Paper— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện độ tự nhiên và rõ ràng: trả lời trực tiếp, dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sửa lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ 'crap' → 'craft'), dùng liên từ để nối ý và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ loại mô hình, vật liệu, mục đích). Giữ dưới 4–5 câu.

Example: Yes, I have. I used to make paper crafts like origami birds and simple paper boxes. I followed online tutorials step by step, using plain paper and glue. I enjoyed making them because they were decorative and useful for storing small items.

Suggestion: Rõ ràng ý chính và chi tiết cụ thể: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sửa lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ 'weed paper' không đúng; có thể là 'make paper crafts'), giải thích chuyển đổi thói quen khi lớn lên. Dùng liên từ như 'but' hoặc 'however' để kết nối ý.

Example: As a child, I loved making simple paper crafts such as origami birds and boats. However, as I grew older I began using paper for notes and school projects rather than crafts. I still keep a few of my childhood creations as mementos.

Suggestion: Sửa ngữ nghĩa và cấu trúc: câu hiện tại rất lộn xộn và nhiều từ sai (ví dụ 'eyebrow','butt','bat','nose' không phù hợp). Nên trả lời rõ ràng rằng bạn hiếm khi viết thư tay nữa, nêu lý do cụ thể (email, điện thoại), và cho một ví dụ ngắn. Giữ dưới 4 câu.

Example: I rarely write physical letters now. These days I prefer emails and messaging apps because they are faster and more convenient. I might write a handwritten card for special occasions, though.

Suggestion: Tổ chức câu rõ ràng, dùng từ vựng chính xác và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ('Some people still keep letters'), giải thích lý do cả cho và chống (nostalgia vs convenience), dùng liên từ như 'because' và 'for example'.

Example: Some people still keep handwritten letters for sentimental reasons. For example, parents often keep letters from their children as keepsakes. However, many others prefer digital messages because they are easier to store and search.

Suggestion: Làm rõ ý chính và sửa lỗi từ vựng/ngữ pháp: thay những từ lẫn lộn ('bat','nose') bằng từ đúng ('bag','notes'). Trả lời trực tiếp ('Not really, I usually carry...'), giải thích lý do cụ thể (convenience, lightweight) và một câu kết. Giữ ngắn gọn và mạch lạc.

Example: Not really. I usually carry a small bag with a notebook and a pen for jotting down ideas. It is lighter and more convenient than carrying multiple books, so I only bring what I need.

× When I was trying, I was curious about things around me and another time my favourite do so was about making crap.

✓ When I was young, I was curious about the things around me, and one of my favorite things to do was making crafts from paper.

The original sentence has unclear structure and incorrect word choices ('trying', 'do so', 'crap'). It needs reordering and correct vocabulary to convey meaning. Use 'when I was young' to set the time, 'one of my favorite things to do was' as a correct expression, and 'making crafts from paper' for clarity. Suggestion: simplify clauses, replace wrong words with appropriate nouns and verbs.

× I tried to make it simple paper model like paper burst, paper sheet and often follow the step on the programme.

✓ I tried to make simple paper models like paper birds and paper sheets, and I often followed the steps on the program.

Problems include singular/plural mismatch, incorrect nouns ('burst' -> 'bird'), and verb tense/agreement. 'Models' should be plural to match 'like', 'follow' should be past tense 'followed' to match 'tried'. Use correct nouns and consistent tense. Suggestion: keep past tense when describing past activities and match number of nouns.

× Actually there are many ways for us to do weed paper as a child.

✓ Actually, there were many ways for us to make paper crafts as children.

'Do weed paper' is nonsensical and 'as a child' should match plural subject 'us' -> 'as children'. Use 'make paper crafts' or 'use paper' instead of 'do weed paper'. Also use past tense 'were' for past context. Suggestion: ensure prepositions and phrases match subject and meaning.

× I do love things from simple origami like a bird or a boat but when I grew up I used paper like a documentary for me.

✓ I still love simple origami, like birds or boats, but when I grew up I used paper as a way to record things about my life.

Tense mixing: 'do love' is present and 'when I grew up I used' is past—this contrast is acceptable but wording is awkward. 'Used paper like a documentary' is incorrect; use 'used paper as a way to record things' for clarity. Suggestion: express ongoing preference with 'still' and clarify purpose with 'used as'.

× Yes I used to, but now I use it not more often because I have eyebrow so I take note everything on my butt is very useful and helpful for me because when I go somewhere I just need to open my bat and I have a wide range of my nose instead of have a many nose.

✓ Yes, I used to, but now I don't use it as often because I rely on my phone to take notes; it is very useful because when I go somewhere I just need to open my phone and I have access to many notes.

Original has many incorrect words and tense/confusing phrases ('eyebrow', 'butt', 'bat', 'nose'). Use 'don't use it as often' for negative present frequency. Replace nonsensical nouns with 'phone' and correct expressions like 'take notes' and 'access to many notes'. Suggestion: use clear nouns and correct negative present constructions.

× Yeah, they still but some of them used for modern technology instead of writing and because now we can see that technology rapid increasingly rapidly.

✓ Yes, people still keep handwritten letters, but some have been replaced by modern technology for communication because technology is developing rapidly.

Sentence lacks verbs and has word order issues ('they still but some of them used for'). Use passive 'have been replaced' or active phrasing, and 'developing rapidly' instead of redundant 'rapid increasingly rapidly'. Suggestion: use complete clauses and avoid redundant adverbs.

× So we just need something small

✓ So sometimes we just need something small and convenient to communicate quickly.

Fragment: 'So we just need something small' is incomplete contextually. Expand to show purpose ('to communicate quickly'). Suggestion: complete the thought to explain why small items are preferred.

× Not really. I just came my bat because it's very useful and it can keep everything my nose.

✓ Not really. I just bring my bag because it's very useful and it can hold all my notes.

Incorrect verbs and pronouns: 'came my bat' should be 'bring my bag', and 'keep everything my nose' should be 'hold all my notes'. Use appropriate verbs for carrying (bring) and nouns (bag, notes). Suggestion: choose correct verbs and possessive phrases.

× So I just take them everywhere with me instead of a book a pen.

✓ So I take it everywhere with me instead of taking a book and a pen.

Pronoun-antecedent mismatch and missing articles: 'them' -> 'it' (referring to bag or phone), and 'a book a pen' needs 'a book and a pen'. Suggestion: make sure pronouns agree with their antecedents and include conjunctions.

× I feel sometimes a bit lighter than many books because

✓ Sometimes I feel a bit lighter than if I had to carry many books because the bag/phone is lighter.

Sentence is incomplete and lacks a comparative object clarity. Finish the comparison and state reason. Suggestion: complete the clause and clarify what 'lighter' is compared to.