Paper— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 질문에 직접 답한 점은 좋지만, ‘the paper craft’, ‘There were art class’, ‘I did good job’은 부자연스럽습니다. ‘paper crafts’, ‘an art class’, ‘I did a good job’처럼 관사와 문법을 수정하세요. 어떤 종이 공예를 만들었는지 구체적으로 설명하고, ‘because’나 ‘so’를 사용해 답변을 자연스럽게 연결하면 좋습니다. 현재 답변은 3문장으로 짧지만 내용이 제한적이므로 구체적인 결과나 느낌을 한 문장 추가하세요.

Example: Yes, I made paper crafts when I was a child, especially in art class at school. I remember making a paper flower and a small boat. It was quite simple, but I was proud of my work.

Suggestion: 과거의 일을 말하므로 ‘I like’가 아니라 ‘I liked’를 사용해야 합니다. ‘fold paper various method ways’는 ‘fold paper in different ways’로 고치고, ‘make airplane’에는 관사를 넣어 ‘make paper airplanes’라고 표현하세요. 답변이 ‘and then I’에서 중단되어 완결되지 않았으므로 반드시 문장을 끝내야 합니다. 종이비행기를 만든 뒤 무엇을 했는지, 또는 왜 좋아했는지를 추가하면 더 효과적입니다.

Example: When I was young, I liked folding paper in different ways to make paper airplanes. Then, I would fly them with my friends in the schoolyard. I enjoyed seeing whose airplane could fly the farthest.

Suggestion: ‘Riding physical letters’는 의미상 ‘Writing physical letters’가 맞습니다. 이유를 말할 때 ‘It is because to write...’ 대신 ‘I enjoy it because...’처럼 자연스러운 구조를 사용하세요. ‘show my own mind of them’은 부자연스러우므로 ‘express my feelings’ 또는 ‘show people that I care’로 바꾸는 것이 좋습니다. 누구에게 어떤 상황에서 편지를 쓰는지 구체적인 예를 제시하면 답변의 설득력이 높아집니다.

Example: Yes, I still write physical letters from time to time. I enjoy them because they allow me to express my feelings in a personal way. For example, I sometimes write birthday cards to close friends and family members.

Suggestion: ‘Yes, they do’ 뒤에 일반적인 설명을 먼저 제시하고 구체적인 예를 연결해야 합니다. ‘when I order the food from delivery’는 ‘when I order food for delivery’로, ‘there was many’는 ‘there are many’로 수정하세요. ‘handwriting memos to thanks for order’는 ‘handwritten notes thanking customers for their orders’가 자연스럽습니다. 생일에 받은 손편지나 카드에 대한 문장은 완성되지 않았으므로 ‘I have also kept birthday cards from my friends’처럼 명확하게 마무리하세요.

Example: Yes, I think people still keep handwritten letters, although they are less common than before. For instance, delivery drivers or restaurants sometimes include handwritten notes thanking customers for their orders. Many people also keep birthday cards because they have sentimental value.

Suggestion: 첫 문장으로 답변을 직접 시작한 점은 좋지만, ‘situations that need papers or pens or not something’은 의미가 불분명합니다. ‘situations in which I need a pen and paper’처럼 표현하고, ‘papers’보다는 일반적으로 ‘paper’를 사용하세요. 펜과 종이를 실제로 언제 사용하는지 구체적인 상황을 한두 가지 제시하면 좋습니다. 예를 들어 메모를 하거나 주소를 적는 상황을 설명하고, ‘so’를 반복하지 않도록 문장을 나누세요.

Example: Yes, I usually carry a pen and a small notebook when I go out. I use them to write down quick notes, shopping lists, or important phone numbers. Although I can use my phone for most things, writing by hand is sometimes more convenient.

× Yes, when I was a child I made the paper craft in school.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I made a paper craft at school.

Use the indefinite article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'paper craft.' Also, 'at school' is the more natural prepositional phrase for an activity done at school.

× There were art class to make it.

✓ There was an art class where we made paper crafts.

Use 'there was' because 'an art class' is singular. The phrase 'an art class' also needs the indefinite article 'an.'

× I did good job.

✓ I did a good job.

The singular countable noun 'job' requires the indefinite article 'a.'

× When I was young, I like to fold paper various method ways to make airplane or something, and then I.

✓ When I was young, I liked to fold paper in various ways to make an airplane or something, and then I made it.

Because 'when I was young' refers to the past, use the past-tense verb 'liked' rather than 'like.' The sentence also needs a main verb after 'I'; 'made it' completes the sentence.

× When I was young, I like to fold paper various method ways to make airplane or something, and then I.

✓ When I was young, I liked to fold paper in various ways to make an airplane or something, and then I made it.

The plural noun 'ways' is needed because the speaker means more than one method. The phrase 'various ways' is the natural expression.

× When I was young, I like to fold paper various method ways to make airplane or something, and then I.

✓ When I was young, I liked to fold paper in various ways to make an airplane or something, and then I made it.

Use the preposition 'in' in the expression 'in various ways.'

× When I was young, I like to fold paper various method ways to make airplane or something, and then I.

✓ When I was young, I liked to fold paper in various ways to make an airplane or something, and then I made it.

The singular countable noun 'airplane' requires the indefinite article 'an' before it.

× When I was young, I like to fold paper various method ways to make airplane or something, and then I.

