some people”更合适。

× a handwritten letter is more meaningful than a message and they will preserve them very well

✓ A handwritten letter is more meaningful than a message, and people will preserve it carefully.

前面用单数“a handwritten letter”，后面却用复数代词“them”，单复数指代不一致。若指一封手写信，应使用单数代词“it”。

× especially when it's received from the loved ones

✓ especially when it's received from loved ones

这里泛指亲人或所爱的人，并未指明特定的一群人，因此通常不加定冠词“the”。泛指复数名词时，一般直接使用名词复数。

× so if it if I need to write something down I will use my phone.

✓ so if I need to write something down, I will use my phone.

条件从句中多余地重复了“it if”，破坏了句子结构。条件句应使用“If + 主语 + 谓语”结构，例如“If I need to write something down”。说话时也要避免重复使用连接词或代词。