Paper— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答时先直接回应问题，然后用一到两句具体细节支持并用连接词使表达更连贯。注意时态和词汇的准确性（例如：'crabs' 可能是 'crafts'，'paper planks' 不常用，可改为 'paper planes'）。避免冗长重复，最多5句。

Example: Yes, I used to make a lot of paper crafts when I was a child. For example, I often folded paper planes and hearts and sometimes made simple animals. I don't do it much now because I have less free time and there are many other forms of entertainment. So nowadays I only make small things occasionally for fun.

Suggestion: 开头先用一句主题句直接回答，接着用一两句具体例子说明你做什么、怎么做或送给谁。注意动词形式（drawed → drew），尽量用连词（for example, also, besides）让句子更流畅。

Example: I loved painting and drawing on paper as a child. For example, I would draw simple pictures and watercolour landscapes without formal lessons, and I often made handmade birthday cards which I sent to my friends. These little projects made me feel creative and connected to others.

Suggestion: 先肯定性回答（Yes/No），然后用一到两句说明原因并给例子。避免重复词汇（'physical cards feel more personal' 重复 'feel'），并用连接词如 'however' 或 'but' 清晰区分对比。

Example: No, I don't usually write physical letters anymore because I prefer sending messages or short videos for quick communication. However, I still write handwritten cards on special occasions, such as birthdays or anniversaries, because they feel more personal and meaningful.

Suggestion: 开头用简短明确的观点句，然后用具体例子说明你的看法。注意语法和词汇搭配（'still do handwritten letters' → 'still write handwritten letters'；'that word' → 'those words' 或 'that message'；'while' 用法不当）。描述情感时可稍作扩展但保持简洁。

Example: I don't think many people write handwritten letters these days, but people do keep special handwritten cards. For instance, I still keep a card from my school director that she gave me while my husband was in the ICU; her kind words really encouraged me during that tough time.

Suggestion: 学生回答缺失，需直接回应问题并补充一两个具体细节和情境。开头先说 Yes/No，再说明通常什么时候会带、带什么、以及原因。保持句子简短且连贯。

Example: Not usually, but I sometimes carry a small notebook and a pen when I know I'll need to take notes, for example at meetings or interviews. Otherwise I rely on my phone for quick notes.

× Yes, I have made many crabs with paper when I was a kid like paper planks, paper hearts.

✓ Yes, I made many crafts with paper when I was a kid, like paper planes and paper hearts.

句子中使用了“have made”（现在完成时）与明确的过去时间点“when I was a kid”冲突，应该用一般过去时“made”。另外原句中“crabs”和“paper planks”用词错误，猜测为“crafts”和“paper planes”。建议：谈及过去明确时间时用一般过去时；检查并使用正确名词拼写与搭配。

× I don't do that anymore now probably because I don't have much free time and there are so many other entertainment nowadays.

✓ I don't do that anymore, probably because I don't have much free time and there is so much other entertainment nowadays.

“anymore”与现在时搭配可以，但句中“there are so many other entertainment”中“entertainment”是不可数名词，不能用“many”。应改为“there is so much other entertainment”或“there are so many other forms of entertainment”。建议：注意可数/不可数名词的使用，选择匹配的量词（many/much）或改变名词为可数形式。

× When I was a kid I loved painting on paper. I never took any formal classes so I just drawed some simple random pictures for fun.

✓ When I was a kid I loved painting on paper. I never took any formal classes so I just drew some simple, random pictures for fun.

“drawed”是错误的过去式拼写，正确过去式为“drew”。此外“simple random pictures”缺少逗号以分隔形容词。建议：复习不规则动词过去式（draw→drew）；写作时使用标点分隔多个形容词以提高可读性。

× And I sent them out on my friend's birthday.

✓ And I sent them out on my friends' birthdays.

原句“my friend's birthday”表示只有一个朋友的生日；若意指每逢朋友的生日、对多人送出贺卡，应使用复数所有格“my friends' birthdays”。另外若只对某个朋友应保留单数并说明具体对象。建议：根据语境选择单数或复数的所有格形式以表达正确含义。

× No, if I want to send my briefings I just send a message or make a short video because it's more convenient and fun but I still write handwritten cards to my friends on special occasions because I feel physical cards feel more personal and meaningful.

✓ No. If I want to send brief information, I just send a message or make a short video because it's more convenient and more fun. But I still write handwritten cards to my friends on special occasions because physical cards feel more personal and meaningful.

句子过长且缺乏标点，需分成两句提高清晰度。“my briefings”用词不自然，改为“brief information”或“brief messages”。重复使用“feel”（"I feel physical cards feel...")造成冗余，应删去主观动词或其中一个“feel”。建议：使用更自然的搭配（brief messages/information），注意句子长度与标点，避免动词重复。

× I don't think there are many people still do handwritten letters nowadays, but we do keep handwritten cards.

✓ I don't think many people still write handwritten letters nowadays, but we do keep handwritten cards.

原句混用了“there are many people still do…”，结构不正确。应使用“many people still write…”或“If many people still write…”。“there be”结构在此不适合。建议：直接用“many people + verb”表达“很多人仍然做某事”。

× I still keep a card from our director of our school while my husband was at ICU and that word inspired and encouraged me through that tough time.

✓ I still keep a card from our school director that inspired and encouraged me while my husband was in the ICU during that tough time.

原句“from our director of our school”冗长且不自然，改为“from our school director”。“that word inspired and encouraged me”中“word”与上下文不匹配，卡片（card）或卡片上的话（message）更合适；且时态应为过去时“inspired and encouraged”。“at ICU”习惯说法为“in the ICU”。建议：使用更自然的短语顺序（school director），用“message”或直接用“that inspired me”，并注意介词搭配（in the ICU）。