✓ When I was young, I liked to fold paper in various ways to make an airplane or something, and then I made it.

The final clause 'and then I' is incomplete because it has no verb or completed idea. Add a verb such as 'made' to complete the sentence.

× It is because to write physical letters is the best way to show my own mind of them and people like it.

✓ It is because writing physical letters is the best way to express my thoughts, and people like receiving them.

After 'because,' use the gerund phrase 'writing physical letters' to describe the activity. 'Express my thoughts' is the natural expression, and 'receiving them' correctly refers to the letters.

× It is because to write physical letters is the best way to show my own mind of them and people like it.

✓ It is because writing physical letters is the best way to express my thoughts, and people like receiving them.

The phrase 'mind of them' is not grammatically or naturally correct. Use 'express my thoughts' instead.

× It is because to write physical letters is the best way to show my own mind of them and people like it.

✓ It is because writing physical letters is the best way to express my thoughts, and people like receiving them.

The pronoun 'it' is unclear because it does not clearly refer to the letters. Use 'them' to refer to the plural noun 'letters.'

× It is because to write physical letters is the best way to show my own mind of them and people like it.

✓ It is because writing physical letters is the best way to express my thoughts, and people like receiving them.

The original sentence contains an awkward infinitive phrase and joins two ideas without clear structure. Use 'because writing...' and connect the two complete ideas with a comma and 'and.'

× Yes they do when I order the food from delivery there was many handwriting memos to thanks for order or when I was a birthday many people take.

✓ Yes, they do. When I order food for delivery, there are often handwritten notes thanking me for my order. On my birthday, many people give me handwritten cards.

Use 'there are' because 'notes' is plural. The original sentence describes a repeated situation, so the present tense is more appropriate than 'there was.'

× Yes they do when I order the food from delivery there was many handwriting memos to thanks for order or when I was a birthday many people take.

✓ Yes, they do. When I order food for delivery, there are often handwritten notes thanking me for my order. On my birthday, many people give me handwritten cards.

Use the plural noun 'notes' rather than the incorrect phrase 'handwriting memos.' Also, 'cards' is plural because the speaker refers to cards from many people.

× Yes they do when I order the food from delivery there was many handwriting memos to thanks for order or when I was a birthday many people take.

✓ Yes, they do. When I order food for delivery, there are often handwritten notes thanking me for my order. On my birthday, many people give me handwritten cards.

The answer describes a general or repeated experience, so use the present-tense verbs 'order,' 'are,' and 'give' rather than past-tense forms.

× Yes they do when I order the food from delivery there was many handwriting memos to thanks for order or when I was a birthday many people take.

✓ Yes, they do. When I order food for delivery, there are often handwritten notes thanking me for my order. On my birthday, many people give me handwritten cards.

Use the present participle 'thanking' to explain the purpose or content of the notes. The phrase 'to thanks' is incorrect because 'thanks' cannot follow 'to' in this form.

× Yes they do when I order the food from delivery there was many handwriting memos to thanks for order or when I was a birthday many people take.

✓ Yes, they do. When I order food for delivery, there are often handwritten notes thanking me for my order. On my birthday, many people give me handwritten cards.

Use 'for delivery' rather than 'from delivery.' Also, the correct phrase is 'on my birthday,' not 'when I was a birthday.'

× Yes they do when I order the food from delivery there was many handwriting memos to thanks for order or when I was a birthday many people take.

✓ Yes, they do. When I order food for delivery, there are often handwritten notes thanking me for my order. On my birthday, many people give me handwritten cards.

Use 'my order' and 'my birthday' because these nouns refer to specific things connected to the speaker. The phrase 'a birthday' is not appropriate in this context.

× Yes they do when I order the food from delivery there was many handwriting memos to thanks for order or when I was a birthday many people take.

✓ Yes, they do. When I order food for delivery, there are often handwritten notes thanking me for my order. On my birthday, many people give me handwritten cards.

The original answer combines several incomplete ideas without clear punctuation or conjunctions. Divide it into separate sentences and use clear time expressions such as 'when I order food' and 'on my birthday.'

× It's because there are many situations that need papers or pens or not something, so I have to take them when I go out.

✓ I carry them because there are many situations in which I need paper or pens, so I take them with me when I go out.

Use the uncountable noun 'paper' when referring to paper as a material. The original phrase 'papers or pens or not something' uses quantity and noun forms inaccurately.

× It's because there are many situations that need papers or pens or not something, so I have to take them when I go out.

✓ I carry them because there are many situations in which I need paper or pens, so I take them with me when I go out.

Use 'in which' to connect 'situations' with the activity that happens in those situations. The phrase 'with me' is also the natural prepositional phrase for carrying something.

× It's because there are many situations that need papers or pens or not something, so I have to take them when I go out.

✓ I carry them because there are many situations in which I need paper or pens, so I take them with me when I go out.

The original answer incorrectly uses 'or not something.' Use 'or something' only when giving an open-ended example. The corrected sentence clearly connects the reason with the result.

× It's because there are many situations that need papers or pens or not something, so I have to take them when I go out.

✓ I carry them because there are many situations in which I need paper or pens, so I take them with me when I go out.

The original sentence is difficult to understand because of the unclear phrase 'or not something' and the awkward structure. The corrected version states the reason and result in a clear grammatical structure.