Paper— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, then briefly give one or two specific examples with a linking word. Avoid hesitations and repetition. Also correct minor grammar (use past tense consistently and avoid 'again' here).

Example: Yes, I have. I used to make origami and also practiced paper-cutting to create layered pictures. For example, I would cut colored paper into shapes and paste them to form scenes, which made my drawings look more vivid.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear topic sentence and use consistent tense. Use a linking word to add a specific detail. Give one concrete example or result to make the answer more vivid.

Example: As a child I mainly used paper for drawing. In addition, I enjoyed paper-cutting: I would layer colored paper to create collage pictures, such as a family portrait made from different textures and hues.

Suggestion: Give a concise direct answer, then provide a clear specific detail using linking words. Avoid unnecessary repetition and unclear references (e.g. 'UH').

Example: No, I don't write physical letters anymore. The last time was in fourth grade when I wrote to my grandfather, and my father mailed it for me at the post office.

Suggestion: Answer directly, then give a specific example and clarify any vague phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct awkward expressions (e.g. 'town for earnings' -> 'for work').

Example: Yes, I think people often keep handwritten letters from loved ones. For instance, my father has preserved letters his father wrote while working away from home because they are sentimental.

Suggestion: Good structure and relevance. Improve slightly by tightening phrasing and using present simple consistently, and add one specific example of what you sketch to enrich the answer.

Example: Yes, I always carry a notebook and pens because I study architecture and I like to sketch on the go. For example, I often sketch building facades or interesting street details when I see them.

× Yes, I have used paper for doing various curves.

✓ Yes, I have used paper to make various crafts.

The phrase 'for doing various curves' is unnatural; use infinitive 'to make' or gerund 'making' with correct noun. 'Make various crafts' or 'make curved designs' fits context. Use 'to make' for purpose after 'used paper'.

× I used to do origami and again I used to use paper cutting technique for a special type of drawing which name I cannot remember right at this moment but.

✓ I used to do origami, and I also used a paper-cutting technique for a special type of drawing whose name I cannot remember right now.

Run-on and awkward phrasing. 'Used to' is correct for past habit; change 'again I used to use' to 'I also used' and use possessive 'whose name' rather than 'which name'. Remove trailing 'but' and use 'right now'.

× In my childhood I used to draw a lot, so I use paper basically for drawing and in the paper cutting technique I use various colored paper to paste on each other to express a special photo.

✓ In my childhood I used to draw a lot, so I used paper mainly for drawing, and in the paper-cutting technique I used various colored papers and pasted them on each other to create a special image.

Tense inconsistency: 'used to' should be followed by past usage 'used' rather than present 'use'. 'Paper' plural 'papers' or 'pieces of paper' is better. 'Paste on each other' should be 'pasted them on each other' and 'express a special photo' is unnatural; 'create a special image' is clearer.

× No, I do not write physical letters now. I last wrote letters when I was in class four.

✓ No, I do not write physical letters now. I last wrote letters when I was in fourth grade.

'Class four' is nonstandard in this context; use 'fourth grade' or 'class four' depending on dialect. Keeping tense is fine; change to 'fourth grade' for clarity.

× It was to my grandfather.

✓ They were to my grandfather.

Pronoun-number mismatch: 'letters' is plural, so use 'they' not 'it'. Also 'were' agrees with plural.

× My father posted it to the UH. My father sent it to the post office.

✓ My father posted them at the post office.

Repetitive sentences and unclear 'the UH'. Combine into one clear past action: 'posted them at the post office.' If 'UH' was intended as a place, clarify full name; otherwise remove.

× I think people still keep handwritten letters if it is from someone special.

✓ I think people still keep handwritten letters if they are from someone special.

Pronoun and number agreement: 'letters' is plural so use 'they are' not 'it is'.

× Like my father kept the letters which he got from his father when he was in town for earnings.

✓ For example, my father kept the letters he received from his father when he was in town to earn money.

Use past simple 'kept' and 'received' (or 'got') consistently. 'For earnings' is unnatural; use 'to earn money'. Also 'which he got' can be simplified to 'he received'.

× Yes, I carry paper and pens with me when I go out because I am a student of architecture.

✓ Yes, I carry paper and pens with me when I go out because I am a student of architecture.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Provided to show no error matching listed types.

× Besides taking note, I love to sketch.

✓ Besides taking notes, I love to sketch.

Use plural 'notes' when referring to general note-taking. 'Taking note' singular sounds like 'noticing'.

× Whenever I found any interesting view, I like to sketch it out.

✓ Whenever I find an interesting view, I like to sketch it.

Tense mix: use present simple 'find' with habitual 'I like' to indicate current habit. 'Sketch it out' is informal; 'sketch it' is sufficient. Use 'an interesting view' rather than 'any interesting view' for natural phrasing.