Paper— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答基本切题，但“pickup plan”和“blue barkest”意思不清，可能想表达“paper airplane”和“looked best”。注意使用正确的过去时：told me, enjoyed, tried, looked。名词要用复数或正确形式，如“different designs”。建议先直接回答“Yes, I have”，再补充制作过程和感受，并使用“and”“to see which one...”连接细节。

Example: Yes, I have. A classmate taught me how to make a paper airplane, and we really enjoyed the process. We tried several different designs to see which one flew the best.

Suggestion: 回答包含绘画和撕纸等细节，但开头“For the player”不符合语境，可能想说“As a child”。注意过去时和动词形式：I usually drew, sometimes scratched/tore；“sunflower”应写成一个词，“to relieve stress”比“for releasing my stress”更自然。避免重复“I usually draw”，可以用“Besides that”连接第二个活动。

Example: As a child, I loved drawing on paper, especially sunflowers and trees. Besides that, I sometimes scratched or tore the paper when I felt stressed, because it helped me relieve my stress.

Suggestion: 观点清楚，但没有以完整句子开头，而且“using phone”应为“using our phones”，“physical letter with each other”不自然。建议先直接回答“No, I don’t”，然后用“because”说明现在主要发短信，最后补充个人看法。注意“out of date”可以使用，但“quite outdated”更自然。

Example: No, I don’t. Since most people use their phones nowadays, I usually text my friends instead of writing letters. I think physical letters are quite outdated, although they can feel more personal.

Suggestion: 回答有明确观点和原因，但开头“It's true”不够直接，且“the handwritten letters”重复；“easy to express”应改为“they make it easy to express”。建议先说“Yes, some people do”，再说明手写信具有个人意义，并用“because”或“especially”连接具体原因。

Example: Yes, some people still do, especially when the letters have sentimental value. Handwritten letters can show sincerity and make it easier for people to express their love to friends and family. They may also keep them as special memories.

Suggestion: 回答直接，理由也比较清楚，但“save it”指代不明确，而且“I just...”重复。建议使用“Instead”或“because”组织句子，并明确说明手机可以发短信和记录信息。注意“paper and pens”前可使用“a pen and some paper”，表达更自然。

Example: No, I don’t. I usually just take my phone when I go out because I can text people and take notes on it. It’s much more convenient than carrying a pen and some paper.

× It was really fun and creative and we tried different design to see which one blue barkest.

✓ It was really fun and creative, and we tried different designs to see which one flew best.

“Different”表示“不同的”，后面通常接可数名词复数，因此“design”应改为“designs”。

× It was really fun and creative and we tried different design to see which one blue barkest.

✓ It was really fun and creative, and we tried different designs to see which one flew best.

前文使用了一般过去时“was”和“tried”，所以表示纸飞机飞得最好也应使用过去式“flew”。“blue barkest”应改为正确的过去式表达“flew best”。

× For the player I usually draw on paper. I usually draw the sun flower or trees on the paper.

✓ For the player, I usually draw on paper. I usually draw sunflowers or trees on paper.

这里的“paper”表示一种绘画材料，是不可数名词，泛指时不需要使用定冠词“the”，所以应说“on paper”。

× Sometimes I scratching the paper or tearing the paper just for releasing my stress.

✓ Sometimes I scratch the paper or tear the paper just to relieve my stress.

“Sometimes”表示一种习惯，后面应使用一般现在时，因此“scratching”应改为“scratch”，“tearing”应改为“tear”。一般现在时中，两个并列动词形式要保持一致。

× because we are using phone now and I usually just text my friend and we don't have physical letter with each other.

✓ Because we use phones now, I usually just text my friends, and we don't have physical letters with each other.

这里是在描述当前的普遍习惯，应使用一般现在时“use”，而不是现在进行时“are using”。“phone”和“letter”表示一类事物时应使用复数形式“phones”和“letters”。

× because we are using phone now and I usually just text my friend and we don't have physical letter with each other.

✓ Because we use phones now, I usually just text my friends, and we don't have physical letters with each other.

“Phone”“friend”和“letter”在这里都是泛指，不是某一个特定对象，因此应使用复数形式“phones”“friends”和“letters”。

× Some people like keeping handwritten letters because the handwritten letters can show their honesty and sincerity to their friends or family perfectly and easy to express their love to them.

✓ Some people like keeping handwritten letters because handwritten letters can perfectly show their honesty and sincerity to their friends or family and easily express their love to them.

“Handwritten letters”在这里是泛指，不是特定的某些信件，所以不应使用定冠词“the”。泛指复数名词前通常不加冠词。

× Some people like keeping handwritten letters because the handwritten letters can show their honesty and sincerity to their friends or family perfectly and easy to express their love to them.

✓ Some people like keeping handwritten letters because handwritten letters can perfectly show their honesty and sincerity to their friends or family and easily express their love to them.

“Easy”是形容词，不能直接修饰动词“express”。修饰动词时应使用副词“easily”。同理，“perfectly”和“easily”在句中都作副词使用。

× I just text on my phone and save it I think it's more convenient than taking paper or pens with me.

✓ I just text on my phone and save it, and I think it's more convenient than taking paper or pens with me.

原句中“save it”和“I think”之间缺少连接或标点，导致两个完整句子直接连接，形成句子结构错误。可以加逗号和连词“and”来连接两个分句。