Paper— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and clear: start with a concise topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., ‘made many crafts’), and give one or two specific examples with brief explanations. Use linking words (for example, so, because) to connect ideas and keep it under five sentences.

Example: Yes. I made many paper crafts when I was a child. For example, because I was interested in science, I often made diagrams of the human body and brain to help me study. These models helped me remember where organs and parts are located.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear topic sentence (e.g., ‘I liked making paper drawings and origami’). Correct tense and articles, and avoid repetition. Provide one specific detail and a short reason or effect, using a linking word such as ‘for example’ or ‘because’.

Example: I liked making paper drawings and folding paper aeroplanes as a child. For example, I would draw colourful pictures and then fold planes to test which design flew farthest, which was both fun and creative.

Suggestion: Answer directly, correct grammar (use ‘emails’ or ‘e-mail’, ‘faster’, ‘greeting’), and explain briefly with a specific example. Keep sentences short and coherent; use linking words like ‘however’ for contrast.

Example: No, I rarely write physical letters because I usually send emails or messages since they are faster. However, I still write handwritten birthday cards to my grandparents because they appreciate the personal touch.

Suggestion: Make the point clearly and give a specific reason or example. Correct grammar and wording (e.g., ‘older people’, ‘reply with letters’). Use linking words to make the reasoning logical and avoid vague phrases.

Example: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters today, especially older people who are less comfortable with phones. For example, my grandparents save letters because they value the memories and the personal sentiment.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer, correct small errors (remove redundant words), and add one brief specific example of when you might still use pen and paper. Use a linking word such as ‘because’ or ‘but’ for contrast.

Example: No, I usually don't carry paper and pens because I use my mobile phone to send texts and notes. However, I sometimes bring a small notebook when I travel to jot down addresses or ideas by hand.

× I made many crowd with the paper when I was a child.

✓ I made many crafts with paper when I was a child.

The noun 'crowd' is singular and means a group of people; the speaker intended 'crafts' (plural) to refer to many handmade items. Use the correct count noun 'crafts' and remove the unnecessary article 'the'. Suggestion: Learn common collocations (make crafts, make a crowd) and choose the noun that matches the intended meaning.

× I was interesting in sciences, so I mostly made a science craft, such as making a diagram of human body, human brain, etcetera.

✓ I was interested in science, so I mostly made science crafts, such as diagrams of the human body and the brain.

'Interesting' describes something that causes interest; the speaker's state should be 'interested'. 'Sciences' is awkward here; use singular 'science' or 'scientific subjects'. 'A science craft' should be plural 'science crafts' to match 'mostly'. 'Making a diagram of human body' needs article 'the' and plural 'diagrams' matches examples. Suggestion: Use correct adjective forms (interested vs interesting) and consistent noun number and articles.

× Well when I when I was a child I like to do many things with paper such as making a drawings and making a aeroplane of paper to in fly and enjoy for my entertainment.

✓ When I was a child, I liked to do many things with paper, such as making drawings and folding paper aeroplanes to fly for fun.

The sentence mixes past context ('when I was a child') with present verb 'like'; use past tense 'liked'. 'Making a drawings' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'making drawings'. 'Making a aeroplane of paper' needs 'a' -> 'a paper aeroplane' or 'folding paper aeroplanes'. 'to in fly' is incorrect word order; use 'to fly'. 'Enjoy for my entertainment' is unnatural; use 'for fun' or 'for my entertainment'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent with time markers and use natural collocations (fold paper aeroplanes, for fun).

× No, I don't really write a physical letter because whenever I want to wish or send a greetings to other I use mostly e-mail because it is more faster than a physical letter.

✓ No, I don't really write physical letters because whenever I want to send wishes or greetings to others I mostly use email because it is faster than a physical letter.

'A physical letter' should be plural 'physical letters' when speaking generally. 'Send a greetings' mixes singular article with plural; use 'send greetings' or 'send a greeting'. 'To other' should be 'to others'. 'Use mostly e-mail' reorder to 'mostly use email'. 'More faster' is incorrect comparison; use 'faster' (no 'more'). Suggestion: Use correct pluralization for general statements, correct pronouns 'others', and avoid double comparatives.

× But I use physical letters for a birthday wish to my grandparents goes it.

✓ But I use physical letters to send birthday wishes to my grandparents.

The original has incorrect word order and extra words ('goes it'). 'For a birthday wish to my grandparents' should be 'to send birthday wishes to my grandparents'. Suggestion: Use clear verb phrases (use letters to send) and place the recipient after the object.

× Yes, still people keep handwritten letters today because anyone who is old age that cannot use a mobile phone.

✓ Yes, people still keep handwritten letters today because some older people cannot use a mobile phone.

'Anyone who is old age' is ungrammatical; use 'older people' or 'people who are old'. 'Anyone' is indefinite and clashes with the intended plural; 'some' fits better. Suggestion: Use correct noun phrases for age groups ('older people', 'elderly people') and avoid 'old age' as a noun phrase in this context.

× So I can send a return and return letters for that people.

✓ So I can send replies or reply letters to those people.

'Send a return and return letters' is unclear and redundant. Use 'send replies' or 'reply letters'. 'That people' should be 'those people'. Suggestion: Use standard terms for responding (reply, response) and the correct demonstrative pronoun 'those'.

× No, I don't carry papers and pens with me as whenever I go outside because I have my own mobile phone.

✓ No, I don't carry paper and pens with me when I go out because I have my mobile phone.

'Papers' is usually uncountable in this context; use 'paper' or 'a notebook' depending on meaning. 'As whenever I go outside' is redundant; use 'when I go out'. 'My own mobile phone' is correct but 'my mobile phone' is more natural. Suggestion: Use uncountable nouns where appropriate ('paper') and avoid redundant time words ('as' + 'whenever').

× Whenever I want to send a text I use my mobile phone.

✓ Whenever I want to send a text, I use my mobile phone.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but needs a comma after the introductory clause. Tense usage 'want' and 'use' is appropriate for habitual action. Suggestion: Add a comma after 'text' for clarity and pause.