Paper— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答直接，理由也清楚，但“because because”是重复错误；“good at it”可以更具体，说明你不擅长哪一方面。句末“doing this”略显含糊，可以改为“making paper crafts”。建议使用“because”或“so”中的一个，并补充一个简单的具体原因，使答案更自然。

Example: No, I haven’t made many paper crafts because I’m not very good at making things by hand. I usually find it difficult to fold or cut the paper accurately, so I tend to avoid it.

Suggestion: 答案有清晰的经历和具体细节，但“have contacts with my friends”不自然，应改为“compete with my friends”或“compare our airplanes”。“It's it was”是明显的自我纠正和重复，建议直接说“It was simple but memorable”。还可以使用“when”或“because”连接细节，让表达更流畅。

Example: When I was young, I used to make paper airplanes and compete with my friends to see whose plane could fly the farthest. It was a simple activity, but it was memorable because we often spent an entire afternoon doing it.

Suggestion: 答案观点明确，也给出了现代人使用手机的原因，但“most of the people”应改为“most people”，“informations”是不可数名词，应改为“information”。“write physical letters”重复出现两次，可以用“them”替代。注意问题问的是写信，最后提到“take notes”与主题不完全匹配，更合适的是“send messages”或“keep in touch”。

Example: Not really. I rarely write physical letters anymore because most people use their phones to keep in touch. It’s quicker to send a message, and I can also save important information digitally.

Suggestion: 答案中有较多停顿词、重复和自我修正，影响流利度和自然度。“real people”表达不准确，应改为“some people”；“mobile phones is”应改为“mobile phones are”；“instant informations”应改为“instant messages”。此外，答案的逻辑不清：问题是人们是否保留手写信，应该先明确回答“Yes, some people do”或“No, not many people do”，再解释原因。结尾“Rather than...”结构不完整，建议使用“rather than writing handwritten letters”。

Example: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters, especially when they have sentimental value. However, most people prefer digital messages because mobile phones are more convenient and allow them to communicate instantly. As a result, handwritten letters are becoming less common.

Suggestion: 答案结构清楚，先回答频率，再说明会议或面试时的例外情况，内容也切题。“if I I will have”有重复且时态错误，应改为“if I have”或“when I have”；“my paper and pens”更自然的说法是“some paper and a pen”；“take some notes immediately”可以简化为“take notes”。建议使用“but”连接对比，并避免重复表达。

Example: To be honest, I usually don’t carry paper and a pen when I go out. However, I bring them if I have a meeting or a job interview, in case I need to take notes or write down some important information.

× No, I haven't made any crafts with paper because because I know that I'm not good at it, so I always avoid doing this.

✓ No, I haven't made any crafts with paper because I know that I'm not good at it, so I always avoid doing this.

because 被重复使用了一次。一个从属连词只需要使用一次，否则会造成连接词重复。建议说话时注意不要因为犹豫而重复同一个词。

× When I was young, I used to make paper airplanes and have contacts with my friends to see whose airplanes could fly the fastest. It's it was simple and memorable.

✓ When I was young, I used to make paper airplanes and have contacts with my friends to see whose airplanes could fly the fastest. It was simple and memorable.

前文讲述的是童年时期的经历，因此应该使用过去时。It's 是 it is 的缩写，表示现在时；这里应删除 It's，只保留 It was。

× Not really. Personally, I do not write physical letters anymore and I think most of the people nowadays do not write physical letters. People tend to use their mobile phones to take notes or save some important informations.

✓ Not really. Personally, I do not write physical letters anymore, and I think most people nowadays do not write physical letters. People tend to use their mobile phones to take notes or save some important information.

information 是不可数名词，不能加复数后缀 -s，所以不能说 informations。应使用 information。这里的 most people 比 most of the people 更适合泛指大多数人。

× I think nowadays real people will keep handwritten letters because, you know, uh, mobile phones is very convenient and uh, we can use phones to take notes, send the instant informations.

✓ I think nowadays real people will keep handwritten letters because, you know, mobile phones are very convenient, and we can use phones to take notes and send instant information.

mobile phones 是复数主语，所以 be 动词必须使用 are，而不能使用 is。使用复数主语时，要特别检查谓语动词是否也使用复数形式。

× I think nowadays real people will keep handwritten letters because, you know, uh, mobile phones is very convenient and uh, we can use phones to take notes, send the instant informations.

✓ I think nowadays real people will keep handwritten letters because, you know, uh, mobile phones are very convenient, and we can use phones to take notes and send instant information.

information 是不可数名词，不能使用复数形式 informations。表达“即时信息”时，可以说 instant information。不可数名词前通常不能直接加 -s。

× I think nowadays real people will keep handwritten letters because, you know, uh, mobile phones is very convenient and uh, we can use phones to take notes, send the instant informations. So I think, uh, it's more convenient for us to use mobile. Rather than use the using the handwrite handwritten letters.

✓ I think nowadays people still keep handwritten letters because mobile phones are very convenient, and we can use them to take notes and send instant information. So I think it's more convenient for us to use mobile phones rather than handwritten letters.

mobile 在这里表示手机这一类可数名词，不能单独作为名词使用，应该说 mobile phones 或 a mobile phone。泛指手机时使用复数 mobile phones 更自然。

× I think nowadays real people will keep handwritten letters because, you know, uh, mobile phones is very convenient and uh, we can use phones to take notes, send the instant informations. So I think, uh, it's more convenient for us to use mobile. Rather than use the using the handwrite handwritten letters.

✓ I think nowadays people still keep handwritten letters because mobile phones are very convenient, and we can use them to take notes and send instant information. So I think it's more convenient for us to use mobile phones rather than handwritten letters.

Rather than use the using the handwrite handwritten letters 结构混乱，重复使用了 use 和 handwrite，且 the using 不能这样使用。比较两个事物时，可以使用 use A rather than B。建议先确定句子主干，再删除口语中的重复和自我修正。

× To be honest, most of the time I do not carry paper and pens when I go out, but if I I will have a meeting or interview, I would bring my paper and pens in case I have to take some notes immediately.

✓ To be honest, most of the time I do not carry paper and pens when I go out, but if I have a meeting or an interview, I will bring paper and pens in case I have to take some notes immediately.

在 if 条件句中，通常使用一般现在时表示将来条件，因此应说 if I have，而不是 if I will have。主句可以使用 will 表示将来的结果。另有一个重复的 I，需要删除。